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Skiot on Jun 10 '09
Thought I'd test the water about this concept... very much Work In Progress, so I'd appreciate some feedback!
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Skiot on Jun 11 '09
I'm not able to work on this for the next few days, but I've been thinking that when I do, I'll move the bottom/smallest guy to the back of the t-shirt.
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jhhoughton on Jun 11 '09
mmm good design, but maybe make the point that those are leaves, and maple leaves at that, more prominent. its kinda hard to tell
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Skiot on Jun 11 '09
Fair enough, but in my defense, it's tricky to make a leaf bend and curl while keeping it completely recognizable as a maple leaf. I have to agree though, I will work on their form in the next version. Thanks for the crit btw.
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JanDeA on Jun 12 '09
I think it is a great idea and I agree the shape of the leaf should be brought out more. Color is great!!
Check my work out? http://www.threadless.com/critique/46098/Ninja_on_board_in_Yellow |
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graywhaleeatery on Jun 12 '09
These are very cute! I think that the biggest problem is the one that you pointed out yourself - it's hard to have them curl AND be readily recognizable. Good luck!
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Amundaz on Jun 12 '09
I love this! Its so cute.
I don't think theres nothing wrong with it. But you were right about the curl thing. Check mine out? No arms? Party! |
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Skiot on Jun 12 '09
Thanks for the comments everyone and I hope to get a V2 up soon!
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Skiot on Jun 15 '09
Please let me know if this is heading in the right direction!
Should I have the little guy on the back of the t-shirt? Are the colors looking good? |
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Skiot on Jun 16 '09
Maybe a different color and some texture in the tree would help?
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silver_autumn on Jun 16 '09
I really like this design. But I agree, some texture in the tree would help, but maybe just some more detail in the tree. Maybe even show the trunk of the tree...or maybe not. Just an idea I'm throwing out there. Whether or not that would work- I have no idea.
Check out my design if you have a few minutes. http://www.threadless.com/critique/46427/Splatter_Pattern |
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Carixpig on Jun 16 '09
Hey Skiot, thanks for your help with mine.
I like the colours you have chosen for both v2 and v3 (I like v2 better) but I think the foliage needs some work. The flying leaves are cool but the foliage looks unfinished. Perhaps with your v2 colouurs you can dispense with the white altogether and use hte dark shirt colour to create you shading, faces and details. you'd lose hte outline on the floating leaves but that isn't necessarily a loss for your design. I prefer the foliage in V2 i.e. without the extra leaves sketched in. I don't think you need the rear side print. |
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Skiot on Jun 16 '09
@silver_autumn: I was considering a tree trunk, but not quite sure how that'd fit it, and I don't want to crowd the design too much.
@Carixpig: Now i am more torn between v2's and v3's colors haha. I will try out a version without outlines too, just to see how that might work out. Thanks for answering all the questions I had! |
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Creative Photos on Jun 16 '09
I like version 3 better because it's visibility is stronger and I agree with you about to much background. Keep it clean and simple.
Will you please check mine: Pick your expression and Visit to earth |
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JP_designer on Jun 16 '09
How about outlining the top bit and i think more shading up top. Its a cute idea. Keep it simple though. People like simple shirts.
Would you take a look at my design? http://www.threadless.com/critique/46516/Fork_style |
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Skiot on Jun 16 '09
Alrighty, thanks for the help guys! I'll be working on the tree mostly in the next version then.
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Radscoolian on Jun 16 '09
Thanks for the critique!
I think that you should include some more detail within the leaves (veins, stems, shading etc.) just make sure to differentiate the lines from the leaves' faces. (just make them thiner) The leaves in the tree are lacking definition. Maybe you could include more information than just the v shapes. You could make the border less linear. Also, you have the shirt color to work with as well. You can erase parts of the design to get hi-lights. The leaf on the back doesn't look quite right. Maybe if you had his arms being blown up and out instead of in. And maybe a frightened expression on his face would look good. Overall, a neat and creative shirt! Good job! |
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Skiot on Jun 19 '09
Okay, I took in your suggestions, and this is where I am now. I also included two more color options.
My main focus was on the tree texture and detail. Should I keep most of the leaves in tree as whole leaves, or should I make more impartial ones? Or should I have no impartial ones? I also tried to work in a little bit of hatching in the leaves. I did try adding veins, but they weren't very stellar. |
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BarleyandHops on Jun 20 '09
the impartion ones look fine, but i wouldnt add anymore. yeah and no veins, it would be too distracting. Great concept!
crit me? http://www.threadless.com/critique/46909/Call_Me_Old_Fashioned |
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Sibos on Jun 20 '09
Very cool idea and I love the way it's drawn. I guess you could add a few more leaves, but it looks pretty good to submit. I think I like color 1 the best.
Please check out my critique |
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this would be so cute for the fall! color 3 for me!
please take a look at mine space camp, its almost ready to sub! |
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Skiot on Jun 20 '09
Glad to see I'm getting some "submit" votes now! Thanks for the optimistic comments guys. So that makes one vote for color 1, and one vote for color 3.
