shall i add some colors?

other suggestions?

shirt color options....

lols, awesome idea - i like :)



not sure...but maybe try changing the colour of the fly swats and see how that turns out? atm the colours look a bit 'bland' to me :( (prob the light coloured shirt looks best imo)

changed the color of the fly swats and added the white tshirt color to get the best contrast.

I think I prefer the previous one-monochrome. Nice.

I like the bit of color... but for some reason I like your 2nd version better. Did you try the design on a colored shirt instead of coloring the swats?

Crazy design

Nice

maybe i have to change the shirtcolors more drastically indeed..

i'll experiment a bit :-)

a pretty gnarly play on words, personally I think it's original enough for me to deff. purchase.

The colored flyswats look good with these colors

Excellent idea!

I also liked the previous version better, without the crazy colors.



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ok, i went back to the monochrome colors, wich is indeed better i think. it keeps it simple.

also added shade under all the flies.

with darker shirt colors, you're gonna miss the contrast with the dark flies.



any suggestions?

looks pretty good to me. hmm, maybe give the flies red eyes (if possible) just to give it a tiny bit of color. i like it this way too though :)



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red eyed flies....

maybe only the one at one o'clock :-)

Looks nice! maybe the smakkers in the middle is laying a bit odd on top of eachother tho? I think either a nail through the hole ,or that the little one is more to the right. (Man, sometimes things are really difficult to explain in english...)

Hope you get what I meen.



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thanx Henni81, i think i do :-)

i've been shifting these fly swatters all over, and you've got a point that they're lying "just" on top of each other.

maybe i should put their holes in the handles back on one spot. or add a nail or something...

(in v1,2 i had them laying next to eachother instead of on top..) don't know yet... i'll try and shift some more...

or maybe have the time as being 5 past whatever hour and have the fly at the one o'clock position smashed under the minute hand swatter.

ah, instead of 13h25, make it 17h05 and add some red on that one unlucky fly :-) haha

i like this a lot, i really think the only suggestion i could make is to have them look a little more scattered in the groups. :)





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haha, great suggestion to kill the one o'clock fly :-)





@AnhedoniaPlus

when the hour groups are going to be more compact, than you might lose the abbility to count them i think... they become quit fast one dark spot, wich would be a pity...

Yes! This makes it alot better! Love the killed fly, adds a bit of color too.



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@AnhedoniaPlus

oh, my mistake, you wanted it to widen the hour groups (like the 11 o'clock for instance?)



what do you think about the center placement of the swatters?

i think i like the v5 better, don't you? (at least you won't need the center nail then...)

I like your idea

and execution i think it's ready

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I like the placement of the flyswats in the previous version better.

This one is too static.

I like the swatters in this version personally....jumps out as clock hands to me more than the last version did. Love the unlucky fly :) adds a lot to the piece!



Please if you can, mine is in the early stages, and can use all the suggestions it can get:)

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I think the dead fly adds a lot, but I think you should place it under the flyswat like it's just been killed, and maybe add a little bit more blood.

@fagerholt

then you hardly see the dead fly, maybe make it a few minutes later, so you see a larger blood trail?



:-) mwuhahahaaa

Cool idea, great job with the flies and swatters! It seems just a tad empty on the face of the clock but I'm not sure what you could put there.

blood trail ftw! I never thought i'd want to wear a shirt with flies on it but you make it possible! one small thing, i think the hour swatter could be shortened a bit.

-scattered some flies in the bigger groups

-made the bloodtrail longer

-made the two o'clock flies fly away (any good?)



-still don't know what to put in the center of the swatters

-maybe rotate the small swatter, so that they won't make almost a 90' angle?

maybe the whole clock could be on a spider web, with the flies stuck? that could make it a little less empty.

or just put a spider in the center of the swatters? hmm.

i like how it is now. adding something in the background i think would give it a kinda busy feel to it (thats just me). i love the smashed fly with the blood trail nice touch. i say submit it, looks good. feel free to critique mine:



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looks great with the swatted fly! i dont think it needs anything in the middle. i say sub :)



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The swatters look a bit flat to me. Maybe adding some shades?

hehe, great idea!! I like it the way it is, it has the style of conceptual art. Do not add any background. Good luck with your submission!!



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@Schlo,

agree with the shading, i was working on that to get it better :-)



no background will be added. i think it's not necessary, and it takes away the simplicity...

i think this is it! ready to sub :-)



re-worked the swatters with more shine and shade.

what do you think about the 2 o'clock flies, flying away?

Wow this is ready to sub. Go for it. Please rate my design. 5$$

did you know there are Time Flies? :-)

looks great! my only suggestion is to make the wings of the 2 o'clock flies perpendicular to their body so they look more like they are flying!



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nice

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@iamabeast

good point... i'll change that in the next/final version

haha...great idea...i wish the two o clock flies were underneath the swatter and is already dead...while the three are the ones flying off...anyway...it still looks great as is. :)

Great idea, great image. Submit!



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brilliant! submit it.

final version, with the 2 o'clock fly spreading it's wings :-)

good idea!



if you have time critics are welcome

Sub it!

that's just what it needed! time too sub! good luck!



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lol

Nice.

hey mtths, have you subbed this yet? if not, you definitely should! it is great :)

That a good pic. Agree, sub it.



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vote now, before the time runs out! :-)