i've been wanting to submit this a long time ago but didn't get around to it, now that there's this critique section is perfect to show it and see what it needs!



thanks in advance!

There have been a lot of stationary (fruit etc) with faces and doing stuff, I think a lot of people have seen this type have thing done many times.

I think for this to be successful you need to present something new. Just a suggestion, sorry it doesn't help you with this actual design.

thanks, anyone else? need help!

i like it. The CD its a little crappy.

The shadows on the writing utensils are kind of off it seems to me. Also, the mechanical pencil saying "crap"...well, his expression seems odd to me somehow. Try messing around with that.



Overall, I don't think it's really worth continuing.

buhp

It's too busy. Try taking out the words from all but one of the scenes.



Also touch up the art if you can. It looks a little sketchy.