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Traffic Spud on Feb 11 '09
I think the most important thing you can do is to bold the things which are in the foreground, just so it adds a little more fullness i guess. because when i first looked at it, i thought the robot was flying as it didnt seem to actually be "in" the scene and stuff.
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Francesa on Feb 11 '09
HaHaHaHaHa!
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WAK O on Feb 11 '09
great sketch man. um. explain the whole concept. it looks like this is heading down the road to success tho.!
PLEASE SCORE AND COMMENT! |
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WAK O on Feb 11 '09
this will have some nice detail
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R Thull on Feb 11 '09
WAK O, idea basically is that giant robot is tired from pillaging and stops to wind itself...
Any more thoughts to make this better? |
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Mamilia on Feb 11 '09
This is so cute! I t would look great as is on a white tshirt maybe with some spot colors, cant wait to see where you go with it..
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Viridian Space on Feb 11 '09
Id like to see it on a shirt template.
http://www.threadless.com/critique/37060/Color_Bathe |
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Color Depth on Feb 11 '09
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iamabeast on Feb 12 '09
Cool idea. Try coloring stuff in the background cool colors. most likely blue. Make sure that the robot really stands out when you color everything.
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R Thull on Feb 12 '09
here's color and placement idea.
Go back to v1 for whole illustration. Sorry for the glitchy v2&v3. |
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Nice, love the sketchy style!
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R Thull on Feb 12 '09
Yeah, not really meant to be sketchy in the end. It's justwell a sketch... But thanks.
Still looking for improvement ideas or title suggestions if anyone has any. |
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Casey Laws Lapin on Feb 12 '09
Great idea, and I like the blue/orange color scheme. It did take me a moment to figure out he was winding himself. That back arm gets lost. Just a matter of working that out I think.
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R Thull on Feb 12 '09
Right, the winding key gets lost. When I do the real line work I'll make it a heavier weight; that should help.
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POWELLY007 on Feb 12 '09
Maybe make the key orange, that will standout from the colours behind it. I think its a little too much for a t-shirt, maybe erase some the edges and some small areas on it, give it a worn/aged look, it'll attract your eye more to the robot also.
Think it cool though!!! please crit mine... http://www.threadless.com/critique/36952/Bloody_Love_Music http://www.threadless.com/critique/36947/Skull http://www.threadless.com/critique/36941/Leaf_face |
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I love the idea and desgin... i agree that some of it gets lost... I would recomend any of the suggestions already given and/or make the backgrouns buildings, fire and clouds solid color and light in the backgorund.... that will bring more attention to the foreground and robot! :)
if you can please vote for my first submittied design "Spoiled Sweet Tooth" Click here to check out "spoiled sweet tooth"t |
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R Thull on Feb 12 '09
Thanks all. I'll keep at it.
PLEASE SCORE MY OTHER SUBMISSIONS: MONSTER SHADOWS Penguin's Frozen Dinner |
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podlob on Feb 12 '09
Love it!
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alanroby on Feb 12 '09
I like it as is. I agree with most of the above comments. It didn't take me any time to see what's going on. Great color scheme. I'd wear it as is. I don't know if I'd like it all polished with crisp lines. But that style seems to get printed . . . so you might be right.
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iamabeast on Feb 13 '09
I like the sketchy style as well. Maybe try doing a crisp version to see how it looks, but I think the sketchy style may look the best.
please critique mine |
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Great sketch.
Look forward to seeing it cleaned up as at present there is not enough tonal contrast. |
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nikolauslegendre on Feb 14 '09
I like it alot. Fills space well , keep it sketchy, colors are among my favorites
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divisionst06 on Feb 16 '09
This is cool. I would say just watch out for the 8 color limit. It's too detailed for me to tell if there are more that 8 colors.
Return the favor?: http://www.threadless.com/critique/37342/Roots#v3 |
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callaguy on Feb 17 '09
Sweet! Robots do need sleep! Really does look like a Threadless T to me. Go for it!
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R Thull on Feb 17 '09
Here's the first round of refined line work. Still needs some work, like adjusting the weight and what not. Color to come...
