i wonder if they sing as well?

Sweet!

Good idea. I like a lot!!

Only two things, maybe I would make higlights on the surface of the water and change the tone of the bg submarine to give it more depth. For the rest is perfect!

You have a cool style.

:D

first attempt to add some highlights/reflections on the watersurface.

(and made the sub in the bg darker to get more dept)

Haha, cool Idea. I see you messed with the surface of the water to make it stand out some more, but it still seems off some how to me. Maybe there just needs to be a contrast somehow of what's below,versus above. Perhaps bubbles or something around the subs would help show that u are below water?



Just some simple suggestions, do with 'em what you will :)



My newest could use some suggestions as well if you have time:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/39852/Smoking_Hookah

dang it....that's not mine :-p I was trying to link this one:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/40175/Being_Green_Should_Be_Easy

dang it....that's not mine :-p I was trying to link this one:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/40175/Being_Green_Should_Be_Easy

putting something on the ground is weird i think, because these subs usually swim around in very deep waters... so i need to get the water surface more in the scene. i started with this light reflection, maybe i need to make the reflections bigger, and add some water ripples.. i'll work on it!



adding a missile being fired as a blowhole, might be too much.

I agree that land wouldn't work. Playing more with the water reflections and ripples would really add to it I think :) Keep it up, I like where it's going!

thanx TTUraider, i'll do that this weekend.

i'm off to bed now :-)

This is a really a very cool concept! A submarine taking on the ocean going posture of a whale is completely unexpected but so right some how. You might lose the sub on the left, it doesn't add anything and limits the design's size on the shirt. It's also a bit rough right now, could use a bit of refinement. Maybe a real baby whale alongside the sub, I don't know, just thinking our loud. Great idea man, keep it going. Cheers!

changed the composition by reworking the third sub in the back.

making it a better ensemble with the three of them.

still working on the water reflections and adding watertrails.



any suggestions?

still need to work on the water trails, but i think the water reflections works really well...



any suggestions?

Nice... I like the concept... I wouldn't add anything, except maybe the water trails, as you said. It's pretty much ready, I think.



my first attempt... would love to hear your feedback

Ahh, really nice:) Great changes from last night! I think its about ready really!

deleted all the water ripples from previous versions, and reworked the subs reflections. just didn't like the chaotic ripples above the subs.....

also added water trails to get the under water/movement feel.



any better?

Love it! But maybe its better with just two of them?



Dragons lair needs your help

great idea. the dotted reflections dosent fit. the versions before were better. also return to the differend colored subs.

try palcing the subs so that the shape looks like one big whale from far.



our desire

maybe this shirt color is more appropiate, it gives more the feeling of the deep ocean.

new ripples, maybe too much?

i need to get this water right, otherwise it's gonna be v.5

is this water allright? i think it works much better than v.6...

the water looks great! clever idea!

hahaha i love this..



really good idea.. id definitely buy that





btw this is my design, i'd appreciate any help/comment..

incredible

btw i just think it has a 3d feel that i dont like very much.. you could try to make it look more cartoony maybe.. i dont know

haha...how much more cartoony can you get than a sub in the shape of a whale? :-p jk



back on topic though, I really like the changes you've made! I also agree with you that this water looks better:) I know you want to avoid clutter, but what if you added more "normal" sea life in the water, make more of a scene out of it...to make it look like the whalesubs fit right in with normal marine life? just a thought ;)

totally cleaned up the place...

killed two subs and added a killer whale



what do you think?

Very interesting. I like version 3 and 4 best. they deliver the shape play most clearly although the shape of the baby sub there is a bit clumsy and less graceful than the big sub. this latest one weakens your concept. go back to a family of subs - that was what was so interesting! and dont have their antennas touch the surface coz it ruins the illusion of something organic.



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@Ehud L, i agree about losing the water trails

it's a bit distracting. the water should be in the back, and with the trails, it comes forward.



i'll look into v3&4 again with the new water, and see how that looks. probably better :-)

back to the three subs, and added two divers in the scene (but maybe they're too much)

i don't know anymore ;-) it goes all directions with this design.



what do you think?

