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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
Not quite finished with the trees and background. And I really want to learn how to make a nice raster shadow. Anyone know of a good tutorial?
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
It`s supposed to be WALKING THE DOG, not waling...
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
It`s supposed to be WALKING THE DOG, not waling...
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JTillustratesmore on Feb 19 '09
it's nice work in progress, at the moment i'm being a bit put off by the trees, even though i know they're going to be improved. good start though.
please vote for my latest sub http://www.threadless.com/critique/37590/waling_the_dog |
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
Yeah, I`m working on the trees right now.
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
Made some changes to the trees, but I`m still not sure. Are they too "scary"?
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Santo76 on Feb 19 '09
trees needs leaves to quit being scary... If you are going with the green tee, wich seems a good choice, you could just us a lineart to define the folliage.
Also the real dog position is kind of odd it should be facing the path direction. Please take a look to my Dirty Dancing -deer-tee-dancing- idea |
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miss glitter on Feb 19 '09
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maby some more shading on the human and tress? also how will this be placed?
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monkeydumpster on Feb 19 '09
LOL. I like it.
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Casey Laws Lapin on Feb 19 '09
The dog's two black legs are a bit strange. Would the design just cut off on the edges? I'd like to see how you're going to solve that on a shirt template.
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
A bit more work on the trees, added leaves to make them less scary. Also a brand new dog!
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
What do you say about the placement on the template?
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PofZ on Feb 19 '09
the dog looks much better, and so do the trees. the placement looks pretty decent. i don't know where else you could put it.
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warnock on Feb 19 '09
Love the bird in the tree! Maybe some more details like that? Maybe something in the grass? I donno its just a suggestion.
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monchee on Feb 19 '09
I would maybe add more leaves to the tree and also color.
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Brightwood on Feb 19 '09
I love the blended effect of the leaves. I agree with more leaves. I don't think the robot needs words. Its funny without it being a poop disposal.
Comments on the progression? Any thots here? Catfish Games |
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
Thanks, more leaves it is! Yeah, i`m not sure about the word either.
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johnpaul24 on Feb 19 '09
haha i like it
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
Anyone else think I should keep/loose "poop disposal"?
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sia f. baby on Feb 19 '09
loose it
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DinosaurVoodoo on Feb 19 '09
keep the poop disposal, its a small joke that just adds to it, the placement is what definatly wins me over on this design, feels just right.
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
So that`s 1 for keeping the text and 2 for loosing it.
I have a q about the placement, is it possible to print the bottom area, below the dotted line? |
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martulai on Feb 19 '09
i like it alot
oh yah and think more leaves too |
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Henni81 on Feb 19 '09
I`ll make some more leaves tomorrow! Thanks for the feedback.
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divisionst06 on Feb 19 '09
This is really cool, you sould play up the robots multidimensions a little more.
Score my submission if you get the chance: http://www.threadless.com/submission/197899/Roots |
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notnorm on Feb 19 '09
YES! Our society is totally backwards. Yeah, the text on the chest draws my attention to that joke first. I would draw mostly on the reaction of the guy on how ridiculous his life is. Great concept!
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campout on Feb 19 '09
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nice concept...maybe make the real person and dog more cartoony? and the robot seems a bit flat...keep it up.
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f8xmulder on Feb 19 '09
Really cool idea and for the most part good execution. I wish the trees had a few more leaf bumps to fill them out, and the path could be detailed a bit more. Well done though!
Ediscope Awesome-O-Meter |
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iamabeast on Feb 19 '09
I love the idea! I think you should probably have both of them walking by each other on a horizontal path. That way you wont have to deal with the complicated angles. That is just my opinion. This idea made me literally laugh out loud, great job!!!
thanks for the comment on my design :) |
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Rhodescholar on Feb 19 '09
It looks good have you tried it with a little darker outlines around the man and robot to seperate them from the background. I know that is probably a stylistic choice but I was just curious to see if it would made a difference? Looks really good.
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nittygritty on Feb 20 '09
Loose the poop disposal. I don't think that it needs more leaves... the guy has a face with a funny expression.
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awl_rock on Feb 20 '09
nice design, although i think the red cord that joins the dog to its robot master is too tight. I would maybe loosen it up a bit just so it doesnt look like its been drawn on a computer
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Good ideas people, wish I had put some of my other designs up for critique first...