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purplecow1057 on Feb 19 '09
v4 + v5 = excellence
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R Thull on Feb 21 '09
Here's what I've got for color so far. Still needs a little tweaking. I going to add some shadows to the clouds among other things.
Let me know your thoughts. Thanks! |
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ninkinsink on Feb 21 '09
the tuckered robot is so cool...
he needs to stand out more... maybe a different color so he doesn't blend in with the buildings? critique mine? it's called pup's palette |
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Henni81 on Feb 21 '09
Yes, very nice!! Maybe the buildings can have a darker grey, so the robot stands out more.
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xcarnoxometzx on Feb 21 '09
The color def helped out. The wind-up key is really apparent now. Very cool design. I agree, sub as is.
Please support my design w/ a high vote ($5) & an extra supportive comment on the verge of hyperbole lol :) Thank you in advance Tortoise and the Hare |
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zenbolic vision on Feb 21 '09
very very lovely as a mega shirrT! pront i would tone this bronze color alittle bit tooo harsh! pulls all ur attention in a scattering way that will visual distract from all the design so lets say tone in little more liess and mayeb try on softer shirt thats all i can say the rest is awesome good luck!!!
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122333 on Feb 21 '09
very very cool
you should have it glow in the dark check out mine http://www.threadless.com/critique/37755/Draw_me_a_Bath |
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adorablepancreas on Feb 21 '09
I think it's really cool. I would say it's ready to sub.
Thanks for commenting on mine. |
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Great concept and illustration! Title is good too. I think it would be ready to sub as-is, but it might be worth trying some of the color suggestions that people mentioned above.
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Sorry to say this at this point, I didn't see it before... It's really great as it is now (lines, colors, etc) but I wish there was some military intervention... maybe a tank in the street or a jet instead of the plane or the zeppeling.
Also, I would like to see it on the tee. Please advice: RAM Memory |
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JTillustratesmore on Feb 21 '09
i think this is great, submit!
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notnorm on Feb 21 '09
Really strong illustration and color. The one part that draws my eye is where the robot meets the ground on his rump. The interaction of that building with his cheek has a weird hovering effect to it.
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pseudofemme on Feb 21 '09
This is awesome, I've been watching for a bit- I still have sort of a problem seeing that he's reaching behind his back.. maybe if one of his hands were resting, weary in his lap, while the other reached back?
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pseudofemme on Feb 21 '09
p.s. in case i'm unclear, i mean to say that to me, he almost looks like his torso is on backwards & he's holding a videogame controller.. or maybe it's the angle of the key? it's sort of sticking up rather than out of his back?
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R Thull on Feb 21 '09
Good points about the key and rump areas. I'll see what I can do.
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XIEX on Feb 22 '09
thanks for the critique comment!
this is VERY cool. whats the placement gonna look like? i suggest at the bottom of the tee :] |
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R Thull on Feb 22 '09
Hey, before executing for real, wanted to get some feedback on switching the arms and key thusly. Had some comments last round that the arms looked backwards, and I think this helps. Also, changed the eyes so they're focused on the task at hand...
Let me know your thoughts! |
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R Thull on Feb 22 '09
See V4 for the placement.
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I like the angle of these arms better.
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Carixpig on Feb 23 '09
Looks great. Arms look way better in this revision.
I'd like to see the robot stand out a bit more. It's already pretty easy to pick out but it is still a pretty busy design. Maybe, as iamabeast suggested before, the city could be more muted still, and the robot a bit stronger in colour. The road behind the robot is a bit ambiguous too. Maybe one or two more buildings inteh street (image left) would help, or just a wreck on the corner where the building has fallen down, but actually looks like a vacant block. Don't worry about covering up a bit of your robot i.e. a building covering a bit of his bum would just add depth to the image. |
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Sofamonkeyz on Feb 23 '09
I'd agree the arms defintly look more natural in this one
http://www.threadless.com/critique/37665/Sumo |
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GoodKarmaKid on Feb 23 '09
I like version 4 with the fancy new arms. Like the sketch technique. I'd submit.