I still like the thought of having the little guy on the back from V3, even if I don't use that exact drawing. What do you guys think? |
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itsnotunusual on Jun 20 '09
Great idea. I prefer Color One - I find the others a bit more garish. Putting the guy on the back is a good idea too - be good to see that worked up.
I think you could easily submit it without though :) |
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rafles on Jun 20 '09
pretty good)! sub it
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xfoldesign on Jun 21 '09
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Skiot on Jun 21 '09
Okay, just about ready for sub, but I'd like to make sure everything is set first.
First, is this hatching a good idea? I'm scrapping the hatching from v4 for sure, but should I have this hatching or no hatching at all? How's the guy on the back now? is it better or worse than V3's back design. |
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savetheents06 on Jun 21 '09
I really like this design. :)
I think it looks better with the hatching. Without it, it looks a bit flat. And I like the first color. |
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Makesfive on Jun 21 '09
yes hatching and I love this design, it's adorable and fun. The back matches the front nicely.
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Skiot on Jun 21 '09
Thanks for the comments guys... I'm thinking of keeping the hatches too.
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BarleyandHops on Jun 21 '09
idk I kind of like the cleaner feel it has without the hatching, if you put it in you might want to make the lines a little shorter.
I think mines pretty close to submition too: http://www.threadless.com/critique/46909/Call_Me_Old_Fashioned |
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tamarhak on Jun 22 '09
The leaves on the front are really sweet, and I like the hatching!
I think that the background leaves should all be either with contours or without, and not a mixture of both. |
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Wintang on Jun 22 '09
loving the color theme and atitude giving from the form of the leaf. I would buy one
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rabodnube on Jun 22 '09
The textures at the bottom (leaves) doenŽt look so nice.
IŽd preferd without this background like tamarhak. could you help me please? |
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Creative Photos on Jun 22 '09
The hatching gives it a bit more depth and a real drawn style. I like it! Go for it!
Please rate mine: Pick your expression |
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donlope01 on Jun 22 '09
I prefer it with the hatches and I love the back.
On the back, I would try to put make the bottom of the leaf going up a bit (as if lifted up by the wind) Can you help me on my design?? |
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Skiot on Jun 22 '09
okay, so since it's such a mixed review, it looks like I am going to have to try another version, using hatching but in a different way. Oh, and I'll be sure to make the top leaves unmixed for sure.
Thanks for all of the comments guys, I wasn't expecting this many. Keep your comments coming though! (so is the guy on the back okay then? I'm second-guessing the spiral lines on the top two propellers..) |
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Skiot on Jun 22 '09
@ donlope01: haha, so like I did for the back in V3? I can certainly do that for this version.
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donlope01 on Jun 22 '09
Yes right, sorry for that :)
But only for the bottom of the leaf and making it going up even more. |
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Skiot on Jun 22 '09
I tried a new hatching style and I made two new backside guys. Let me know what you think of the changes!
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Sibos on Jun 22 '09
I think I like the first back better than the alt, but both are good. I also think you should have some of the top from the front carry over to the back, otherwise the design is sort of cut off at the arms/shoulders (hope that makes sense). However, still looks good!
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Skiot on Jun 22 '09
yup, that makes sense. I guess I forgot about making the top part continue around the back.. originally I was going to only have one color printed on the back, not two (like in V2 & V3). Thanks for your approval!
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raihan42 on Jun 22 '09
I agree with Sibos, the first back design is better. Great design Skiot!
My first design got accepted and I'd really appreciate a vote. Thanks alot! |
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Korirok on Jun 22 '09
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Skiot on Jun 23 '09
Trying out a more vivid color scheme, along with a texture to the top background leaves, as they looked like to heavy of a mass in this yellow color.
How does this compare to V6? |
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Skiot on Jun 23 '09
Okay, so now I'm thinking that with these new colors, A three color process might be in order. Tell me if you think any of these three color options are an improvement over v7 and/or v6.
Please stick with me as I iron out the details on this design, I want to make sure it is as good as can be before submission! |
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JP_designer on Jun 23 '09
THe second option by far the 3 colours 2 option. select that one and SUBMIT!!! ding ding we have a winner hahaha sorry that was bit much hey. haha oh well its great!
Could you vote for my design 1 Could you vote for my design 2 |
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harturo123 on Jun 23 '09
I think it needs some more colours, not only brown. Keep working on it.
Could you check out mine please? Thank you |
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Skiot on Jun 24 '09
Okay, I'm finally going to submit this tonight!
I decided to go with these colors, even though they are the bland ones. Thanks for all of your help and wish me luck! |
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Skiot on Jun 28 '09
I would just to let everyone who helped me out in the critique process that this design is now up for scoring, so please vote for me!
http://www.threadless.com/submission/218243/Maple_Aeronautics |
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Ekspanzi on Jun 28 '09
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Sir.Maticus on Jun 28 '09
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