Alas, I am still addicted to the critique section. Let me know what I should do.

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The scuba man needs work, and I had a hard time telling it was a flashlight.

yeah where the flash light is pointing you should make a little beam to make it more clear that its a flash light... but i DO like the idea.

Yeah I agree with "Korbana anna" ...

Thanks everyone, I know that this needs alot more work, this is sort of my rough sketch of the idea.

I'm intrigued

yeah, it deffently looks a lot better with that line :) i like the idea, (especially since i'm navy haha)

I love how everyone draws on my stuff. :)





(Not meant to be cynical in any shape or form)

work on the scuba guy and maybe indicate more continuous rays of light, the "sea-faring vessel" looks good.

Put some ship things on there like a circular window.

Hope this looks better.

Added in some fishies and made the gap between the rays and the illuminated ship more distinct.

bump

I love this

I really like this.

The cone light should be darker than the circle. You got it the other way around.

Use less windows. Larger windows. More fish.

I really like this, great idea and good shape for a shirt, but I agree with Kojima's suggestions.

I'm with kojima too, but it's a nice design.

cool idea. like it.

Don't hesitate to tell me what to do.

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i'd like more of a background..two fish (or is it fishes?) just doesn't do it for me..

i really love the idea though!

fish.

I'd add some bubb;es, and maybe some seaweed trailing from the very bottom. I think that the lighted part of the ship rocks, but it would make sense to have just a faint outline of the rest of the ship.



But if you do that, no seaweed and stuff, it might make it to complicated/messy.

That said, our diver friend could use being redone. make it seem more natural, so that he's actually swimming and holding the light. Now it's more like he's standing on his tip-toes. Tip-flips. whatever.

Fish inside the beam of light distracts.



The man bothers me. Is his body facing us, with his head turned on a weird angle? His knees don't look right for him to be facing away. I think he needs redoing. Love the progress, though.

I hope that this makes the direction of his legs less ambiguous.



I'm still working on a way of having a faint outline of the ship continuing out from the lighted part, but I am afraid that it might destroy the illusion. I'm still going to try it though.







And I just realized that I forgot to put in the placement.

i like the design but the placement will decide if i would buy it or not... because too centered or too close to the neck wouldnt look good... but thats my opinion..

and when I meant faint, I meant really faint. Id draw an example, but I kinda can't at themoment.



Maybe like just a really faint border line,the border being the ship... or filled in...



maybe..

So, I tried it out and i loved it with faint outlines. I'm just trying to figure out the presentation and messing around with the placement and stuff. Still open to suggestions.

Ok, I took a second look and noticed a butload of crap that needed to be fixed.

This is pretty cool man. I don't know what I'd do to make it better so you should probably sub before you do too much too it and it gets to over the top.

I figured out that I can make the placement bigger and I resized the presentation so it is easier to see. I'm going to make a few minor changes and sub it soon.

bump

Yeah you better.

The tears in the berth (or whatever side of the ship that's being shown should be shadowed in darkness I think.

i like it... its cool...