Simple but striking design.



Works well on all darker material



No special printing



Please comment!!

Is that a meat cleaver?

Yeah its meant to be... not clear enough?

I thought it was, just wasn't 100% sure.



How does the cleaver tie into the chalk outline?

its the murder wepon...

OK, gotcha!



:^)

So while we are here... thoughts?

I don't think this concept is as strong as it could be. A chalk outline and the murder weapon are not that exciting/interesting in itself on a shirt -- no offense.



If you could revise it and make the concept more humorous, I think it will be better and gain more appeal to the voters and to the Threadless staff.

Thats a fair comment thanks... will have a think

If you could include a pop culture reference, an aspect of humor, aspect of ridiculousness -- something to make it stand out

perhaps have the murder wepon lodged somhow in the victum...

Maybe have a friend erasing part of the line and redoing it so the victim is thinner or in a position like he was doing something cool; or drawing clothes on the outline or coloring it in.

Way too predictable right now, (seen that before, ho hum). There's no challenge or surprise for the viewer. I like your idea of the weapon lodged into the chalk outline, that would be different. Try to think of a figure from a movie, game, cartoon, comic, etc. that met their death and by what means they died. Some scene you thought was funny, ridiculous, insane, etc and go from there. Cheers!

thanks for comments am working on a good idea atm... watch this space!

Would appreciate commets as I continue to tweek design...

Clean up the line work (it looks pixelated, but maybe that's just the resizing you did), make the outline of the kid/punk/whatever have more varying line weight, as it can illustrate shadow and highlight and overall intricacy without needing to use colors.



Most of your curves are too pointy, soften them up a bit.

My bad... had image indexed!

I think this idea has a lot of potential! I agree with the other comment on your previous version, some varying line width and maybe some added detail would really spruce this up.

Get rid of the police tape. Don't let your corners and curves be so pointy. It feels far too mechanical/draw by numbers right now. Let's see what it looks like when we can feel an actual hand behind the illustration. If you're using illustrator, try checking out the paint tool with a pit of help from a tablet.

This needed more colour I thought.... comments please?

Bump

I almost complained about the thin white lines on the guy, but after looking at them more, I like them. It's a bit different from a straight outline-and-color.

The guy's left arm should bend the other way. His elbow looks disjointed.

Thanks for the comment Francesa. Thats actually how ones arm bends when you put pressure on it. I photographed myself in that position then outlined from it. But i could look to make it seem more normal... i agree looks a little odd.

I would add a couple of police lines back and forth no more then 3 though. and then just clean up the figure a little and i think that could help it a lot other then that keep at it

Yeah good thoughts... thanks will keep at it...

I wouldnt put any police line in. it's clear enough and possibly funnier without it. I would also check out the positioning of the stereotypical chalk outline that everyone think s of... you know one arm up, one down, one leg bent up... you know the one im talkin about. Still, if you keep it as is i wouldnt complain.



got a sec?

I agrre with K for Kool. I would prefer it without the police line. And also I would take out the meat cleaver.

Its funnier.



If you have the time, and give me your impressions.

If you have the time, . check out mine and give me your impressions.

I also agree with K for Kool.

I think it would look much better with out the police.

Great job so far:)



If ya have the time, critique mine?

without the police tape i think, otherwise it looks awesome!

I personally like the police tape, though I think I'd take out the cleaver line.

Got a minute?

Perhaps if the police line wasn't so straight. it almost looks like one of those big 'CENSORED' stamps. And remove cleaver.

I like this a lot though.

comments for mine?

This NEEDS the police line - do not cross. It turns this from a plain graffiti artist drawing an outline to a secondary crime.

I like the concept... how about wrapping the police line around the graffiti artist, as if he rip through the line. The white around the stroke in the artist is a bit distracting. I see what you're trying for. But maybe just a silhouette around the artist would do. Keep it up!

I also like the concept. The only thing I'm not a fan of is the outline on the teenager. Maybe you could make it whiter so it stands out a bit more?

Just some minor changes... ;)



Thanks for all the suggestions people... has been a huge help!!

It is much better now.

Maybe good for sub?

Thanks... i would still like to work a few issues out though so i keep going for now

i like it a lot, but maybe you've over complicated a nice idea - i would go back to version 3 (without the police tape) so it's much more graphical. just my opinion tho.

nice one!

Testing out positions on the Tee

i think this is nice on black tee.

the pants is blurry...make sharp...nice illo.

Have cleaned up all the graphics...



First colour option

Second colour option

First option!



Bill for my thoughts: Your 2 cents

first option is version 8... should have said that

that's what i meant

This guy is nicely drawn, but I LIKED the guy in V5. He was different than a plain old (but well done) illustration.

This could be funnier still if you had the graffiti artist doing more graffiti stuff on the chalk outline. How about some cool clothes or something the outline is "holding" in his hand.

A bunch of flowers in his hand and victorian clothing?

A knife and bling?

A skull and skeleton?

A Picasso type fill-in-the-outline?

Advanced graffiti?

i would do something about the black outline over everything and it looks awkward there is a guy and a grate floatin in space

Thanks for all your comments but ive actually submitted version 10... was happy with it. We will see how it does.



Please watch out for it and vote



Thanks