Hello,

Here is a first try on an idea.

I am not sure about different things:

-About the frame, but what can I put behind the butterfly if there is no frame? Let it just like that?

-The english, I don't know if the sentence is correct...

-The fonts used

-Any other things you may have noticed.



Thank you for your comments!!

maybe make the word Acupuncture larger or bold.

It's a great idea, I like it a lot.

The frame is nice, but maybe a line of shadow on the inside of the left part, maybe more of a shadow beneath the butterfly too.

The English is all correct!

I would also make the pin more noticeable, it took me a while to see it. Maybe make it look silver?

make the pin stand out more...the frame looks great but I think you don't need it...

critique mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/47100/My_Pre_Loved_Cup_of_Coffee

thanks!

cute concept. the frames texture doesn't seem consistent with the rest of the image.



check out mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/44926/Stovehenge

You don't need the frame, I think it would work if it looks like it's pinned on to the shirt. Maybe if you make on of them "list designs" like add 8 more scenes where like alternative medicine won't work on animals :P here's a list on alternative medicine from wiki. Maybe have a mole do colortherapy or something as one of them. Keep it up



If you got time please crit me

Alright, thank you for your comments, currently working on v2...any comments regarding the font and how the text appear?? I think it does not look good, but don't know how to change it.



@askel: nice idea...I will study the concept!

Here is a new version:

-I removed the frame (I think it looks better like that, let me know your opinion)

-I accentuated the butterfly shadow

-I changed the text font and added a shadow to this font too.



Well, I hope you like it!

Still, I forgot to change the pin colour...in the next version!!

I like more the first version.



Could you please vote for my design

Haha, I really like this. Clever idea. Like you mentioned, I would definitely change the color of the pin to silver. The drop shadow on the lettering is awful. It really hurts your legibility. I think I'd get rid of it completely (the shadow on the butterfly and the label card looks good, though). And I'm not sure about the font. It's okay, but maybe you could try doing the letters by hand? I feel like hand-drawn type is almost always more interesting than a standard font in designs like this.

I really like the concept, the idea is great, i'm just not to sure about the execution atm. I'm not keen on the font, but i like the text. Mabye if you made it into a circular badge style design and bent the text around the butterfly it would work better?



The butterfly is great, i wouldn't change that at all, but i'm not sure if the label underneath is necessary.



Please could you critique my design if you have time http://www.threadless.com/critique/47504/Natural_Habitat

this is an interesting idea/concept!



u might wanna make the pin's needle color to white/light grey/silver so its obvious..minor details issue.



keep it coming, curious to see the placement too.



whts ur take on mine?

Hi,

What's new on v3....Well:

-The pin is silver.

-I changed the font and remove that awful shadow :D

-I added 3 butterflies playing with the letters...only a try to know what you think of them. I think that if I happen to keep them in the design, I will try to put shadows since it actually look a bit flat.



Let's go with your critiques!

donlopez, now tht the pin's needle is visible, its perfect! (to me at least hehe). U R getting warmer here!



the additional b'flies add depth to it too..nice work! might wanna bring the b'fly above the word 'butterflies' a bit lower, closer to the text, more realistic.







i agree with u, adding shadow esp. on the main b'fly would do great effect on tee :)



last but not least, have u considered bright colors to replace the b'fly's wings (currently brownish)? i'd say bright colors would make it universal on most tees :)



help me keep my imagination frm going astray!

hahaha. Nice. I think it might be more effective if there weren't the other butterflies flying around. Maybe just have the one centered with the pin through it. Or, make it a display of four different species setup in two rows of two.



I'm interested in seeing how this progresses. Good luck.



If you have a chance I'd love some feedback on the following.

In The Weeds

& maybe a vote for

Someone Loved Them Once



Thanks

make the head of the pin red...and remove those 3 butt...

this font works fine with your concept;)

critique mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/47100/My_Pre_Loved_Cup_of_Coffee

thanks!

OK, so I have one pro and two against the little butterflies..any other opinions?

As far as I am concerned, I would like to let only one of those 3 little butterflies, but at least keep one...maybe on the back of the shirt.

yes! remove those 3 butts! you no neee that! anyway..cool idea/design!



good luck! :)

no need! :P

OK..that won't seem to simple?

Very clever concept. The text is very funny, but slightly blocky in this version. Better than V.2, but I think V.1 did the best job of incorporating the text into the overall design. Perhaps a less obtrusive and bold font. Also, a lighter shirt color would look great.



If you get a chance please check out my critique here as well!

Hello!

So in this version, not a lot of work for me :)

I got rid of the little butterflies, not even letting one (so if anyone think that I should keep one, let me know)

I also changed the bckgd colour...I love the contrast between the blue and the orange...anyway, it's just for the presentation because I don't know if it will look OK on a shirt...any opinion?

