I don't really like the idea of wearing a big sheet of paper. Also I'd prefer if it were actually hand written instead of with a font.





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hmm. I'm not sure what to tell you

Only come here after crit. this guys design, if you want to

i can tell you one thing: threadless will reject this. i know from trying to submit a similarly text-y design recently. see if this can be illustrated- if not, you should move on.

funny

try submitting it as a type tee!

i actually started out with it handwritten, but changed it cos i thought this looked cleaner....what do you guys think?

at the moment, this is more of a slogan tee. history of threadless tells us that people dont like text with illustrations. pick a genre and work with it.

i'm trying to brainstorm ideas of how to make it more visual.....any ideas for genres or how to illustrate it would be much appreciated

hmm just throwing out an idea. maybe have one guy writing overacheiver graffiti on a wall and nother guy drawing an X on the over. just a thought...

if anything i'd agree with iamabeast

thanks for your crit!

i understand the concept however im not sure its developed enough to be a tshirt maybe include a person or something that depicts it

how about an over achiever holding up a underachiever

hmm very interesting ideas, i like them... why do you think about having the paper behind it have notes from a hard looking class and having them evolve into really involved doodles?

a design like this has already been submitted (and printed i think). I like the idea though. Why over-achiever? I think your new idea of the doodles becoming under-achiever and then crossed out to be achiever could work. What about taking the doodles idea from basic to complex, thus making the design evolve into something of an "achievement"?



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Thank you! I like all ideas, I agree with including a person or more and underachiever would work better, maybe have "under" written by a person in plain letters and "achiever" written in colors, with artful letters...

I think right now this is underachieving still...need to see some progress.



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how did you get the lines like a piece of notebook paper?

maybe add a hole on the side to really match what the paper looks like

i like it a lot



please check my first design if you have a hot second

I think I would buy it if it had a really simple picture to go with it without the notebook lines.

this version was intended to be more visually appealing while maintaining the same theme. please comment :)

I dont why this is so stretched out... sorry folks

woooow, i like it, just integrate it with the shirt, nice style...maybe more colors...but nice!

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That paper don't belong to this shirt!



Remove it and ut will be good!



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remove the paper.

comment on mine ?

Hmm, a neat shirt I suppose but looks a bit too sketchy, perhaps if this were digital instead of just being a scan. The bottom left kind of just cuts off as well. Some cool doodles on this, wish it fit the shirt a little better as well.. maybe if it were higher?



Trying to submit something before my birthday so if you want to return the favor and give me some criticism it would be most appreciated :D

I kinda like the storyline idea but its just too busy... definitely needs cleaning up. And may be try to keep all your fonts the same.



Please crit this? Thanks!

Actually, I like the scetch quality of this - agree with BlueHippo - just pull the design up a bit so that all the little goodies at the bottom don't get lost when it's worn

Please crit this?

I agree with Bluehippo. Some good sketches, but i think it would look better if it were a bit more polished. I also kind of like the idea of this being on some kind of test or homework paper.

i think that perhaps it has to many elements, and that blank space in the middle its somehow anoying me.

but i would like to see it after cleaned and "polished"



Also, Rubik Robots - Unsolved Vs Solved is almost ready for submission. Any last opinions? :)

Good concept. the cut off in the bottom left corner is bugging me

I think it's just too much of everything and there are more than 8 colors right?



http://www.threadless.com/critique/41114

i think that it looks a little squished like you have changed the scale but not locked it so its all out of proportion try adjusting it if you can and maybe work on smoothing it out slightly...cool sketch but

cool idea ...the random collage, but maybe not random enough? add more color...but all in all cool. let me know when the new one is up B)

i agree with digitalizing it...but still getting that sketchy feel, also i think that the words, overachiever should be more dominant along with the man, you could do this by making the words bolder....more crisp maybe, or a dominant base color along with your shading. take a look at some graffiti words and how they make them stand out. you'll get ideas from that! and also have the sketches more subordinate, maybe tone them done...use less color variety, maybe some lower tint, then it would look its a controlled madness instead of just madness. hope this helps! :)



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