Man, this is probably the hardest thing I've done. To write in this awful language-style really takes a lot of energy :)



Anyway, I'm sure you get the idea... All feedback is good feedback (or is it publicity?).



Thanks.

Too much text maybe?

I don't think there's too much text. I think that there is a lot of text does a good job of getting the point across. I don't think I see what it's on, though. Is it a phone? Or a computer screen? Or am I just stupid and incapable of top-down processing to the point that my mind is trying to make it something it's obviously not?



Clarify that, work on making it make sense, then try again.



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Please critique my design.



All feedback is appreciated! Thanks!

Oooh, thanks for pointing out the problem. A lot of people just rate without the "why".



It's a truck! That's the whole point... Will make sure to make it clearer.



You know those "If you read this, you're too close"-signs? Hope it makes sense to you now.



Thanks.

Not huge changes...



I made it look more like a truck I hope and changed the punchline since some might be bothered by it...



All the shirt-colors can be found on the first version.



Let me know your thoughts!

it still doesn't look like a truck-maybe if you add a road or somethin'...

and the red on the orange hurts my eyes-try a darker colour

Thanks, I'll do that.

Just one question so I realize if this will ever work or not - are people familiar with the sign "If you can read this, you're too close" on the back of trucks and similar vehicles?



Thanks.