I dream about monsters and very much like them.

I like the draw idea, but I think that the monster face could be better.

The draw at the t shirt looks nice.

I disagree, I like the monsters face. I think the background could use some work. and maybe you could add an opponent. I don't really know, but I think you could take it a lot further.

I don'1t know about addin an oponent. Maybe If I insert more details of the city. What you think?

the city is great as is... for me, the focus is on the monster... maybe tweak its face some, maybe no nose at all

well its not obvious its a karate monster. looks jsut like a jumping moster to me. if you want give him a karate outfit

maybe just a karate belt, and maybe he could be doing more like a flying karate kick type thing

Cool, put a Karate-kid head bandana on him!

I think it's the afraid guy in the window that does the trick. That's where the story is. I would suggest playing with that instead. Maybe just show the Karate guy in partial view, as an indiscernible threat.

Thanks for all your advises. I'll try to another version for tomorrow.

Anything else?

its really cool, maybe add more detail in the city part? i like the simplicity of the monster

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Hmm... That's interesting what my comments did. Let's try that again.



Try adding the words "Boom", "Bam," or "POW" to give it a comic book/cheap karate flick feel.



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I did some changes...



Insert the monster more into the city

put a bandeana on it

resized its face - it is smaller now

increase the size of the guy in the window.



What do you think now?

Your first version looks better with the larger face. For the second version, the building behind him looks a little awkward, but it looks better with a larger man in the window..

you might want to draw helicopters or other details in the sky at the top of your graphic because it seems a little plain. (just my opinion)



over all very creative and unique!

Maybe add chop sticks in his hand on the right. :)



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reworking is much better. and add those chopsticks but make the guy in the building a fly so its like the karate kid trying to catch a fly with chopsticks!!

Just a random thought to give this shirt more purpose. Have you thought of this building being one of those all you can eat chinese buffets. And the angry karate monster is upset because the guy in the window is saying: "No more buffets for you. You only eat a la carte." Just a thought. Take it or leave it.



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nice but maybe a bit more buildings will do

I like the chopsticks idea. I'll do it and rework with the buildings.

I will not add more muscle to the monster because I like his shape. And I'll try to give more details to the draw.

Thanks everyone.



More ideas?

fun idea. I agree with the chopsticks idea. I think you should add some more dark gray buildings to the background too. It looks a little odd with just one on either side of him. I like the shape of his arms and legs too, good decision to keep them how they are. I think a few more details (cloud, helicopter...) would help also.



Good luck

I did a lot of changes now.

Add more buildings behind the monster

Add chopsticks in its hand

insert some stars

changed the background color

insert some words



Thinking about taking or leaving the "karate kid" bandana.



Is it possible to change the name of the tee?

I think "moon dinner" is more like this design now than "karate monster".



So, what do yu think now?

Hilarious!!! Love it.

Let's see it on a t.

I feel like it needs more details.

How about the moon with some craters on him...more detail as a moon. More color too! Maybe the bandanna could be more colorful, the moons eyes colored.



Love it tho!



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Yeah, I am thinking about craters too. Not sore about the bandana thought.



More ideas?

haha this its so funny i would put more details on everything buildings moon and so on when its that detailed its going to be awesome also you should think about the type placement you should think on something a little more fresh!! awesome idea jaja

I don't know about adding details on the buildings. Maybe the guy in the wildow wont bring so much attencion on himself...



But, ok, I`ll try.

haha nice, def needs more detail, I'd like to see what you can make of this, lookin forward to next v

Think it looked better with blu background

hahaha, yeah that's pretty funny.



my only suggestion would be to add some moon craters or something because i wouldn't have known it was the moon without the title...

If your going to turn your monster into a moon, maybe add a random cow jumping over him in the left corner of your design. In the background perhaps. Just a thought.

Just for clarity i would suggest moving the stars from behind the chop sticks.... there getting a little lost in there.



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Abut the stars - I agrre with you. Abu the cow, I dont understand you. Why?

And what you guys think about the letters and colors?

I agree making it more moon like.

And I think you should color the bandana.

Keep it up, you're doing a great job!



If ya have the time, critique mine?

not a fan of the words to be honest... perhaps you could take them away and write them with the drawing... suggest more of the person dreaming and make the moon more moon like... with craters perhaps!?



Chalk Line

I was trying to think of something to fill the void on the upper left corner of your design. It was a reference to the cow jumped over the moon nursery ryhme. Although a rough outline of a helicopter might work too.

For some reason threadless updated a lot of blank versions to the site.



So, this is my version number 4, again.

Please excuse me for the mistake.



So, in this version I added craters to the moon and made it more round.

Increased the size of the sticks

added some windos and small details to the front city

changed the backgroud color back to blue

painted the bandana



Still working with the text.

Ideas? coments?

anybody?

bump

I like the style, great character, but I think you need to extend the bottom of the right leg to go under his butt. His left thigh could be better, maybe if you lowered it, raised it counter clock wise and curved it a bit more to synch with the round body/head. The text is maybe explanatory but when you think of it, the visual is supposed to tell the story on a tee. There are some great tees with visual and text but in most cases the text is part of the art. I don't see this as one, so I'd say lose the text. Maybe try the craters with just a rim shadow and not the gray circles, they look like holes right now. Lastly, you're going to have to figure out how this goes on a tee, boxing a design doesn't usually work well because it looks pasted on the shirt rather than merging with it. Maybe try a gray shirt and have the background fade into it. Cheers!

