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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 01 '09
a spaceman eating up the galaxy...what do ypu guys think?...is it good?...should i scrap the idea away...any suggestion?
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Tigerbill on Jul 01 '09
Really cool idea. I like this.
The only bit I'd change is the sauce/blood on the planets. |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 01 '09
@tigerbill: you mean less sauce? or make it look more flowy?
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Comfortador on Jul 01 '09
Very cool. I agree with that the sauce on the planets needs changing or scrapping - it obscures recognition of each being a planet. Also, a more defined mouth might be nice. I like the text at the bottom a lot. NIce work.
If you get a chance please check out my critique here as well! |
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donlope01 on Jul 01 '09
Nice idea, maybe try to add him a giant mouth, with funny teeth??
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 01 '09
oh...a mouth eh..i guess that make more sense on the design...ill try to add that in
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I would say lose the planets all together. Its a strong enough idea without them. Some teeth might look cool though.
take a look at mine?http://www.threadless.com/critique/46450/It_s_a_beautiful_judgment_day |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 01 '09
okay i added a mouth...do the planets need to be remove?
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I like it a lot, not sure text is needed but if you think it's essential I would try to make it blend into the design more smoothly
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 02 '09
i change the concept literaly...i want to keep both the planet and the astronault...much better?
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 02 '09
bump any suggestion on it?
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I enjoy it a lot! It seems though that one arm is missing, i would try to work on that
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harturo123 on Jul 02 '09
Yes, this version ius much better. I think the astronaut will look better in black.
Could you please vote for my design |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 02 '09
@Ivvantobealone:lol...its not missing an arm...well the left arm is being tuck behind...does the perspective seems strange?
@haruto123:well i dont want to lose the galaxy texture for the suit |
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Yes that's what i meant, the left side seems incomplete maybe the suggestion of a hand. I also love the texture of the suit, don't change that
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 02 '09
okay i see what you mean..i try to add the hand
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pollyonair on Jul 02 '09
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Brightwood on Jul 02 '09
I like your spaceman. There is a huge audience for spaceman on TL. I also thought something bit his arm off. The texture of the suit is great. But it is in contrast with the flatness of the red. Something needs to bring the red some dimension to make it work with the spacesuit colors. Keep going. This has potential.
Would you check out a new one I have in critique. I will not write on my clothes. |
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bhitz29 on Jul 02 '09
i agree with Ivvantobealone the first thing i thought was that his arm got ripped off in space.... mayb just adding a little elbow sticking out would give a better idea of his arm behind his back.....great idea though
please help critique mine Big Fun with a Big Wheel |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 02 '09
i added the other hand with everyone request...and expand his imagination and dreams...any suggestion?...i will upload the design on tee soon.
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ekirkdesign on Jul 02 '09
this is cool, I might add the galaxy texture you have in the guy into the rocket and planet too.
check out mine: http://www.threadless.com/critique/46323/The_Bird_Tree |
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Adhesive Hippo on Jul 02 '09
No, keep the texture on the person, but make it cover his whole person, and maybe make it a bit darker.
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I'm loving it, great progress. I agree maybe a little more of the bluish textutre on the guy, not too much,just a bit
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 03 '09
So its alomost done..i think im gonna add more stuff for his imagination and try experimenting different colour...by the way does his left foot look a bit bright?
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Kim Mak on Jul 03 '09
Wow this looks awesome! I really like his moustache and glasses.
And yes, his left foot looks a bit bright, perhaps you could darken it a little. Really nice work! :) |
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Kim456 on Jul 03 '09
yes left foot too bright, I don't think you even need the galaxy thing it is a lovely little illo as is
would appreciate your feedback |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 03 '09
okay i darken the left leg and change the colour to gradient colour...i think this is about ready...what do you guys think?
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
does the gradient look better?
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Tigerbill on Jul 04 '09
You're going to hate me for saying this--
I like V1 and V2 best-- Current version looks good but the early design was really good. My ultimate vision of this design is V2 with the type removed and the sauce changed to a mustard colour. |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
wow really?...i thought this version was the best...ahah anyone else dis agree?
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xeroefx85 on Jul 04 '09
Im liking it, but it needs work. Maybe if he was on the planet and the ship was flying away with him holding onto the string it would make more sense, and the way i vision it, it would look better too! Good luck!
If you could give mine a look, that would be great! http://www.threadless.com/critique/47658/jelly_beans |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
hmm thats a good idea but here im trying to show this guy holding a rocket and planet ballon, dreaming/imagining himself flying through outer space and having a galaxy adventure...does it makes sense?
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allblabandnolab on Jul 04 '09
hmmm i like the style of it. i didn't understand the meaning/point/story/whatever until you just explained it.
maybe if you made it so you could see the guy in the window of the space ship, and did something different with the thought bubble things around his head. like... what if they were stars and ships and planets but not arranged like they're exploding from his head?? i don't know, but right now they confuse me :/ |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
alright i try to make it more clear than...next version is almost done =)
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Kim456 on Jul 04 '09
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
ok this is my full presentation...i make his thinking more galaxy like...no explosion..make it more proportional...fix the guys on the spaceship...im preety sure its done...anyone disagree...and whats wrong with the round shadow kim456?
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slydex on Jul 04 '09
hi, for me, there's too much Symmetry in it (first and foremost the arms). The round shadow too, not natural (like a bad shadow in a cheap videogame). The shoes need some works, maybe just without the white lines, i dont know. The rocket like wildfire
La nouvelle de leur mariage s'est répandue comme une traînée de poudre. News of their marriage spread like wildfire need more accuracy. the rest of the design is very cool, i like it a lot! :) |
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slydex on Jul 04 '09
The rocket like wildfire need more accuracy. sorry i've past the text translation of the word^^. I don't speak english ;)
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
lol...i think i understand what you mean haha
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
anyone else...what do you think?
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 04 '09
i adjusted the arm symmetry, changed the shoe a bit a and corrected the shadow...and it looks quiet perfect...any suggestion..if not i sub it =)
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 09 '09
my design is up for voting...do vote =)
vote here |
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 09 '09
bump^^ vote
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PencilPlusPaper on Jul 10 '09
5 more days left...vote
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again i missed your critique! i should go often on threadless these days...
i think it's a pretty good design. The presentation is nice, but i would have got rid of the pattern you used for te presentation (tee shirt pattern), it's disturbing :/ i would also hav put more colors on the spaceship + planet. But it's too late, i will vote in a few seconds ;) |
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