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looks cool. the halftones seem out of place tho
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FreckleTiff on Jun 14 '09
I'm not sure what method I should use to color it :(
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Smokingornon on Jun 14 '09
hmmm... I honestly do not like the halftones. In terms of colouring, go with everything else you have so far. You can either use this colour scheme on a white shirt to be striking, or try to blend them a bit into a paticular hue to fit another colour. Personally, I'd go with the white. it's a cute idea, and i think the execution is great so far, minus the halftones of course. Cut them out and I'll try to come have another look.
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greenttentacle on Jun 14 '09
Freckle,
Interesting piece! I like it, but i feel the orange draws way to much attention. I think the design needs something else to bring the viewer in, like maybe an alley cat? Something odd could lift it. Love the colouring style (paint?), but i agree with agrimony - the halftone looks out of place. Thanks for giving feedback on my piece, Castles in the Sand. The wave looks like fingers because it's supposed to look like that! :) I've uploaded a new version. Maybe it will look more to your liking now? |
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FreckleTiff on Jun 14 '09
Ok so of course there are alot of changes here. I want the design to have that old school glittery shirt type of feel. I think it looks great on black, but could also go on cream, yellow, and light blue, maybe green.
Let me know what you guys think! |
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sethmcomber on Jun 14 '09
This is a great improvement, especially on the coloring. I think the black looks good, but maybe try other dark colors.
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S. emily on Jun 14 '09
wow, this is funny, and I looked at the first one...massive improvement. It comes across a bit flat...but it depends on what you want. Flat is definitely not bad. Also the placement is spot on
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FreckleTiff on Jun 14 '09
Bumpity bump
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the loose seal on Jun 14 '09
any chance we can see what it looks like without the outline of brown? not sure if it makes it pop more or less to have it.
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Savick on Jun 14 '09
Yeah the outline of brown kind of makes it look like its in a wrapper right now.
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barn07 on Jun 14 '09
Savick, I agree with the wrapper. It looks like a clear wrapper is around it. The texture on the brown outline I think is too much too. Maybe get rid of the brown outline all together, see how that looks? How about a green shirt, like a kelly green. I like the design though, nice work :)
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shakethesheets on Jun 14 '09
the texture's an improvement, but it looks like a sticker slapped on a shirt. better without the outline.
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i would say without the brown wrap bit and white dots , but id also say give it eyes lol :P
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FreckleTiff on Jun 14 '09
It is suppose to have a sticker feel. It is modeled after those 1970's iron on glitter shirts. :-/
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spork23 on Jun 14 '09
I like it alot. The sticker feel works for me.
Thanks for critting my shirt. I think yours is ready to be submitted. Good job. :) |
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Amundaz on Jun 14 '09
I like this. Id like to see it with the the outline.
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PFK on Jun 14 '09
I seem to be the only one who liked the original version of your design a lot better, I even really liked the half tones. I think the dark colors and glitter texture on the new version take away from your awesome original design; I feel like a lot of your details are now lost. With the new colors I think it looks more like a regular cheeseburger than what you originally intended; therefore, I am (honestly) curious if others just like the idea of a giant cheeseburger better than a garbage burger.
P.S. your original design kind of makes me want to eat garbage, haha. |
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propagandhi101 on Jun 14 '09
not diggin the texture you have over it
yah and no outline mind lookin at mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/46472/Aww_Shit |
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FreckleTiff on Jun 14 '09
On different colors
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musicaldrummer on Jun 14 '09
i like the yellow
but im not sure about the outline maybe have it fade or just drop it all together |
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raihan42 on Jun 14 '09
I like the beige one. I agree, it shouldn't have an outline, maybe sunbursts!
quick google search got me this: http://psdfan.com/freebies/freebies-high-res-sunbursts-free-download/ |
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Sibos on Jun 14 '09
Nice shirt colors. I think I'd agree to lose the outline, or make it something more distinct from the graphic's colors. The outline now just looks like a mustard stain behind the sandwich, so maybe just black would look better.
Overall it's a really great illustration, and it makes me un-hungry! |
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FreckleTiff on Jun 15 '09
I removed the boarder, however I still want the burger to be glittery. I know Threadless has a glitter texture or something right? How does it work on green?
Thanks guys! |
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matthewlaud on Jun 15 '09
At first I was weirded out by that odd texture, but... GLITTER?! I want that so bad right now. How do you do that? I'm guessing there's some weird protocol for it, but idk.
As far as color, I have to say light blue and cream are my favorite. I'm not sure green works for me, but it's possible I am in the minority on that one. Check mine! IMAGINATION |
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DonCardona on Jun 15 '09
damn i loved it on all the colors you had it on! lol
Great art work!!! nice job!!!! |
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FreckleTiff on Jun 15 '09
Thanks Matthew! Yes glitter! I want it to have that 1970's shirt feel. :) I will check out yours.
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Devonaire on Jun 15 '09
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the loose seal on Jun 16 '09
what kind on glittery? all ver or just on some?
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FreckleTiff on Jun 16 '09
@ the loose seal
All over! The whole image. |
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Risdiansah on Jun 16 '09
i want one please with soft drink :p ... Submit !
Please see my design and tell me what you think :) http://www.threadless.com/critique/45855/Ugly_Duckling Thx |
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chlowee on Jun 16 '09
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Icecream4Crow on Jun 16 '09
if your going to go glitter why not go with some more saturated neon colours - add some bright pinks and yellows etc -
love the design !!, comp, but not the green shirt - simple black or white for me. cheers Zombie w' tie |
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greenttentacle on Jun 16 '09
Freckle, whatever you did, it's working! This burger looks surprisingly tasty.... Brilliant on green. I think it's ready for submission. Really attractive.
Could you maybe also critique mine? It's Castles of Sand V8. Oh, also, if you haven't yet, i'd love a vote/ comment on my submission Psychedelic Soup. Tell your friends :P Thanks! |
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AngelaM on Jun 16 '09
HAha cool idea!
I'm digging the green back ground would love to see it in cream or a light blue like matthew suggested. |
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snake1984 on Jun 16 '09
this is cool...I love most the version on the black tee..thats awsome
if u have a minute,please comment mine My favorite toy |
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FreckleTiff on Jun 16 '09
Bump
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FreckleTiff on Jun 16 '09
I added some shirt colors :)
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FreckleTiff on Jun 16 '09
Mega Burger has been submitted for approval! Thanks to all for your very insightful critiques :)
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