Hmmm.... I looks like your moon has bullet holes now. Have you thought about using live trace of a picture of a moon. The moon needs soe work.

Like the style, but seems that the moon-character needs more work. Arms and legs look mismatched.

agree with quister. wanted to say that the text could be better integrated with the design. I would usually say lose the text, but in this case I thought the text is actually pretty hilarious, but it seems very tacked on rather than being part of the design.



but honestly very interesting changes since i lasst saw it. good job so far :)

i love this design.

i agree with agrimony usually im not a fan of text, but in this case the picture almost needs the text.

i like the design alot.



by the way the E stands for EgoFlow which is the name of my t-shirt brand

:)

its an E and an F, they interlock

I think u should try to put ur graphic on tee to get a better idea weather it is fine or not. its difficult to say now weather it is fine or not.

i liked it better when it was 1st a monster and not so much the moon. and i also liked the earlier guys comment that the building with the guy should be some sort of restaraunt. maybe you could get the japanese text for sushi and put that on the sign, then have the man just saying "no more sushi for you!"

UUUUUF.

I dont know if I should continue with this project. Everybody is sugesting major changes and I think that if I do it, I will loose the hole Idea. I want to make a nonsense shirt. I really dont want to insert a restaurant or so, because it would change all my original idea.

Well, lets try some more.

Ill put the draw insede a tee to see how it will look like.

That is one of the scariest things I've ever seen. I do not want to be eaten with chopsticks. On the shirt, you should move the text down a little, so that it does not stick to the scary moon's foot. Unless the scary moon is stepping on the text.

You know, I like the first version a lot, when the monster is just a karate monster.

sixwings. I like the first one too.

But threadless told that it was not good enouth and I decided to try to do all the changes that were suggested here. Now I will try to make it the best that I can.

But now I like the moon with chopsticks. Lets see what hapens.



Uploading a new version right now.

OK, I like it much more without the craters.

This is how I think it would be best placed on a tee.

I like the text, but aint going anywhere with it. Dont know it this is the right place, if the color is good etc.

I decided not to change the siluet of the character, cos I like it the way it is.



So, what do you think now?

Took the bandana out.



What do you prefer, with it (like the last version) or withough? Trying to decide...

Anyone?

Do you prefer version 8 or 9?

barbs1978, I'm liken the first version. Something about the simplicity of the placement and the choice of color (or the lack of). Maybe add the starts to v1, but to many.



Thank you for your comment on mine...

Well, I do like 8 because of the scary moon's bandana. It is more random and nonsensical.

Maybe if I put the text in the back of the tee... what do you think?

I'm not sure you need the text either. Though I do think you should move the person in the window closer to the center of the design (though not dead center) as it is now I worry that part of the design would be lost when it was worn. You could probably stick him in the tall building next the moon, on the same side that he is currently on. If you wanted to put something on the back of the tee what about a continuation of the city-scape but a little darker as the moon isn't there to illuminate it? Oh! And I vote for the bandanna too.

bandana is better I think

I really like the purple in version 3 for some reason! But I like the composition of V9 better....what if you put purple on Version 9! It might not work but just try it! I also like the bandana! But not the craters or holes! that's to much! But it def gets better everytime! Good work! It's good to see that ur editing down...i really like them!

i like the bandana too with out it the chop sticks dont really fit in.

Yeah, I like the bandana, and if the text is necessary, I think it should be at the top or top-middle-y part of the tee, the city looks MUCH better at the bottom of the tee instead of a little further up

hmm well some tips for you. I feel your pain, had that same problem with my last design when everyone suggested major changes everywhere. At the end of the day, remember this is your design, do something you like and that you'd wear on a shirt, it's after all up to you. So ask yourself, what's the one thing you want to convey with your design and stick with it. Everyone has their own personal preferences.



Here's my personal preference =p Some things that you need to fix. The stars in the backdrop, put them behind the city rather than hanging in front like that. Secondly, the text, i like the text, but it still doesn't seem integrated with the design, if you can't find a way to integrate it then i'd suggest losing it. Also, i kinda like it with the bandana, but it's left leg still needs fixing, the joint at the body appears really thick.

I'd put the craters on the moon back, or make it a crescent moon. Perhaps a little more detail in the buildings.



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Or perhaps this whole thing could be in a dream bubble of a sleeping kid.

I would put the moons feet on the buildings so it seems like the moon is some giant monster

I'm not sure about the way the moon is floating, even though it has legs. Maybe have it climbing on the buildings.

Hey people. Thaks for all the advices. I think I will work a little more and make some major chances.

I think I will loose the text and extend the design to the back of the tee. Please come back soon to tell me wha you think.

I like version 8, with the bandanna. It is more funny! I think you could lose the text or keep it. I kind of like it with the text because it is a like a story book. You could make a think bubble coming from the boy saying the text.

he he this made me laugh - def go with the bandana, its more Daniel San! thanks for comments on mine

Go with the bandana and add clouds as snakes as opponents maybe. Loving the idea. haha. Simple, funny. Brilliant.



I'd appreciate your vote on my design, Hope. Please do check all the colors. Thanks :)

funny, but arms and legs still need touching up.

pretty surrealistic, the child style of drawing is not bad. Now, i would like first of all to see how it is incorporated on a 3d model tee, to see what effect we could have (that's tough to see right now)

change the font, work more on the moon face

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