And finally, as someone suggested, I changed the pin colour and thank you, I think it looks better now :D



Any critiques??

I think this has progressed really well. the new background/shirt color is way better and the red at the head of the pin really makes it pop.



I'd say unless there's anything else that you want to change you're ready to submit.



Good luck.



If you have a chance I'd love some feedback on the following.

In The Weeds

& maybe a vote for

Someone Loved Them Once



Thanks

i think this is a very clever idea! i like it best on the blue....would love to see it up on a shirt!



check out my 1st sub: space camp, its the last day to vote!

OK, I will post a version with placement on the shirt next time.

Any other comments??

donlopeo1, i'd still stick to my earlier suggestion of making the b'fly wing a bright color..it'd contrast well with tees, ths is my reason. but the final call is urs.



the rest is neat :) i likeeee!



drop by my design n drop a crit or 2 if u can ;)

I'm glad you changed that to red:)...I think you are ready to submit now!good luck!

critique mine(new version):

http://www.threadless.com/critique/47100/My_Pre_Loved_Cup_of_Coffee

thanks!

Clever. I'd like to see the placement, but the design looks fab.

Would you mind reviewing mine in return? Thanks!

I definitely like the text a lot more

thank you for your help and comments.

@azarello: I tried other colours...but in fact I like it simple and black...so I'm sorry, I think I will let it like that. Thank you for the suggestion anyway!

Hi!

Another version, before submitting a flash presentation file.

This is just to know what do you think of the design placement on the shirt, and what is the best tshirt option for the presentation?

Thank you for your help!!

Perhaps go for a cartoony version. Can you sketch? You could sketch the butterfly laying down for acupuncture and its a bug collector tricking the butterfly

Sharp!



Check mine

Tastes like honey

So any thought about the best shirt design between those 3 ones?

One thing you might wanna change though before you submit is the title - It's med I cine, not med E cine.

Alright, thank you for the correction :)

Medecine is the french word :D

ready to sub!!!



would appreciate your feedback

Sorry, forgot to say, could you help e out please?

Hi,

I think I'm almost ready with this one...

What do you think of the tee I choosed for the presentation...don't you think it's a bit "dangerous" to use a yellow tee??

I think I will do a 3 slides presentation, with the design, a close-up view and a tee slide, using this one.

Thank you all for your comments.

hmm i prefer yellow tee..but y'd u say its dangerous color option to go with?

Usually people that present their designs on a yellow tee get lots of remarks concerning the tshirt colours... that's why I was asking...

But I do like it on yellow!

I do like the yellow tee, and the whole design (especially the nameplate) seems too small, but besides that, i would go ahead and submit

Allright...

The thing is that I have to put it this size or separate the last sentence on two fifferent lines...

nice and cool design!



can you help me with mine?

http://threadless.com/critique/51907/The_Girl

bump, any other advices??

If you think yellow's too dangerous, go with cream, but nothing new or interesting ever comes without bravery. The text is fine like it is.

i think the text could be finessed some. like, acupuncture: kills insects. it's a bit wordy as it is and the punchline can hit harder if you phrase it a little simpler.

I love this design on the yellow tee. Everything is fine the way it is. Thanks for critiquing mine.

i thought i already commented on this. hmmm. whatever. thx for your comment. here is mine: SUBMIT this one. i think it's done!

creative :)) maybe you can place some needles near butterfly if it not breaking drawing. Maybe you could pin white square with small needle.

I really like the idea, not too sure how much threadless likes slogans like these in designs though. I'd prefer a different shirt colour, maybe grey.

Yes I know about the slogans, but don't know how to do without it to make the joke obvious.

Wow! Such strong taste against yellow! I love the latest version of this one!



I don't really have any other comments (as almost all has been covered in previous ones) except maybe increase the pin slightly as it is a bit difficult to see it going into the butterfly from a distance.



I guess maybe upload a flash presentation on this one and wham, bam, done! Excellent!

great joke

great desging



a winner





could you check mine



http://www.threadless.com/critique/51817/BIG_BAND

I want this so bad!!!! It's so great!!!! Please submit it!!!



And please check out mine if you get the chance!

Kawaii Ramen

this is def the best version and there's nothing wrong with the shirt colour - it suits it really well actually.

i still think you might be able to get away with this as a slogan though - i worry you'll get down-voted because of that, but maybe not

I think you should submit it as a slogan as well, it seems like that's more important to the shirt than the design. As far as continuing with this as a design, it's great on yellow, people only knock yellow when it's bright and doesn't fit, this is fine. The text does look a little off, though. Maybe try matching it to the typeface of the identification card.