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Ellogoods on Feb 20 '09
LOVE the concept but you need to sell it more- like maybe have them meet- the dog robot and robot dog sniffing each other while their owner kind of face each other as well--
that way they would be the prominent idea of the shirt-- just my humble opinion- good luck!!!! Please vote on my latest submission: Punching Kitty |
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
A bit more details added to the design. Tell me what you think.
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Alexbaldwin on Feb 20 '09
I think that it would look odd on the t-shirt that the paths just stop at the edges... maybe instead of the paths going out to the sides, they could curve back inwards and meet behind the trees (of course you wouldn't have to see that, since it could be obscured by the foliage).
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Yeah, IŽm trying to find a solution to that. Do you think it would be better if they went all the way around the back?
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Please vote between these three versions to the layout problem I have been working on. From the top 1,2,3.
For details to the design, please see previous version. |
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Oh, the shadow on the robot in nr. 1 is places wrong.
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Alexbaldwin on Feb 20 '09
I like the one on the bottom right best
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Should I change the dog color on the one on the bottom right? To dark brown, or is it fine as it is?
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B-vans on Feb 20 '09
The bottom right to me is the best, as without the path this would work great as a t-shirt. It doesn't need to be framed as such as the juxtaposition of all the elements (trees, robot and man) all work well as they are. Good stuff!
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
If I make the shadows a bit more transperant, will that count as a new color? Please let me know if you see something obvious that can stop me from getting printet. New to this
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WaiDesign on Feb 20 '09
maby my screen is off but bottom left(without road) dog is fading to backround and i like woodpecker:D
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Francesa on Feb 20 '09
Bottom right - without the path is the best for a shirt.
Make the shadows halftone patterns and they'll be lighter. Google "halftone tutorial" and the name of your program. |
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Yes, you are right about the dog Waidesign. I`m thinking of changing the dogs color to dark brown.
Thanks Francesa. |
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KNX on Feb 20 '09
I like the bottom right a lot it would look good covering the entire front of the shirt
what do yo think of mine http://www.threadless.com/critique/37687/Gas_Mask |
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nesbeth on Feb 20 '09
I like the lower-right hand version as well. It would make the entire shirt part of the illustration. Nice work! This has come a long way.
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nesbeth on Feb 20 '09
I like the lower-right hand version as well. It would make the entire shirt part of the illustration. Nice work! This has come a long way.
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Brightwood on Feb 20 '09
Good job. Agreed lower right. But without the path I think the mushroom placement is out of balance. It is so red it makes me need something in the lower left of the image.
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Rhodescholar on Feb 20 '09
bottom right looks best looks really good
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
I can`t thank you all enough for helping me with my design, if you look at the first one you can see I`ve come a long way... All thanks too you!
So just bear with me a little longer, and IŽll be off to be voted. |
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e-cybo-pooch!
love the idea. i might move the trees a little to the right, the placement just seems a tiny bit awkward to me at the moment. also, the mushroom are cool but they seem out of place. if you want to keep them i'd add more of them throughout the design anyway, great work, i'm sure it will do well |
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Thanks, yes IŽm also having a problem with the mushrooms. Anyone else think that I should loose them, or make more of them?
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linzelaine011 on Feb 20 '09
I would lose the mushrooms. I just don't feel like they add anything to the design. I really like the robodog's plug leash.
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Thanks, does that also go for the poo on the left?
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thejazbo on Feb 20 '09
I think the idea is great! My opinion is that all of the smaller elements in the design kind of distract from the main concept. So, maybe lose the mushrooms, poo and bird in the tree? I agree about the plug leash, that's awesome.
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Oh, no not the bird :-( But I`m happy to take away the poo and the mushroom.
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
In one of the erlier versions it was a text on the robot, poop disposal. I am wondering about taking it back again. What do you think?
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JDragon on Feb 20 '09
No leave the text off, and lose the smaller elements, their distracting.
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nomixedcoinsplease on Feb 20 '09
yeah put back the text and loose the mushrooms. cool idea!
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
I`m feeling torn...
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matt_o on Feb 20 '09
consider adding some light light light green text at the bottom, round edge fonts (no sharp angles). Also, I vote taking the poo out, it might be too controversial :)
otherwise, awesome idea |
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matt_o on Feb 20 '09
http://www.threadless.com/critique/37663/Summer_Clouds if you'd take a look at my first submission, I'd appreciate it
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Any comments on the shadows? Not used to shadowing, so could use some help.