Help me with my design too. Thanks |
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R Thull on Feb 23 '09
Thanks, Crixpig. You some good points. Will revise so road behind goes somewhere. (didn't even notice that!) And maybe the building by Robot's bum overlaps for depth.
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Henni81 on Feb 23 '09
Yes, the placement of the arms is muvh better here. Nice progress! Looks pretty much finished.
l could use your help too |
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IfishIII on Feb 26 '09
Arms are definitely better. I think the key needs to be the color it was in the last version, though. I didn't notice it until i compared this version to the last one. Placement in v4 is great.
Also, if anybody has time, I'd appreciate comments on my design. |
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Francesa on Feb 26 '09
Brown flames? Brown?
You have room for two more colors. Maybe you could add some tiny people running. I like all the rest. This is looking good. |
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Henni81 on Feb 26 '09
I kind of agree with Francesa, the brown could maybe be a bit more orange, and wheres all the people? Arms is looking good tho, And it`s a amazing design, love the style!
Score and comment my design "Walking the dog" if you`ve got a minute. |
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R Thull on Feb 27 '09
flames seemed kinda bright to me before. didn't really see them as brown. i can try out some orange highlights though. maybe i'll try adding some people too...
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niiiiice looking good, I would just clean up some of the lines a bit and maybe add some highlights to make the robot a bit more shiny etc.
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Spieliewielie on Feb 28 '09
I like it very much, but you should definately clean up the lines of the new arms and the key. I agree on having some running people. It would be that last touch you need. they don't need detail, cause that wouldn't be doable. You can just make them the same colour as you lines as if they are shadows. Maybe some policemen with guns aimed on the robot.
You could keep that orange brownish colour imo. I do think you need a brighter orange to make it look more like flames. In that way you'd also give the flames a little more life. Also you could use that colour on the other objects which are orange/brownish to add some highlights. Great work! |
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midpisces on Feb 28 '09
Looking very nice. The colour used for fire in version 4 is more appealing & lively.
Please critique mine http://www.threadless.com/critique/38228/We_can_sing_better |
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Francesa on Feb 28 '09
I like the coloring and colors from V4 best. Maybe you could use that and make the robot red so he stands out from the buildings.
Comment on mine? Why Boobies are Blue |
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NealJMD on Feb 28 '09
Maybe if you made the robot orange and made all of the parts already orange blue, it would pop alot more. Also, the arm angle is a lot better, but the hand needs to be the same color as the elbow and shoulder joints, it took me a while to see it as a hand. A slightly brighter orange would definitely be nice. If you have time, I'd also appreciate your avice.
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RedRobotMonkey on Feb 28 '09
Ya I think at the bottom of the T is a good placement too. Hit me back please.
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dtran09 on Feb 28 '09
I don't get the title.
But the design is top-notch. Could you return the favor and critique my design? |
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pseudofemme on Feb 28 '09
Yay! The arms are great. Just to be annoying (sorry :) I still think the key could use some perspective-adjusting- it's still coming up out of his back at an angle & we're seeing the whole plane of it, rather than it being sort of foreshortened & sticking out straight from his back. Other than that, and fixing the road & maybe making the fire color stand out from the helicopter color, awesome. I think the next version could be the last!!
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pseudofemme on Feb 28 '09
p.s. the title makes perfect sense.
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The arms look a lot more human in this version.
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I like these arms. I think there needs to be some army personnel attacking him. Really nice work! If you get a chance, can you score/comment on mine? http://www.threadless.com/submission/198887/Watch_Your_back
Thanks |
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I liked the arms in the last version. Cool stuff.
http://www.threadless.com/critique/38309/Don_t_cross_the_streams |
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RAD_Design on Mar 01 '09
King Kong Robot! He really *&$% that city up. Nice drawing
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R Thull on Mar 01 '09
thanks people. good ideas.