A comment and a score would be lovely

Awesome! And it could be as a slogan too.

Thank you all for your critiques...

I think I will keep the line, even if it's a bit risky.

I don't see the point of having a butterfly with a pin on it if there is no explanation to this.

Next critique submission will be the flash presentation...



A little question to those who are used to Threadless...am I allowed to submit this as a design and the sentence as a slogan as well, or do I have to choose??

You can do both, you can even continue submitting the slogan with slight variations as much as you want, because each time you phrase it a little differently you will get a different approval rating. Another thing to do if you want to be a little more serious with your slogans is to join a blog of forum for slogans, this increases the attention to your slogan by a landslide.

Nice one! I didn't like the plate when I saw it first it was popping out - but I got used to it :o and it is probably necessary for the meaning - just thinking, it would be a great illustration for acupuncture ads! "not on butterflies, BUT ... :D"

Hello,

Here is the flash presentation I plan to submit

Do you think tha "rd slide is necesary?

Thanks for your help!!!

bump

To show the quality of your work, I'd keep the third slide. I'm a fan of the design!



Please comment on my critique.

Thank you for your comment, I commented yours.

Any other advices?

I like this one!

Thanks Yuhki!

Definitely keep the 3rd one!

funny idea!

the edges of your butterfly look realy rough. Are they supposed to look like that?

thanks for the crit on mine!

Oh yes, the butterfly wings look a bit rough...I will fix that in the next version!

Nice pixel-work. I like the humor.

keep the detail pic...but am i the only one constantly having trouble with this certain kind of flash presentation? it's almost impossible to click on these buttons at the bottom since the window keeps on dissapearing, when i wanna click them...then i have to roll over again to catch a button on the third or fourth try...hmm..strange. nonetheless: great work. fix those edges and you'll be good to go. you most certainly got my 5!

I think that the roughness on the butterfly wings (if you're referring to the diamond-shaped halftones?) adds to the gritty-ness of the design. The capital 'D' on does makes it look like it's a definition of the word 'Acupuncture'. If that's what you're trying to convey, I'd add a :colon: after the 'Acupuncture', and a .period. after the 'butterflies'. But, then again, maybe that's the reason I've never gotten my designs printed. :D

No, for me the roughness is about the outside of the wings (in black).

This is very funny.

The typography lets it down though

Hello,

Here is a new presentation with a cleaner 3rd slide.

The thing is that my trial of flah ended and I add to use another freeware...so tell me also what you think of the presentation?

Thanks!

Nice ide, maybe try some differents fonts?





Maybe if you have time you can comment /critique my first submissions The Sword and Spider Food

I really appreciate it, thanks!

So you mean different fonts on the design itself or on the presentation?

The shirt font is fine, but the presentation font should be changed.



Mind helping me?

My Design-Click Here

Don't change anything! And submit it!

If You have some time check my zebra ;)

I would get rid of the shading on the pin. it looks weird. I like the idea though. if you get a minute, could you look at my design Kangaroo Mobster

Thank you for your comments.

In fact I think my design is at a non-return point and unless someone comes with a big point, I'm not going to change it.

But I may change my presentation...especially the font since it's true it doesn't look good.

I love the design so much. After checking out the older versions I think this one is finally ready to go.

But yeah, change the font on the presentation. maybe even to the one you used on the shirt.



give me some help if you get the chance please :)

http://www.threadless.com/critique/52231

The design seems ready to me, Submit it!



comment on mine if you have the chance

I agree with others in that the design looks mature enough to wear already. The presentation font could be a little better, but seriously:



http://www.planetizen.com/files/u23372/calvin.jpg



Presentation is not nearly as important as the design itself.

Hehe, love calvin & Hobbes

Thanks for the advices...for the one who said don't submit, can I know the reason why?? it may help me.

Hello!

Here is my last version before submitting.

I changed the font of the presentation and I'm happy with it. If you have any comments, these are the last moments before I submit!!! Thanks for your help everybody

bump

anyone?

don't forget to change how you spelt "medicine" in the title before subbing

Yes you're right thank you!

does it meant to?

hey, this is great!



I know you've gone through a simplification process . . . but honestly I'd get rid of the little tag entirely. I understand you're trying to help put the whole thing in context, but I would work on making the pin more visible.



it's a fantastic idea though!



any thoughts on my "threadless loves Geeks" idea?

Sports Geek

Thans for your comment biglogan, but I can't see how people would understand that this is a joke and not only a butterfly in a collection if there is no text?

Biglogan has right - the pin should be more visible.

Unfortunatelly for the pin, I pushed this into the running...(I had to after all these days :D)

Soon up for your votes!!