hi guys i wanna know what you think about this idea is a remix of two t shirts that are around here organ donor



http://www.typetees.com/product/1628/Organ_donor_see_inside_for_details

and the other one is cut here

http://www.threadless.com/submission/108796/cut_here/showmore,designs

so yeah is a big ass cliche but i want it to make it so what you think should i keep whit the work or just let it go

by the way in the little tag says

hi! my name is :

and im an organ donor !!!

if dead cut in the dashed line

so let me know what you think

o i forgot to tell you the gray ones organs are in silver foil

That's a really cool concept, not sure about the colours, what does it look like on white?



I hate to do this but if anyone could check out mine that would be sweet. Maybe threadless needs some sort critique ratio thing where you can have x amounts of comments on your own if you've commented on other peoples? I dunno.



http://www.threadless.com/critique/39083/Octuplove

Just the bright red sort of jars a bit, which I suppose is the point? Could the ret bit be made the colour of organs maybe?

i like it. and i like the name tag: "if dead" heh.



great job.

hey thanks for the comments guys what you think about other organs in the back like kidneys maybe the spine ??? and maybe put a name on the tag ??

I think the tag should say "cut on the line" rather than "cut in the line"



Having just a few of the organs outlined with foil seems a bit odd to me.



And I agree with johnjwaters about the red standing out way more than the organs.



I think you have a good start, it just needs some tweaking.

I love it made me laugh, but yeah maybe the colours should be different. i like how the blues and dark colours match, but it feels like its blending in

Also if you have the time

Whats on your Mind

maybe try it with red dotted lines on a lighter shirt. Funny idea!

I like the idea and agree with most of the comments above.

I'd only add that there's no need to add the name tag... maybe just use it for the instructions, or at least you should make more obvious it's a tag for an organ donor.

Maybe some scissors on the dashed line to imply cut out?

Other than that, funny and important idea!

Crit mine if you have the chance?

its good as it is...maybe extend the esophagus into the edge of the neck of the shirt...

I think it looks excellent & clever the way it is. The subtle hint of foil is a good idea here. If you begin adding extra elements then it will just becom over-worked. Stick to your guns man, & go with this. I love it.



Check mine out, if you could be so kind:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/37721/Double_Jeopardy

i m new here... but i think idea is grea here.. but some x-factor is missing...!! i think so...

so this is the new version a few changes

first i change the silver foil for red ink

second added more organs

change the tag and what is write in it

the tag says

IF DEAD:

*verify i’m really dead

*check your blood type

*get a scalpel or some sharp instrument

(please don’t use a pen or school siccsors)

*take out what you need and zipp it up

*have a nice day

im an organ donor !!!

if dead cut on the dashed line

i dont know if is whort it a special inke a suede ink for the dashed lines ??? wht you guys think ??

So much better! Nice work.



Speak your mind!

hahaha this made me laugh. good job!

Not bad for an organ-tee



However, work on the small intestine a bit more, it has a more regular pattern, zig-zag rather than confusing knot.

haha..I really like this...nice.

very good.

maybe change the text "cut on the dashed line" to "cut along the dashed line"

Oh yeh i like this more now! more clear! I think it says what it needs to without any special ink!

really cool i like the look

i preffer the first version, i don't think the red works in here.. perhaps in the heart, but not in the rest.

I also liked the "my name is..." thing.

I think you should save the colors from the first submition, and that "my name is..." thing, and also save the lungs from the second version.





Feel free to critique my design also!

Awesome! i like this version much better. i prefer the red over the white in v1, more interesting. You should use the embroidery for the dashed line. Newly updated design, feel free to critique:



http://www.threadless.com/critique/38918/Primary_Listening

Cool!!!.. I like it!!!.. mm... in my personal case..

if I die.. they are not gonna accept my liver!

ahhahhahahaa...too much alcohol! ...lol



anyways.. I think its ready!!





Please, come check mine!!

awesome ... SUBMIT ....

plz critique my designs

Turn Me On

Sea,Hear,Speak

Sumitt! I think all the organs should be dashed, just as they are.



Burrow of the hedgehogs

I really like this dude, especially the instructions on the bottom. Maybe make those a little bit bigger so it can be read easier?



check out mine please?

I like this one!

Nice job Yukatronic!!!







Can you help me, please?

I LOVE it. As an organ recipient and mother of a donor, I give this design a whole-hearted two thumbs up.

Great idea, submit now.