can someone tell me how to post a link to this critique??

copy the link up above. Then type a href="paste link here" code together with the brackets. Or you could google for hyperlink HTML. Good luck

chick on the next to the comment box. Then copy and paste the link of the critique inside the " ", then write what the link is going to say where it says link text. Then just post the comment. Sorry for my terrible explanation, I hope you understand what I meant.

By the way, great design. I don't like the world, but the woman is beautiful. May be add a crown or something.

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sorry, my attempt of helping resulted in a link itself

haha, thank you. best way to learn is by imitation, right? crown is a good idea. anyone else against the world?

agree with phantommole,



the lady is beautiful, like the expression

not sure bout the world thingy

a tiara will be cool

very nice design. Maybye light pastel colours could be used throughout the hair. Have added colour into my design if you don't mind having a look would appreciate some feedback.

it would be better without the world... and maybe with attached limbs but it depends

i could do without the world as well ... i dont see the relevance ... if she is a queen than a crown would be nice and maybe even a throne ... the top arm looks like it floated a little too far away ... can we see tee placement?

oh yeah, and i really like the drawing of the lady

Ah pretty neat, like the name of it, but wouldn't pick up on that implied message without knowing the name. The heart's style doesn't fit the rest of the shirt, perhaps if it were hand drawn like the girl? I like the pattern that extends over the globe, starting off as a water drop dissolving into a halftone. I like the way you drew her hair as well. She looks rather elegant placed atop the earth, majestic in pose with the neat disconnected arms. The arm down on the earth looks a bit off at the joint, the top part looks good, but the part connected below it looks a bit too straight. Her hands are well drawn and I like how she is pacing the earth with her fingers ;D



Would be nice to see it on a shirt for placement as well. Pretty cool design, needs a little more work and should be ready to submit :)

i thoroughly enjoy this design. would the woman be see through as shown or would it be filled in with some sort of coloring?

very well drawn! The subtle colouring on the lip looks great! The world needs a bit of work.....maybe not so perfect like the lady.



Good luck

maybe minus the globe; and sit her on a playing card with just the back showing not the face card.

Beautiful Woman!

Placement coming soon! Remove the world, add a playing card base or a crown... maybe both. I'll probably keep the woman as is, without filling her in, but I think I'll add streaks of color through the hair. i might change the entire color scheme. :) Thanks!

Ignore versions 2 & 3. ComputerFux.

Version 4 is to show tee placement, version 5 for detail. I'll clean the lines up a bit more before submitting, but i wanted to keep the hand-drawn look for the girl. Added colors to her hair and heart, removed the globe and added a crown. Still seems like she's missing something, somehow. Opine, please.

No globe? I kinda liked that... And everything else i was about to suggest i just read it in your comments =p



Yes you're right, it's still lacking something. I can't tell what it is yet. Maybe a background?

I like it, maybe if you filled her in with white or something to distinguish her might look cool. Nice work



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interesting idea, but try darkening the lines for the girl or possibly lightening the heart so that they sync better

I like it but you need to darken it and maybe reamove the heart, I love the head the most :D

I would just focus on the face and hair. That's where the money is. It would be cool just to have her face and hair take up the whole shirt. If you want to stay with showinf the whole body, I think that heart and grid behind it have to go. If you're going to include the heart, you should draw it in the same style as the girl. Not sure I like the crown either. It feels like an after-thought. Sometimes its enough just to have a sensitively drawn illustration. Last thing, the feet could be reworked; they look a bit odd.

great!, hair looks so much better. Agree with ideleon The crown is not necessary, looks out of place. Still needs a little bit of tweaking. Grid behind the heart i would also remove. Looks good , looking forward to seeing the final version.

hi hi, cleaned up my lines. i decided that i hated the crown as soon as i posted the last version. i like the heart, but i'd love to hear feedback. i changed the color so that the heart is the same color as the lines. (lines are now darkened too).



Bottom Left: with Heart and grid still.

Bottom Right Birds only.



Also considering just a GIANT face instead, as per ideleon's suggestion.



If i just do the face, I think that I might add more color to the hair, or pull the color completely so it's black and white with red lips.



Thoughts??

I'm not sure I like the heart. And... is she falling? From where? Floating?



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I think that looks much better. However, I would add a line to indicate her neck just so it doesn't feel like its floating. Maybe the hair could expand and wrap around the shirt? As for the one with the birds, I like the illustration of the birds. What might be cool if you went this route, would be if she was a doll who was falling apart. Since her arms are disconnected, she feels like a doll with disconnectable parts and the heart could be one of the parts. You could have a heart shaped wedge or opening in her chest where her heart would go. Just some thoughts. Personally, I like the head one. It's chock full of heady goodness.

I think it needs more work.:)

so... what if i just title this "Ace" instead?

i'll vote for version 6 bottom left.

I agree, Version 6 bottom left, but on a card. that would be sick and i would buy it in a heartbeat.

final version submitted!

i'll probably do a new drawing with a marionette and the birds, so... stay tuned. :) please vote.

ok cool



do you offer drawing classes.. lol, i like the way you draw

Hi there.. I kind of like the color combinations here, but if it is "Queen Of Hearts", why is it on an ace?



Overall, the drawing's nice.



Here's my latest (:

just kidding. :/ submission rejected. guess the "Ace" design is copyrighted. need to rethink.

and thanks, fujiapple, i'm flattered. :)

THE VERSION ^ IS BETTER!

version 6 with the birds!!! ill give it 5!

i like the birds version- i think you need the body. without the body it looks odd.



Would be very appreciative if you could you critique mine (v3)? It's Gaia's Autumn

im serious

the way you drew the bird and your BE submittion

i really wanna learn from you

resubmitted! hopefully it passes this time. totally different look. included the whole body, much more like v6. [fingers crossed]

I know its a bit late BUT i loved the v6 top left. It's simple beautiful and elegant.

final version submitted fo'real! Please go vote!