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R Thull on Mar 07 '09
Okay, made quite a few tweaks. It's not totally refined yet. (Needs some cleaning up and I'm not sure about colors yet.) Since last round:
- Fancy new arms - Rump is behind building now - Fixed "road to nowhere" behind robot - Changed up the "ear" - Tried adjusted color scheme. (tan shirt instead of grey) - Sketched in a tank (this needs refinement) - Added scared people - Added highlights from fire sorces Thoughts welcome! |
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mr deps on Mar 07 '09
this is brilliant, makes me wish i had the patience to work on one design for more than a week.
the only thing that i don't like is the crumpled look to the top of the bank, all the other buildings look more 'realistically' destroyed to me so that stands out (just the bit by the robots bee hind). all in all though, great i'd love it if you could say some stuff about my eggs |
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IfishIII on Mar 07 '09
Great! All of your changes helped and i think as soon as your refine the tank, it's ready to sub.
I don't know which color scheme i like better, though. :\ They're both good. Oh, and I'd appreciate comments on my SuckerPunch sub if anyone has time :] |
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R Thull on Mar 07 '09
ah, didn't even see that. originally, i had the robot sitting on the building, so i guess i just carried it through. that's an easy fix.
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Looks great!
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love the colors on this...the only thing i don't like on that robot are the pupils being there...
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Spieliewielie on Mar 07 '09
Almost perfect! Just refine that tank and change that thing mr deps was talking about and you're done.
Btw the colours are perfect now. The more orange kinda glow on it really gives the design a better feel of destruction which is perfect for your concept/scene. |
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Spieliewielie on Mar 07 '09
Please take a look a thesemy sub: In heaven... & my crit: Mining his teeth
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Braniel on Mar 07 '09
dude that's such an awesome design
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R Thull on Mar 07 '09
Ryder Revolution, don't know what you mean bout the pupils. anyone else seem a problem there?
Thanks for the feedback people! |
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haha...you make my wip look like crap...anyway...i think the colors on v7 better...just a bit more cleaning up and this is ready to sub...keep it up!
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Great detail and nice updates! I think I prefer the colors in V7, but I like how the orangey-ness of V8 makes it look like evening.
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looks awsome, i say sub.
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BrickCitySinger on Mar 07 '09
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admann on Mar 07 '09
wow big improvement. this is very very sweet. i love the colors, idea, placement, just about everything. only thing i don't like is the lightning. i know it's just trying to add to the mood of the scene, but i like just seeing everything the robot destroyed. might just have to buy this one if it gets printed. could totally see this as a 24x36 poster on my wall too.
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admann on Mar 07 '09
oh, meant to ask about your line work too. did you trace a sketch in illustrator, or do a nice ink drawing and use the scan? great line work really makes it pop, a lot of people don't use line weights to their advantage it can really sell a design.
if you have a minute could you rank my design? |
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yeah like i wish his eyes were blank....with no "eyeballs" in them...it doesn't look as robotish with those pupils looking at stuff...just my opinion.
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R Thull on Mar 08 '09
Ryder Revolution: now you have me curious. I'll try some pupil/no pupil experiments and see if they go anywhere. I do personally like the robot to be "looking" at the turn key thing on his back, because it draws attention to what he's doing. Maybe there is a more robotic-looking pupil out there though...
admann: to be honest, I'm still trying to figure out the best process. I do full-time graphic design work, so I'm pretty proficient in CS, but I'm kinda new to doing serious illustration work. Right now, I'm starting with large sketches, then scanning and tracing all line work in photoshop with my wacom tablet. This seems to work pretty well, but sometimes it's slow-going, so I want to move towards doing most line work by hand and then scanning. Anyway, if any of you guys have insights about your processes, I'm definitely curious... |
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admann on Mar 08 '09
i am in the same boat. i'm an architecture background, but recently decided i want to do something more artistic and am trying to get into graphic design and illustration somehow. so the drawing of mine that's getting ranked right now is my first real illustration too. i've only done still life drawings before where everything is right in front of you. it turned out ok but i've learned a lot about the process that i'll continue to tweek. i did all my inking by hand and then colored in photoshop. one thing i noticed is the medium you use to draw on makes a big difference. i drew the bird twice. the second time i drew it quite a bit larger, and i used a pigment liner. it really helped the line quality when i scanned it, though i learned a lot and hope my second design has better line work. i found this article pretty helpful:
http://www.gomediazine.com/12/11/2006/comic_book_style/ |
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yeah give it a shot...can't hurt none.