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audgepodge880 on Feb 20 '09
:)
this is wicked cute. I would wear this. I really like how you did the trees too. What program did you use? |
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Henni81 on Feb 20 '09
Thank you! I used Illustrator, I really like that program now, but I sure had a hard time with it at first.
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iamabeast on Feb 20 '09
This looks alot better since you got rid of the paths! I kind of feel like the person, robot, and dogs need outlines, but maybe it's just me. The shadows look pretty good to me.
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adorablepancreas on Feb 21 '09
lol i love how the robot dog's leash is a plug. I think it's good as it is.
Any thoughts on mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/37633/You_Complete_Me#lastcomment |
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mreisel on Feb 21 '09
The shadows look good. I say submit. When you get a chance, http://www.threadless.com/critique/37740/Watch_Your_back
Thanks |
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Henni81 on Feb 21 '09
Thanks! I guess IŽm near the end on this one.
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tulslost on Feb 21 '09
Looking really good now. Ready for Sub. Good luck!
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RAD_Design on Feb 21 '09
nice concept
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Henni81 on Feb 21 '09
Last chance to comment befor it`s off to be votet!
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simply unique on Feb 21 '09
this is great...i say go for it!
check mine out? http://www.threadless.com/critique/37650/peace_tree |
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R Thull on Feb 21 '09
Looking good. The human looks a little stiff though. His foot looks like it's aimed the wrong way. Also, the whole design seems to be leaning a bit to the right. You could rotate a degree or two counterclockwise. Good luck!
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Henni81 on Feb 21 '09
Thank you for the feedback, yes struggeling with the human... Any suggestions how I could make the design balanced?
Please pick on me, I want even the smallest critique. |
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G.D.S.M.S. on Feb 21 '09
I like it on the green shirt
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zenbolic vision on Feb 21 '09
i think is great with nice use of negative color but i see this shirt as happy!!! so i think u need diff green sth more lighter! cause its depressing kinda kelly green shirts have to be handleed difrently they are nice but hmm i duno they are kinda dark if used in such happy though
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pattron on Feb 21 '09
looks great! i think you should make the trees look like they are in the ground more with some grass coming over the roots.
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Santo76 on Feb 21 '09
Yeah! that's it!
It's almost ready... but, why did you remove the "poo deposal" it was a great idea! and I agree with pattron about the tree roots... also, you should suggest the paths... maybe just with some green lines, it helped the composition... Please advice: RAM Memory |
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Henni81 on Feb 21 '09
Maybe the poo disposal should come back, I`m all for it, but a lot of people told me to take it away, so I havn`t really desided yet. Font ideas would be great!
Great idea on the tree roots Pattron, IŽll work on it and see. And IŽll try to see if I can suggest the paths, Santo. Thank you for helping me! I`m fealing kind of stuck. |
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Santo76 on Feb 21 '09
you should try to write it curved so it adjusts to the circle. Try it in one line over or under the circle... and also try it in two lines... you could use any font, I don't know if you need a robotic looking font, maybe just helvetica is ok... try it on dark gray instead of black so it is a little more subtle, a detail you will only see if you look closer, and this way no one will complain about it!
Please advice: RAM Memory |
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Danielcf2996 on Feb 21 '09
jajajaj so funny.....
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Henni81 on Feb 21 '09
wow, thanks Santos! I really think that will work well :-) I love it when people get spesific, and don`t just say "nice, keep it up"...
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callaguy on Feb 21 '09
I assume this is to be printed on the green color shirt? Kinda overwhelming, but I love the idea alot! Keep it up!
Critique me please! |
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122333 on Feb 21 '09
nice work
check out mine http://www.threadless.com/critique/37760/Fluidity |
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audgepodge880 on Feb 21 '09
I would buy this if I had money.
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christineattanasio on Feb 21 '09
I like this bunches!
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Henni81 on Feb 22 '09
Yes, it is supposed to be on a green shirt, but I would also really like it on mint, but I can`t seem to find a template for it. Maybe there is no mint color anymore?
Also it is on creme. |
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Henni81 on Feb 22 '09
Now I`ve added some gras at the trees roots, put pack the "poo disposal" on the robot (but in a descrete way I hope) and done some changes to the man. What do you think?
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RAD_Design on Feb 22 '09
id like to see this on a different color background. would this only go on a green shirt? why not more versatility. what about a curvy horizon line? that might make it more versatile on other colors.
