Nothing good ever happens when toothpaste and orange juice mix!

Looking for feedback on the idea and poses. Should the poses be more dynamic and fill up more of the shirt or should I stick with the more "Beat It" style poses.

I'll of course clean up the lines for the final version.

I absolutely agree on the concept and think it is a great idea. I am having a hard time at first glance telling that is orange juice when looking at it at first I thought it was suppose to be beer and water and was confused. I think that if you were to put an orange slice or maybe drewon the glass a carton of orange juice that had a pic of an orange on it possibly. maybe a different color shirt so it sets the tooth paste off a little and show us more of the tube it is being squeezed out of.

I love the concept and the "beat it" poses. and I think your character faces look cool


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I got the OJ right off the bat but I didn't get the toothpaste at first.

Love the design. I think the tooth paste / tooth brush does not get conveyed well. I can tell its OJ, but not so much on the tooth paste. Go for it!

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I like the drawing but the toothpaste I would not have gotten until I read your comments. But I like the drawing style so much that I want this to continue and cant wait to see it progress. Also the shirt should be a different color than the colors of the the toothpaste, if it remains that color.

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I'm a lot more confident with this version. I feel like it's a lot more clear what's going on. Probably still need to work on the colors though.

maybe a straw held in a menacing way would
be a more appropriate weapon for
the glass of oj?

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adorable! i like the changed toothbrush in this version, & the expressions on their faces- anything you could do to make the toothpaste blob look even more immediately like toothpaste would be good.

also, maybe the orange juice could be carrying a drinking straw (red & white striped?) sharpened/cut to a point.. just because the blob's toothbrush makes so much sense, but the knife not so much (unless i'm missing something.)

nice image :)

I'd appreciate your opinion..

sorry, i was a second too late for the straw thing ;)

It's reading better now. Don't know if Toothpaste needs reddish color. Or is that Aquafresh? Nice that toothpaste has appropriate weapon? Could you think of something OJ related for the juice—maybe a sprayer or super soaker? Add subtle shadow? Good luck!

Looking better. Still not sure that the tooth paste is coming across well tho. Keep it up!

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Thanks for all the comments so far everyone! I think this version is pretty to close to submission.

Definitely like the addition of the straw. The toothpaste still kind of looks like a water droplet to me, with some red stuff in it. Cute idea though.

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Very funny!Just don`t like the shirt color that much, but I guess that is just personal taste.

I could also use some help with mine

The straw makes the whole differense for me, and I think the toothpaste just need some other colors. Some of you`re previous versions were better I think.


I could also use some help with mine

I would change the shirt color and define the tooth paste a bit better. the idea is great. it's getting there.

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I think the toothpaste should be less rounded at the top- at first i thought it was a water droplet. also i might change the light blue stripe on it to white. cool though :)

Maybe these colors work better?

lmao this is great, only thing i would change is the color of the shading, maybe make it like that darker blue color, but then also make is somewhat transparent so it looks more like shading than a bunch of different blotches...great idea, i like it! please critique mine, 789 REVAMPED!!!

LMAO. I am so weak about this right now. This is hilarious, & so true.

I think you should go with a black or a white shirt to really make the image pop.
Kudos kid, you're funny as hell.

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don't change it! submit submit submit!!!

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jajajaja i love it!!!
though i was the only one....

nice work
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HAHA. I KNEW there was someone else out there who felt my pain! I really like the color pallet. A lot.

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Maybe just some shadows under them. Submit. If you get a chance, http://www.threadless.com/critique/37792/Unlucky and http://www.threadless.com/critique/37740/Watch_Your_back
Thanks

Hahaha I like this...I really like the idea.


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http://www.threadless.com/critique/37665/Sumo

I agree, they could use shadows

nice, i like it.

i think you should take the red off of the toothpaste's eye.

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Thanks for the comments everyone! It's up for voting now

maybe put some ice cubes or an orange slice on the glass, bc i thought he was mouth wash at first. ah man I just read the comment above. look at mine?

ohh.. why are they enemies.. but, hey.. i say submit this! *_~