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R Thull on Mar 08 '09
thanks for the insights, admann.
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areviR on Mar 08 '09
this is siiiick! i like the colors too. you should put it on a shirt template again and make it super large like on version v4 it looks way good on the shirt like that!
on the other hand i need to know if mine is ready to submit! http://www.threadless.com/critique/38527/Innanimal_Stand_tall |
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Pixelweltenbummler on Mar 08 '09
many of you are doing designs with robots... I love that.. mostly ^^
don't like the yellow coloring... but that's just my opinion... very cool design though! :) please comment on these ^^ : http://www.threadless.com/critique/38808/Lichtenstein http://www.threadless.com/critique/38846/Lips |
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Ehud L on Mar 08 '09
I'd say this great design is ready. maybe just straighten up the tank and sub. give me your opinion?
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Three-Ring-Circus on Mar 08 '09
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DinosaurVoodoo on Mar 08 '09
The placement really makes this, its a killer design and we just need more oversized prints.
Flaaamingo! Thanks :) |
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tiggerstar77 on Mar 12 '09
Nice! Much prefer these colours than the previous version.
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calvi on Mar 12 '09
I think the next version will be ready to go.
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muckey on Mar 13 '09
i agree with calvi.
Its great, but i think, somehow, you can make it.. "KABOOM"! Feel free to critique my design also! |
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Dexter Spandex on Mar 13 '09
love the colours, looks ready to sub to me!
Your vote needed here on my first subs please: This one! This other one! |
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muckey on Mar 13 '09
New Version of my design, check it out! :)
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J to the second power on Mar 13 '09
SUBNMIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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R Thull on Mar 13 '09
Thanks you guys! Your feedback has been way helpful. I'm hopefully gonna get to the final tweaks this weekend...
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MKcmyk on Mar 14 '09
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Francesa on Mar 14 '09
Three small comments.
The airplane should either be a fighter plane coming to attack or an airliner leaving in a hurry. The lightening is unexplainable. Maybe it should just go away. There's enough awesome stuff going on to leave it out and never miss it. I like the eye pupils. Comment on mine? aliens! |
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iamabeast on Mar 14 '09
this looked great from the time you started! i think it will be a print for sure :)
please score mine if you have time :) |
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iamabeast on Mar 14 '09
i have a question about you line work as well! how do you vary your line thickness so seemlessly? you do it so well!
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Robles Dezignz on Mar 14 '09
I like it a lot, I would just try to play around with different color themes... but great job!
Check This One Out! |
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R Thull on Mar 15 '09
Tried to address a lot of things from last round feedback. Thanks everyone for your ideas on this one. Last chance for thoughts before I sub it!
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BackofYourHead on Mar 15 '09
I like it very much. Intricate but not busy. I'd say it's ready for submission.
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cashewchikn on Mar 15 '09
very nice.
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seba108 on Mar 16 '09
Very good! Submit!
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midpisces on Mar 16 '09
nice work. submit it.
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timefiller on Mar 16 '09
I think its ready!
5$ from me once you submit it :) |
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timefiller on Mar 16 '09
You'll get a 5$ from me once you submit it!
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R Thull on Mar 16 '09
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ninopolisel on Mar 29 '09
wow this looks good.. i like the colors.. you should submit that
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Duver on Mar 30 '09
love the colors on this version, it's totally ready!
and if you have chance a critique would most welcome http://www.threadless.com/critique/40400/My_xeR_T_is_Backwards |
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monkeydumpster on Mar 30 '09
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MattttMurder on Mar 30 '09
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SENSEY on May 06 '09
IŽll vote both as a print&T
very nice job, you really have skills good luck |
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housexofxleaves on Nov 08 '09
Looks grand, the colors fit just right, although this shirt would not be for me, I can totally see someone walking around with this on, good job!
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Thoughts about color, placement, composition, whatever are all welcome. Thanks!