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darkend iris on Feb 22 '09
lol nice 1,but maybe make the robotic dog look a bit mor robotic, i almost didn't realize...
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HowdyHotDog on Feb 22 '09
It's a well put together design :) the only thing really is making the robot dog more robotic, like the person above said . Oh, why did you take away the bird/poo/mushrooms? I think they added a nice touch. White looks great too imo.
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Henni81 on Feb 22 '09
I was also thinking about creme as a color on the shirt, and I would really like it on mint. But I can`t seem to find a template for it.
The dog and man is going to be a bit bigger, so hopefully that will clarify the robotic dog. But maybe I should do some changes on it. What do you think? I took away the bird, poo and mushroom because a lot at people told me they were distracting, but I`m missing the bird myself... But then again there is a lot of trees and birds at Threadless |
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Sofamonkeyz on Feb 22 '09
It's lookin good. I'd like to some more detail in the man tho
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DonnaLisa on Feb 22 '09
This on a shirt? LOL. for wal-mart maybe
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fezbeast on Feb 22 '09
HEY LOOK AT ME I'M DONNA LISA, I HAVE A BIG FAT FOOT OF INSECURITY SHOVED UP MY ASS, BECAUSE I HAVEN'T GOTTEN LAID IN A COUPLE HUNDRED YEARS... I AM A BITCH ON NEARLY EVERY SHIRT I SEE, I'M 40 AND STILL USE THE WORD "LAME", I ALSO HAVE SUBMITTED JACK SHIT FOR DESIGNS, AND SLOGANS, I'M A NOOB AND HAVE NO RIGHT TO TELL ANYONE ON THIS SITE ANYTHING ABOUT THEIR DESIGN, BECAUSE NOTHING I SAY IS CONSTRUCTIVE!!! fuck off
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DonnaLisa on Feb 22 '09
awww fezzy is upset because he is unoriginal.
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Brightwood on Feb 22 '09
Nice Job through critique. It's looking great!
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Thanks! I feal like I`m nearly finished. Working on what I think will be my last critique before submitting. But of couse, thats up to your feedback...
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Added a few details on the man. What do you think, old or new?
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JTillustratesmore on Feb 23 '09
i'm a little confused. i apologise if this is a stupid thing to say, but it's supposed to be a robot dog right?
if this was me, i would add some more smaller details for instance the branches still look a little jagged i would bring some of the leaves just overlapping a bit to take off the edge? also the roots of the tree and the man could do with a bit more detail. I like the shadows and the way the trees merge into the t shirt colour, i would suggest it gets printed only on this colour? otherwise another colour might take away an important aspect of the design? otherwise very good, in spite of what i said above you could probably submit this now. |
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Yes, it is supposed to be a robot dog. Because you`re not the only one asking about that I guess I have to make a new one. Any tips on that?
I think green on mint is the best color on this shirt, but also mint and creme works well I tink. Thank you for the advice on the trees! |
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monchee on Feb 23 '09
i think its done. i prefer the new.
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R Thull on Feb 23 '09
like the changes you made to the human. I think I liked the snowscape version from while back, but this works too.
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GoodKarmaKid on Feb 23 '09
Like the power cord leash. I think they should interact or something should be going on to take it to the next level. Like the robot waving to the guy. Or the robot dog barking up at a live cat in a tree from the base. Or someone is peeing.... Thanks for you comments. I voted on you design and checked out your other working design.
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Now IŽve done some work on the trees. And the robotdog hopefully looks more like a robotdog now?
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Sofamonkeyz on Feb 23 '09
I think you've done some excellent fine tuning since its beginning. I think you could submit this, although it's your choice if you want to continue working on it.
http://www.threadless.com/critique/37665/Sumo |
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JTillustratesmore on Feb 23 '09
I think this is definitely ready! Thanks for the comments on mine, i'm working on it tonight so please come back and re evaluate!!
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Last call, before I submitt!
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f8xmulder on Feb 23 '09
I'd submit. I think it's ready!
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callaguy on Feb 23 '09
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Now it`s submitted! Thank you all for the amazing help :-) Please help me when it`s up for voting!
Walking the dog |
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dannodepf on Feb 24 '09
wow lots of work done on this one! i'd add critique, but since its submitted i'll just say... good luck!
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Bootee on Feb 24 '09
It's looking great and definitely ready to go! Good luck with the submit!
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