I like this...the design is good...good offset and its nice and clean...its kinda lacking something tho....Try adding some humor.

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haha, like having an angel sitting on the left side cloud :-)

I like the concept, but I'd rework the cloud.. The lines just seem a little harsh. The angel idea's nice.. Or maybe birds, being pushed off the way?



When you have some time,i'd like your opinion on this one...

i'm indeed working on the cloud to make it more fluffy/cushion-like..

I love it alot! Really want it on a tee, so I´m gonna help all you want. The cloud looks a little to hard, you should maybe soften it up a bit. Maybe some perspective in the hole too. Looking forward to seeing where this is going.



I would really appriciate your vote and comment on this!



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nice design & right suggestions



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/38228/We_can_sing_better

made the cloud a lot softer and added the angel looking down the hole :-)

lose the angel.

lose the angel?!?



i don't think so :-)

You should call it a "fly by chuting"..like "fly by shooting"...

hahahaa

Whether you keep or lose the angel is up to you but I defintly like that there is more story going on in this version...maybe add another angel looking up

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http://www.threadless.com/critique/38230/We_re_all_gonna_die



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/38207/bile

by adding one more angel, the balance between the two of them is lost i think

i like the 1:1 figures, one skydiver vs one angel...

I really like the angel, I think that that really makes this design though his position is a little wonky. I think another cloud would be nice. If you have time, I'd appreciate your advice.

I say keep the angel like that, however, I would play with the colours a bit. There is something about the colour scheme that makes this design depressing. Maybe have it on a white background, or baby blue? I like the idea though, and the concept is executed well here, just the colours are kinda sad-feeling. Hit me back please.

new color version, wich makes it a lot lighter and more sky-like



any suggestions?

I think you should try some more blue t-shirt colors, this one is good but loses the nice contrast.

Oh now it is looking very nice.



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/38228/We_can_sing_better

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http://www.threadless.com/submission/199198/True_love_always_wins/showmore,designs

haha really cool! great idea/illustration. I think the skydiver could be a little bit closer to the cloud- on the shirt he seems separated from the rest of the design. Also I prefer the lighter blue to the dark blue. Good luck! :)

The colors have really improved the whole ting! I`m not too sure on the angel either tho. I would loose the darker skadowing on top of the cloud, have you tried it in halftones? I think that would make the cloud more airy.



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i think a little bit of work on the cloud shape would be good, i like the angel but i'm not sure about how the right side of the cloud goes down that way, i think it might work better flipped around actually, so the bottom edge is flat. very nice idea though



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/38143/Dawn_Of_The_Egg

Looks awesome! my only concern is the difference in style between the man falling and the angel who is completly lined out.

You should find a way to remove the stroke, or add it to the parachuter.

I agree with the above two statements. Re-work the cloud and remove the lines from the angel and make him like the free faller. Great idea. It's going to ace once you ironed out the tinks.



http://www.threadless.com/critique/38309/Don_t_cross_the_streams

I like it....would it be cool if there was another angel chasing him?

thanx for all the usefull comments!

i'm gonna experiment a bit with the clouds... :-)

this will def get printed...threadless is becoming quite predictable...awesome illus on the diver buddy.

I like it a lot.....but the angel looks like he's wearing navy blue, Hanes boxer-briefs and nothing else. That's bothering me for some reason.

It's a garder belt tublet....jeeez

re-worked the cloud, so it's more compact and right shaped...

added more cloud debris to the skydiver and moved him a bit closer to the cloud.



what do you all think?

i dont really like it whit a cloud so small what happens if you put some exclamation sign in the angels head just an idea and maybe change as someone stated before, change the t color

please when you have time



littleking

i like this!

can u add the placement on the tee??

added more clouds, to get more dept.

...still working on some different tee-colors



what do you all think?

The clouds in the background def add more depth. The illustration of the people are good and clean, although I personally don't like that style of drawing, still very well done. I know you are going for a white and blue scheme here but hmm.. are you thinking about adding another color? A halo on the angel would be cool. Other ideas Ill throw out there is maybe have some birds around and/or a plane in the distance, etc. etc.



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Red, Black and Blue

I like! Hmm the clouds in the background seem to be too close together. spread 'em out a bit.



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oh man! i totally forgot the halo on the angel....

good point!



would be cool if the halo is printed in yellow/gold metallic ink :-)

It's much better now. I'd like to see it placed on a real tee picture.

Plase check my progress with Ram Memory, and this new idea Baseball bat

why is the angel wearing Christopher Robin shorts and not some sort of heavenly garb? and i say make the black hair on the angel blonde.



Chimney Drinkey

i've only just seen the little cloud versions, i liked it like that, i agree with iamabeast, i think they're a bit close together now. i'm excited to see the halo :-)



check my latest version :-)

I really like the idea, but I have to say, besides a halo, stick with the white and blue color scheme, it totally fits the style. Although the angel's style is a bit odd, I have to agree. Other than that I think it looks great.



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Cool!

