Inspired by Brazilian artist Titi Freak, this failed cubist experiments plays with the idea of the collective values, beliefs, and experiences of humanity. It might also look good on a dark gray shirt.

I think a dark grey shirt would bring a nice sense of contrast into the mix. Very cool though start though. Also, the mouths of the figures might be opened a bit so it looks like their in the act of exhaling/talking.



If you get a chance please check out my critique here as well!

Show us how this image ends. or does it cut off abruptly as displayed?



could you crit my work?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/47967/Toro_Toro

Because of how highly stylized this image is, I find myself wanting to tip my head to the side to see it better when it's oriented this way - in other words, I feel like it's displayed the 'wrong way'. Just my opinion, but maybe try positioning the faces so they are right side up. Also, I would sort of like to see the full outline of their heads rather than having them cut off.

Love your work. Well done! Nice design, and I agree with Revvy Maybe try having the faces on the right hand side, facing left. Then.. I say submit it!



Could you offer any feed back on my designs? I would like to know weather or not they're ready for sunbmission...



http://www.threadless.com/critique/47778/Divine_Smoking



http://www.threadless.com/critique/47777/Little_Indian_Girl



Thanks.

Very well done.



However, I think the 'breath' should share the style of the faces (highlights and all).



Maybe some more vivid colors too. The pastels make it seem...flat.



Again great design though. Good luck!

Hey I like what you got goin on here. I would put it on a dark gray shirt, and maybe soften the black lines on the breath. The thick lines work around their heads, but are too rigid around their breath. Also I like the idea of them opening their mouths, but only if you orient it sideways so it doesn't look like something is pouring into their mouths. Really cool piece though, I would wear it. Please check mine out http://www.threadless.com/critique/47776/Night_and_Day

i really like it, i think i would like it to look more like they are exhaling. i dont like how the breath is cut off by the black border. i like the color choices and i agree i want to see it on a dark gray shirt.

Like the braiding of the breathing. Interesting with the climbing vining upward propulsion in contrast to the very still bodies.

This is the back of my second version

This is the front of my second version. Be sure to click on v.2 to see what the back looks like.

Oo, the colors are cool and the theme is unique, which I like! There are 2 things that I feel should be changed. I think the placement of the heads should be lower and at the very bottom of the shirt. They look awkward just sorta floating there.. And I think that big squre thing on the back that combines the breath shouldn't be so big or there at all, it's kinda random looking.. but other than that this thing is pretty awesome. I would also play around with some background colors! Like maybe black or a dark blue? Darker colors would look very cool with this shirt.

And if you're not too busy, a comment for my first submission would be very much appreciatied!

Nice!, great idea.I have only two comments about the design:

I think it would be better if the drawing does not end in a straight line. And the other suggestion is to do something with the white lines on the left. They don't seem to be part of the design, if you know what I mean.

Anyway I think with a few changes will be ready for submission!

I'd suggest taking off the white stripes too, and maybe centering a bit the front of the shirt! Great idea, dude!



Which one would you choose?

WOT. Why?!

interesting, id fix the way the image cuts off at the bottom.. that straight line at the bottom is rather annoying. perhaps make it fade out in some way

I love your style!! Great to see something artistic and free for interpretation.



Me too please…

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48427/Ghetto_Blaster

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http://www.threadless.com/critique/47843/Mixed_Tapes

This is a very striking design. So strong.



I agree with most of Ars Fera's points. The back design does look a bit random and I would also move it down the shirt so that the bottom of the design lines up with the bottom of the tee.



I'd probably lose the white lines and just have the 3 coloured lines fade into nothing by mid-back of the shirt.



I'm really keen to see how this develops --(don't change anything about the 3 faces!)



If you've got the time, I'd appreciate it if you could score my designs:

Never mind the tigers and

Pre-loved Kitties

the all around concept is interesting. I think that the design could be placed at the complete bottom, so that we don't see the line at the bottom...?

yup..i agree bout the placement.Bottom!!

if u dont mind,check out mine

NICE !

http://www.threadless.com/profile/300469/Jebs

This is the back of my third version.

Okay. I corrected the alignment of the heads. The mandala seemed too rigid and made little sense with the over all image, so I redid the back completely. Let me know what you guys think!

yeah.This one looks better.I think its ready to sub!

thnks for ur comment on Kings Throne.

check out my first sub,

Knight Tale

i haven't seen this color palette before. It's great. sub it.

btw, thanks for your critique. i appreciate it.

It looks done.

Submit it.



Help me with my critique?

Hey, nice design! I think you can submit it without any problems, the only thing I think that you might change is on the back, where the colors mix with white, some curves could be more rounded, but this is just a VERY little detail... Anyway, good luck when you submit it, and thank you for the comment on Payback!

I really like the color theme, its unique.



I might have shifted it a little to the left so the common breath theme wasnt lost from a front view though.

Back from v2 is the best.



help me out?

Thanks for the vote.



You know I dig this design and I think the back is a step in the right direction.



The back is just a bit too much at the moment. I'd lose all of the white bits and just have the colours fade into nothing. It doesn't have to take up a lot of space just as soon as the three lines move on to the back-- start to fade them out.

Hey Strickenbrow



This is a really cool design! Very trippy. I agree with Tigerbill with the back of the T-shirt...i think its a little too much when it spreads to the whole back area (v4). Maybe you can try merging the breath lines into one stream that contains the 3 colours?

Hm. Yeah, the back is a little crazy. Maybe you could try eliminating the back, making the heads a little smaller, moving them a little to the left side of the shirt, and uniting the breaths that way. Actually, I think it would look best without the breaths at all, but then you would lose the idea behind your image, and I'm not sure how you would replace it.

Hm. Yeah, the back is a little crazy. Maybe you could try eliminating the back, making the heads a little smaller, moving them a little to the left side of the shirt, and uniting the breaths that way. Actually, I think it would look best without the breaths at all, but then you would lose the idea behind your image, and I'm not sure how you would replace it.

I really like the color palette! The concept is really neat, but I, too, think I'd have to agree that the back is just a tad busy - the idea of the breaths combining into one is really neat - I see a "rope" or a braid type appearance when I see them combining into one...? Like what they are doing in version 4, but gradually getting tighter/smaller into one singular stream....

interesting colors i must say.

Thanks for the comment on my design! It was submitted already lol, you commented on the actual submission, not the design :P I was confused when I read your comment lol

Oo this looks a lot better! The back looks great now!

I think this is ready!

you commented on the actual submission, not the critque*

I liked the back better the first time, but you were right to move the heads down. nice job.

nice work...agree on the back...maybe a random and irregular swirl or warp will work better...keep up the gud work



plz comment on mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48828/colourful_bliss

thx