I love this.. I'd by it, straight up.

I think this is really great. A little more detail might be cool. for example if there was another household/(officehold?) object that would make the pad look like swiss cheese. Something circular. And maybe some wrinkles in the paper mice! Up to you. Great Job.



Crit please if you have time?

http://threadless.com/critique/446268/Word_up_a_Tree

with a pin :-)

I stand in awe of your work yet again lol. I wonder if you drew some circles on the top pad would it look more like cheese? haha..

this is great! hmm, there needs to be something that makes the pad look more like cheeese. I cannot think of what that would be though...

needs more thumb tacks laying around the top center right area and around to the center front of the design too add some interest. I also think the sides of the post it notes are too dark. The ears on the paper mice could stand to be a little bigger to help them look like mice.



Help me out?

haha, just a few circles with a pen would do as well, and better i think... gonna try it :-)

thanks atzh....

if you add the drawn on circles to the top of the post-it notes with a pencil you could include a Pencil in the background of the design too.

Circles with a pen, yes. Or maybe a hole punch? That could get complicated, though.

That's really cute!

circles , pen, post-its ..... that's cheese :-)



what do you think?

Very very cute

Haha nice one. I think it could afford to be a bit bigger on the shirt though. Also, maybe you could experiment with some wood grain for a table top, fading off towards the edges?



If you have time, please vote and comment on my sub.

Nice idea! I agree about going a bit bigger with the design. I also think it might be worth trying the design with computer mice (as in the thing you control a computer with) as mice rather than folded paper ones?

i like this design, very crisp. Made me chuckle

re-worked some colors, shading and cleaned up the linework.

and the placement is a little bigger on the shirt, as suggested earlier...



what do you think?

Really nice work! I love the swiss cheese sticky notes.



Please crit mine!

I love it! :D



What do you think of mine? Poor Teddy

yeahh that looks awesome

why is the one mouse curvy but the rest are not? The curvy mouse looks less like folded paper so I'd say stick with the straight edge ones.



The pen needs some work. I think it is the tip of it that does't feel just right.

oh and your shadows are a bit off. They seem to go different directions from each other. The light source feels best as if it is coming from the Bottom Left corner of the design, but you have a few shadows looking like they are coming from Above and from Bottom Center.

@bortwein

the pen tip needs a little more shine i think to make it pointier, tried to make it as a regular bic pen.

and don't see what you mean with the shadows...

haha...lookin really cool...i agree with bortwein with keeping the mouse uniform...just straight lines for the mouse on the left and the mouse on the top part...also the top end of the pen doesn't look as clean as the rest of the illo...anyway...it's lookin great...keep it up!

haha really nice idea man

Haha.. What a clever idea (:



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I think it's great as is. Don't overwork it! I love it. I was looking at the shadows, and I'm pretty sure they look right- if not, then close enough for believable.

straightened up some mice and re-worked the pen completely.

tried to make it like a transparant bic pen, we all have lying around somewhere :-)

never mind about the lighting thing I figured out where I went wrong.

perhaps just some added texture to the shadows so they don't feel so harsh and dominating?

Sweet, i'd buy it.



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This would have more of a story if the office supplies were rigged to make a mousetrap.



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Ride the Storm

Haha, really funny!!

but i agree with Bortwein about the dark shadows. Lighten them up a little.

i'll try to make the shading a bit lighter, like between v.3 and this one...

cool!

very kwel! the comment about a lighter shading would go very well. it doesn't adds on the the main forms when you see from some distance.

wow, this is great! i actually do time wasting things like this with office supplies at work! You definatly get a 5$ from me, let me know when your in the running.



Thanks for your comment earlier!

new shadows....

made them lighter as suggested earlier



what do you think?

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what an idea. will the instruction for mousefolding be printet on the back? colors are chosen well. the origamis seems to be to simple. are there more contured mices? try to weld of the first postIT sheet by holding the typical gluestripe. go on with that!




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@BAStee

good point about the top sheets being bend a bit...!

Love it. I can't see a single thing that could use improving. I say submit it!

should the pen have some ink in the center tube? You do have that blue color on the notes to use right?

thats really cute!

I agree with bort that giving the pen some ink might look nice :) I don't think it would make a huge difference if you decide not to, but that's about all I can see that could use some work. Other than that I think it's ready to sub :)

wow, nice and clean. I love it!

I'm with bort too. The pen needs ink in the center and at the tip. I would also spread the mice out a bit more.







Thoughts on mine

http://www.threadless.com/critique/37261/Cozy

re-worked the pen tip, added ink to the inner tube and made the end cap also blue...



final version i think :-)

awesome concept. Run it!

cheers

I'd buy it! Oh wait, we can't say that yet.

This is awesome, I'd submit it. I love the Post it note cheese.

oh, and please critique mine

http://www.threadless.com/critique/39801/Swing_axe

so funny:) really nice concept

awesome concept! i love it!



please critique mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/41035/This_Sucks

I love this! The only little change I may try is to shrink/move the far right mouses shadow a bit? it seems a little inconsistent with the way everything else's shadows are dropping.



Please crit mine if you have a chance:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/39805/Birch_Beats

Thanks!

final version, ready to sub :-)

good luck

this come a really long way

v15 i admire your determination

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Man love your work. 5$



give me some comments on my work.



http://www.threadless.com/critique/41951/Thundercat_OH

really nice! good work!

this is great! =D



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take a look at mine

http://www.threadless.com/critique/41461/My_Precious

Great work, I think it's ready to submit! :)



What do you think of my Poor Teddy?

Killer Idea. This website is full of creative people!! definitely a submiter

yeah!, it's up for voting !!

it's up for voting for 4 more days :-)

great idea haha :]

Haha! I had no idea this was in critiques!

it's up for voting for 3 more days :-)

Been there, good luck!

cheers

last day to vote for Office Rodents

nice idea... i luv this one...

score my design if you hav time

http://www.threadless.com/submission/207275/Swing_Away