You definitely need the halo on the angel

i agree with iels about the halo, but otherwise love the color and the more clouds! good luck with the submission



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re-worked the angel, with different hair, shorts :-) and a halo.

also added some angel shade on the cloud to get more dept.



i think it improved a lot, what do you think?

re-worked the angel, with different hair, shorts :-) and a halo.

also added some angel shade on the cloud to get more dept.



i think it improved a lot, what do you think?

the halo and the new underwear look great. i'm still not convinced about the surrounding clouds but the characters are perfik now



any more comments before i submit? :-)

i perfer the angel on v5, but with the added halo.. it seems to stand out more with that color combination

i wish the placement was larger..

but i like it

http://www.threadless.com/submission/199376/Pear_Squared

if ya have a second

I like this angel better because it matches more closely to the other character... but I agree that previous color combination was better... you should keep this angel but with black hair and dark blue shorts.





please check my progress on Ram Memory

Also, try to place it over a real tee picture... it will look much better.

here you can find a lot of pictures:http://www.flickr.com/groups/lessthread/pool/



please check my progress on Ram Memory

I like this idea, and the lighter blue looks a lot nicer than the darker blue. It makes me think of the angel looking up tho, like the chuter is crashing through his cloud roof.





I've got one out too if you have any thoughts... Apples

by re-working the angel, i indeed lost the color match between the two figures :-(

working on that to get it back.. black hair might be it..



also re-working the hole in the cloud,

to get rid of the misunderstanding of an upside down cloud (?)

I love the progress you`ve made! It looks amazing. The clouds are alot better. I think it`s ready! Good luck!



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I really love this! I have nothing to say as far as improvements, looks good to me.

back to his old underwear and dark hair :-)

it just looks better when both figures use the same color-scheme.



also added extra color diversity in the hole of the cloud and extra shadow on the left one.

This looks great! I think it is ready to sub :)



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the shadow on that the lowest cloud has made in clear to me what i don't like about them, i think i'd like the lowest cloud higher up, on the image, not higher in the sky, so still below the main cloud, but higher up the picture.



if you get me meaning lol.



mind, no-one else has mentioned the clouds so its prolly just me.

@mr deps,



when i added the three clouds in v5, i've been shifting the cloud on the left as you said. but it just didn't work. it's nicer to have those lower clouds more aligned as they are, otherwise you get a big empty space in de lower left, wich isn't so nice....



but thanx for the clouds comments, it keeps me re-thinking the design

oh yeah, i now you mention it i could see that

Ah, the halo has arrived! Nice one, look great.

Changing back to the modern shorts you've started with, is a good thing.

I think you are done! sub it!



I'm almost done with Ram Memory I'd really appreciate your comments before submitting.

very cool! only thing i don't like is the left cloud. if it is close enough to the main cloud to get a shadow on it, it wouldn't be such a faded color like the two on the right, it would be closer to the color of the main one. plus i don't think the main cloud would make such a clean lined shadow on it.

I like it! I agree with admann about the shadow on the left cloud. It looks too clean and closer than I think you meant.

fixed some cloud colors (far&closeby) and changed some shadows.

and experimented with a flash presentation :-)



i hate the (?) on the left, it's automatic added by threadless when uploading.

This is all kinds of cool. Love it. Can't think of anything more to add.

This is looking good.

I read through some old comments. Renaming it "Fly-by Chuting" like Wigglefish suggested would be funny.

Your flash experiment worked perfectly.

I think maybe you should get rid of all the extra clouds. I dont think you really need them when i see how it looks on the shirt itself. Without the shirt placement i think they work but on the shirt...i don't know.



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Really funny...would definitely wear it...im loving it...Cant think of any suggestions...submit it!!!



check mine:



http://www.threadless.com/critique/38544/Bird_Of_Prey

looks ready to me :)



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Yea I say you should submit it!!



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http://www.threadless.com/profile/877326/HMX23/critiques

just a final post because of the extra cloud remarks (V.4 vs V.9)

(where the left cloud in V.9 is reduced to a normal round shape)



so.....?



1 cloud, or 4 clouds

OK, this is it :-)

Yeah! I like it!

Sub it!



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It looks great and it even looks better on a T. If you have time can you look at mine. #1 #2

Awesome, I'd buy it.





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its really well executed and clever! sub it plz!

looks great :)



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very good

sub sub sub*_~

lol... SUB. very well done



http://www.threadless.com/critique/38424/Dreamer_Beaver#lastcomment

sub!

Yeah, this looks really good.



Thoughts, anyone?

Just wanted to say thanks for your comments on my critique for Watch Where You Sit, and let you know that it's finally up for running if you'd like to score and comment on it.



Watch Where You Sit



Shirt's coming along great, I think the slightly adjusted colors really improves it, as well as the tighter cloud placement. I'd like to own this shirt. If I get a shirt printed and this shirts prints I'll be using my store credit here

Sub! Sub!

it's up for voting now! :-)

Hehe I find this so funny!

Well done!

Crit mine if you have the chance?

okay i voted for it! thanks for your suggestions on my critique!



Please score mine

Nice

Particularly love the cloud imprint he leaves! sub it!





Plz vote on my first sub here!

@ Dexter Spandex



it's in the sub-list! go, and have a vote ;-)

Awsome! Sub it

lol ... great one ...

S U B M I T ...

plz critique mine ...

who is he ???

Awesome. Im voting right now!

Can you help me out with Sweeney Toad?