He's holding a cookie, in case it's not clear.



C&C welcome.

yeah. the cookie isn't clear. you could make it a jammie dodger or an oreo-type cookie. and if the mug were a glass and you could see it being filled with milk it would be clearer too. i like the nice simple art.

Hmmm...you colonials are more into dunking milk and cookies than tea and biscuits eh? okey dokey artichokey...

The idea is great and with development could really work well. Maybe a glass of milk would be more iconic? Are you sure you want a basketball player dunking? Take it one step further.

at least give the cookie chocolate chips to make it look more like a cookie at first glance.

Yeah maybe make it an Oreo or chocolate chip-cookie...

the idea is cool

maybe add some detail ;)

Awesome! I'd like a bit of subtle detail on the basketballer, and more cookie like cookie.

The problem with adding detail is the color limit; I'm using six already, which is obviously 1 too many. I'd like to, but it's tough! I might redo it using lineart for the player, which means I free up 3 colors.



I think I'll keep the basketball player as it makes it clearer what's happening; my criteria for a concept is that people walking past in the street should understand it as they go by.



I like the milk idea, and I will perhaps use WhitneyBeth's suggestion of an Oreo-like cookie too. Thanks for the feedback folks.

Ok, so, I've replaced the mug and cookie with a glass of milk and an Oreo (not sure of © issues, don't think it's major though). I have put 4 of the 5 colors into the Oreo to give it the necessary detail. Better?

Liking the milk and cookie much better

I'd try giving the Oreo three colors, not four -- as it is now there's too much detail in relation to the rest of the image. See how that works out.



Definitely much better than your previous version. The idea is expressed much more clearly in this one.

Less detailed Oreo.

i would lose the "oreo" text because i'm pretty sure there's gonna be a problem with that. otherwise, i think it's a good idea, but i'd like to see the milk and person as detailed as the cookie.

I'd like to add more detail but colors are a problem...that and I'm not very good at shading =) I will have a stab at it though. Not sure how I can add detail to milk but I will try that too.



I will also add a backboard etc too.



The oreo text is easily blocked over.

yeah, you can't have "oreo" on it.

Also, the basketball player is just....well, it's not very well done.

He's so flat compared to everything else.

chocolate chip?

yeah I'd go with chocolate chip because the oreo is in a lot of detial and nothing else on this shirt is.

Ok, a bit of shading added to the player (any tips on this welcome), Oreo lettering obliterated, backboard added.

add ridges to the milk glass maybe? i love the oreo, nice.

I was actually thinking condensation droplets on the glass?

even better. it would just add a bit of detail so it's closer to the level of detail on the oreo

looking better, keep going with it. maybe a pole from the backboard to the ground so everything's not just floating? that would also help give some perspective. and i think something in the background would be nice.

also, the player's ankles look weird like that. maybe try black shoes and white socks?

I'd go for the dark brown you already used instead of black for the shoes, and definitely white socks.

Yummmm

yeah the glass looks kinda odd with the backboard, make it look better. and u lazily jus blackened out oreo, make it say cookie or something

Socks added. Not too sure about adding a background or a pole, I'd like to keep it simple.

The glass looks awkward on the backboard... and the cookie just looks odd. I would change the type to chocolate chip or something. (And I know I missed out on the first verison, but if you really need to change something I would like to see him dunking a donut into a coffee mug. =])

all I would say is put the player closer to the glass, give it a pole to hold it up, a bit of a shadow, along with the guy and eyes and an ear. other than that, I think this is really good



http://www.threadless.com/critique/4218/Op_Art

instead of using black to define the muscles, use the shirt color.

I think I might agree with theurbanraptor about using the (darker) shirt color to do the musculature on the guy. Also, think about how you could add movement to the picture as a whole. I like the simplicity of the design, but it feels like he's not going to ever make it to the goal because when he starts moving again, he's just going to drop. How could you make it look like he's going towards the basket?



I like the oreo, too, but I think a chocolate chip cookie might be more effective.



That said, who knows? I like the concept. Make the whole thing smaller on the shirt.



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Any and all feedback is appreciated.

The shirt color is too light. I like the cookie, I think the main problem is that you can't really see it in the preview.

I'm a little worried about the racial implications of a black guy and an oreo - isn't oreo slang for black on the outside, white on the inside, like coconut?



Detail in the basketball player is getting there. The line on his upper arm makes him look like an action figure, though.



The milk looks fizzy. I also want one or two lines on the guy's face - otherwise it looks flat and out of place. You don't need to add eyes and mouth or anything, just one contour.

Looks pretty cool, id go with more of a chocolate chip cookie because its iconic and easily recognisable. The problem with the oreo is that blacking out the text makes it look kinda like a coin... the rest of the design has evolved really well, looking solid



Feedback appreciated:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/4271/Some_party_huh

Hmmmm... I didn't realise there were any racial implications to Oreo - must be a US thing.



I'm working on something else at the moment, I might revive this in future. Thanks for the feedback.

maybe go with a different cookie[although oreos are milks favorite cookie], because first of all the racial thing, and second, i'm not sure if you can do copyrighted names on threadless?

chocolate chip maybe.