Three subs much better than one plus real whale in my opinion...and I think maybe just the scuba guy on the right? His expression seems to fit well :) The other one just kinda seem there, but not really helping

just my opinion of course :)

final version?

Looks darn pretty good to me :)

sigh....I wish there was an edit button :-p



*it looks pretty good to me*

Wonderful Work!!!

It´s awesome. I like the progression of your work.

I think it´s ready to submit.

:D

I'd like to see them breaking the surface a little, but this is great and ready to submit!

I like it alot (:

Awesome idea, great illo. I love the addition of the scuba diver. I still think 2 subs would look best, I don't think the one in back adds much and you could make the design bigger without it. Only my opinion, everyone else obviously likes it as is. Anyway, clever concept and terrific rendering, you can count on a $5 from me, 3 subs or not. Cheers!

interesting design. i also wish they were breaking the surface of the water just a tiny bit. if you added that, it would be perfect and ready to submit.

there are a lot of comments about breaking the surface yes/no, so i've put them in 1 shot.



favorites?

if they do break the surface...i don't think antenna would appear to be straight...I'd prefer them to stay below the water. But this looks incredible. good job.

sorry, let me clarify, the parts above the surface wouldn't appear straight from below. Just the water bends the light and...yeah. nevermind. like I said, I think it looks better under the water than breaking the surface.

i go with no, dont have them break the surface. the colors and eveything look great. ties everything in...i assume it would be on a blue shirt hopefully. i think its ready to submit. this looks awesome!



"Pride"-critique it!

Stay underwater. I think the surface wave is a little strange. (for the smaller sub)



It's really good! (nice concept and well executed) Submit fo' sho.

I agree - Keep them underwater... It is so very fun... can't wait to vote on it!!



If you have a chance - check out mine? Thanks!!

i'm gonna agree with the others. keep them underwater so you dont run into any controversies :)

I'd just like to say I'm completely in love with this design!



It's getting a $5 vote from me! x)

Underwater!!!

:D

i think i'll put the whole shoal under water then... :-)

thanks for all the great comments thus far!



v.11 = final version then?

I really think so :) Great job! Will def. get a 5 from me!

hahaha!! they look like sausages!! but i get it...really great idea...i like the little added bit of white when they break the surface, but it's a bit distracting too...so I say...go with underwater, think the idea is great and either way submit!!!

Yes, V.11!!!!

Cool!!

:D

Stay under water!

Great job, i love it.



If you wouldn't mind checking out my design, that would be great. George_Burns_Terrier Thank you!!

this is the final version....

... i think :-)

Looks good to me :)

Great job mtths, superb illustrations

Looks awesome!

cool. this one is the best. keep the background in the t-shirt slide clear. it's hard to look at as it is now. good luck!

@Ehud L,

yeah i see what you mean with the second slide. i like having a transparant picture behind the shirt, but it should be a bit lighter as it is now. good point, thanks.

Looks great! I think it`s ready. Good luck!



Forest friends, unite!

Ready to SUB (hahaha, SUB!)

great idea, but the waves didn't give the impression of being under it!!

i'll sub though :D

yeah, i think the water should be a little higher, so it's doesn't look like it's way in the back.

good point!



did you see my LightSaver?

i really love this. i've looked through the whole evolution and i think this is the strongest--3 subs, 1 diver and good placement of the surface.

it would be cool if one was releasing air from its blow hole.

@goat1821: they're too deep to use their blowholes i think...

thought about it tho, when they were breaking the surface... (v.12)

i tried to give it more the deep ocean feel i was looking for....



what do you think?

I think its wunderfull... maybe you place the design a bit deeper?

Comments on a new approach?

thats awesome, getting water effects like that is hard. I think you should submit this.

check out the abdominal snowman

thanks,

just have to finalize the presentation and it's done :-)

hehe nice! really interesting, best luck with your submission!!



Any comment on my tees?

Pollution

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thanks!!

great idea. very cool. Check out some of mine.

final, final, final version....





... i think :-)

That looks great! I think it's ready!!!

blog: wouldn't it be cool if they printed wallpaper sized designs too :-)

This is looking really great! Nice job.



