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It doesn't really look like a donut

does the brown make it look like a potato?



any thoughts?

Love the style and idea, especially the vampire holes in the dead jam jar.



You're right about it not looking like a donut, though. I was staring at it for a while, wondering if it was a rock or...? You could add sugar frosting, or turn it into an hole donut, to be really obvious...



Also, what colour and placement on a tee?



I'd appreciate comments on this design as well. :)

yeah, i'm not getting donut either.

i think the brown has more warmth and you're more likely to get the donut idea with it, it probably needs to be a bit lighter and yellower in colour though.

addign frosting/sugar is a good idea and i would probably lose some of the detail on the face as it's giving it dimensions and shape that don't really belong to a donut if that makes sense.

try make it softer and squishier looking maybe. love the jars by the way!



my last critique has been subbed, would love a vote please, thanks!

i added the hole where the jam gets in.

does it look like a donut now?

someone suggested icing sugar... but that makes it look like a clown



what do you think?

i like the first way. the darker one. It would be nice to see the placement aswell. Its a funny idea tho. Maybe the strawberry jelly could look a little more scared?



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"This" is much better than "That". The doughnut should be more doughnutty - now it looks a bit like a potato. And the jelly should be more red, with brighter highlights. Good idea.



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just an idea, but it would be cool if the donut cast a shadow... it would look more creepy



I thought it was a piece of bread at first, and then a filled croissant. maybe adding frosting or sprinkles?



and maybe if you made the jelly around the mouth shinier?

THE FIRST ONE! I love this! That's Hillary-US! I like it. Show some placement!

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this is better than that, but i agree that it doesn't quite read as jelly donut yet. Maybe some sort of sugar glaze would help...and some crumbs?

I vote for This over That definitely. And sorry I can't give any suggestions on how to fix this, but the donut does need to look more donutty.

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It doesn't really look like a donut


does the brown make it look like a potato?





any thoughts?

so I made it more donuty and less like dracula.

icing sugar didn't really work since my computer crashed after I added thousands of little white specks.



What do you think?

I think this is the best one so far. Very cute concept and well done illustration. I'm not sure what else it needs or how it could be improved, so I guess it's good to submit.



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So aweome! Great work. Maybe the other one should have a dead face: x_x



My first design got accepted and I'd really appreciate a vote. Thanks alot!

looks good on olive green. better than the first two versions :) i love the way you colored it. Perhaps you can put arcs that signify that the jelly bottle is shaking in fear? :) Just an idea.



Oh. Can you help me with mine? :D

http://www.threadless.com/critique/47123/Just_this_time_size_might_not_matter

bump!



think it's ready to sub?

I like it a lot!

Blue would be my shirt of choice.

cute concept! maybe this is need an outline?



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Aha, nice. I like the olive (?) color tee. Looks ready to me!

Can you give the donut a hole? Without reading the title, it's a bit hard to recognize it.

Jelly donuts don't have holes, but I agree it's tough to make out. It needs more depth--on the edges. I don't know how to describe it--like a can of tuna. It looks more like a cookie. It's awesome though, I love donuts!



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I think that you need to make facial shadows similar to the first two versions, but keep it a round donut. But a sugary glaze would help make it more recognizable, I think.

I tried adding frosting but the thousands of tiny circles crashed my computer . . . so I added the lines instead. Does it work?



What do you think?

I think it's a little better, however it could be confused for a hamburger with grill marks. As for the frosting, I was more thinking about a squiggly line around the face like the frosting that they put on and it drips down the sides... Hope it's not too much work if you like the idea, but I think it's worth it...



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i prefer the version without lines. why don't you try a brighter palette?



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maybe u should try with tiny dots of sugar over it (or something).. i thought it was a hamburger also :D

great idea tho



fly's dream

used 3 pantone colours and added icing.



is it ready yet?

I like the progression this design's gone through. I'd say have a line of jelly-drool coming out of the donut's mouth and dripping on the ground.

Haha...this is very funny.



Alright so I saw the progression and this has improved pretty nicely. I like the way you illustrated this and donut. Overall the design is pretty good. You could try the drool but I think that might be overdoing possibly but again you could give it a shot. Now the jelly jar is really cute. However the cap could maybe use a slight change maybe in color tones. Take a look at your design from a distance. You'll see that the cap of that jar almost blends in with the donut. So you could mess with that. It's pretty close to done I think though. Not bad!

your illustration is really nice yet very smooth i would say submittin it.. but if u wanna play more u can make the little guy shaking a little hahaha



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/46923/Smilelikeme



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I think this is the last one.

lowered the transparency of the icing and brought back some of the shadows on the face.

I like this, but just a couple observations. the cast shadow of the donut would also be cast over the second jar of jelly so all the color in it would be darker. Also, the victim in the background almost looks like he's smiling because of the way the puncture wounds and the dripping blood are placed.



I think you're really close, it just needs a little bit more before it's ready. Just my opinion obviously. What about putting them all in a location, creating a scene with a background etc. just so they do just feel like they're floating on the shirt?



I'm interested in seeing how this progresses. Good luck.



If you have a chance I'd love some feedback on the following.

In The Weeds

& maybe a vote for

Someone Loved Them Once



Thanks

I think it's pretty much ready. Maybe have the shadow a little longer, to give a menacing feel, but this may unbalance the shirt. How do pupils look on the donut?

I really like the work on the jelly. Fantastic.



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/47605/cola

okay, added more detail. changed some of the colours.



what do you think?

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wow i really like this :D

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you're really talented for only 19!!