I hate to say though, I thought version 4 was class - I prefer it to this one (as cool as this one is) though in the version 4 one, I wouldn't have them sticking up through the water.



If you are sticking with this one though, perhaps some light reflection (just where you have the beams) on the subs would be just the job!?



You know, this kinda thing :



http://www.istockphoto.com/file_closeup/concepts_and_ideas/time/1982392-water-texture.php?id=1982392



Also maybe add a gradient of dark blue at the bottom to indicate some sea depth!?



I likes anyway!

added reflections of the water on the subs itself, and highlighted it where sunrays touch.



what do you think?

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great design you have improved by just lookin at the previews versions of the design

wow 18 versions.

what if the light rays got wider as they get deeper?

They look too much like a photoshop brush rays.

I like.

but how about this new reflections on the sub's back?

(or is v.17 good enough?)







what do you think?

Version 18's reflections are better, but something needs to be done about the light rays. poopiedesign was right when he said they look like photoshop brush marks (to me it looks like the dodge tool). Otherwise this is awesome, it has come along way from version 1 and I'd say you're almost done. Good luck!

back to the original metal shine on the subs, it's less complicated than v.18



re-worked the lightrays, so some aren't parallel anymore.

also made them different colors (they're halftones, see v.17) to create more dept.

That's an amazing idea you've got there. It's looking great as it is, though if I could suggest something you could change, it's the water surface drawing. Perhaps you could make it a bit less, um, stick-like, if you know what I mean? Google around for underwater images and you'll see what I have in mind.

(Something like this: http://www.oceanlight.com/lr/tran/00700.jpg)



Fix that, and I'd say it's perfect!

(leave a comment here, if you can: Pro Rock)

Looks good enough, no need for any changes. (:

It’s a fantastic design. Very creative. 5$





http://www.threadless.com/profile/939358/Tariku_san/critiques

Looks great :) I think it's ready whenever you are happy with it at this point...I don't see anything I would change

it looks like weiners! or bananas...but i know they're dolphin-esque



sorry.. immature or whatever.. just what im thinkin'

i love the water effect at the top, this design is just really cool to look at.

i like them, but they seem to look a bit sausage-y. Can you make them more fishy :) maybe they need flippers?



Can you critique mine (v3)? It's Gaia's Autumn

added some more shine on top of the subs and made the towers darker



final version! :-)

wait u mean this isn't subbed yet?? What are you waiting for??!?! lol. I give it a thumbs up :)

I love the sun ray effect! It's great, submit it! :D



What do you think of my Poor Teddy?

Very good work and design skills. All the options looked great. You are really talented and good at what you do. Nice. I like the last option.

excellent work mate, it's amazing the difference the smallest details between versions make!

i can't see this getting any better (although i could have said that 4 versions ago!) so sub sub sub!!!

ooh, do you have any comments on my robot please?

great work!

wow, you've got everything covered. i like it!!!



what do you think of mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/42473/Alright

there all good mate, i actually liked it when they broke the water, its a bit more interesting.

Holy crap that is amazing... LOVE IT! looking through your previous versions, the begining was good, but this blows me away. The only question I have is do you care that the diver is a bit too big for the sub? maybe he is closer, anyways, I love it! good job.

I updated my design as well ;)

Crit

it's PENDING APPROVAL



and now, we wait.....

i will :-)

Coming to a theatre near you soon. :D

oh, really cool design



the only thing i have to say is now with all the changes, the scuba diver looks outa place for me



i know its a little too late, but just was saying what I was thinking

it's up for voting :-)



only a few days left!

ONE day left to vote !!

You've got a $5 from me! If you could check out mine too that would be awesome. Thanks!

I think it's cute.



Take a look at mine, if you've got time.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/44848/Growth_from_the_heart

Thank you.

LAST day to vote for the Sub Shoal

Excellent stuff! I liked following the evolution from V1 until V21, I think it's ready!



Critique Me!

@disciplined

today is the last day to vote for it...

Can we vote multiple times?

don't think so [but multiple comments can]