this is for j-ray's design battles/contest.

my theme is "It's done with magic", so i tried this.

how is it? anything else i should do before subbing?

thank you.

haha i just subbed this by accident. sent an email. argh so stupid.

are those clouds?

well yes lol

i could add more.

omg duh i didnt read the title.

still, you should be able to recognize them w/o the title, you know?

what should i do?

sorry im a little retarded today.

i like the horse and the girl.

but the clouds should look more ... cloudy? (:

hahah iuno how youd go about it, maybe make the edges more round??

yeah. i did kind of like my style, though.

ok did you mean the real clouds, or the chariot thing, or what?



it's ok if you don't want to help anymore. :)

oh by the way, it may look like she's smoking but she's blowing thru a bubble stick!

bumping this before i go.

hmmm, the lines inside the chariot cloud mabobber thing is all thats bothering me. but hey if its your style do whatchaa want. (:

no no i understand. idk why i put them there, i'll fix it. thanks!

make the horses cart look more like a covered wagon, with out the cover



and fix up the horses wings a smige

covered wagon without the cover, lol?

well, i'll figure it out.



ok yeah i did the wings quickly because i realized i had forgotten them.

proud to say i did this in appleworks :)

i mean like an old fashion wagon lol

like a kid's red wagon?

i wanted it to be like a chariot. cuz we got pegasus.

granted i didn't even make it look like a chariot, it's just a clump of white stuff.

noo nooo... like a wooden wagon from the 1800's

picture needed!

http://www.victorialodging.com/saanichfair/images/saanich-fair-wooden-wagons.jpg

not exactly what i wanted but close enough

ok i might try that. thanks.

bump

bump

sorry, but last bump.

i just dont like farty, poopy designs

wonderful news for me

I like it!

the horses wings should look more winged :)

llike this

what king said about the wagon is right, think Spartacus!

the clouds should look more rounder, bubblier

the girl looks more detailed compared to the rest wich is ok, just

make sure the details don't get lost.

I am anxious to see the next version

you go girl!

less farty poopy is the suggestion I guess....

i am currently fixing the wings, thanks.

i will also change the wagon, yes.

thanks bart :)

ok i'm gonna take out some of the lines for the fartiness? i guess.

the doctor should go see a doctor..

the doctor should have had a little more to her comment than what she had.

now I am feeling all poopy & farty

thanks alot Doc!

oh also i am adding more clouds to make it more clear that they are in fact clouds, not farts, marshmellows, or smokestacks. :)

*marshmallows

grey was a good choice, central placement pls

thanks a lot bart, you've been of the utmost help.

oh and maybe you can turn the cloud she blows/puffs into a bunch of little clouds.

i kinda like the lower placement, dont know if the design portion is quite there yet though



I commented on yours, now CHECK OUT MINE!

ok thanks guys

i wanna see v2!

sorry it'll be done tomorrow. i don't have time just now.

now go see mine :)

yo ice send me a mail sometime..

sure

uh sorry i posted that twice.

it wasn't working, or so i thought.



my commentary was:

"i couldn't finish the rest of my changes today, but i did fix the wings...

so here they are."

looks better

but the wings seem to be behind the horse, there's no real attachment



check these

I don't like this design...

The horse's snout is too dog-like. It needs more height.

ok guys... ok



uh do you think it would be better if the girl was riding the horse?



doodlebugbby, i might not like it either, but it's for a contest and it's all i could think of.

You really shouldn't submit a design you don't even like yourself, honestly.

i didn't say that! jeeze.

and again, its for a contest!!!

so... riding the horse? opinions please...

should i use another gray to do the shadows, or not?

as you can see i completely changed where the girl was.

this is not finished at all.

i still have to do details and many clouds around them.

bump. please comment a bit?

nice!

I'd give the clouds a more bubblier look but that's it :)

alright..

and should i use the light gray color?

I wouldn't add shadows



if you're saying light gray for background, fine

just see for yourself, maybe a light blue back just to see what it does?

ok.

might be a bit tough on the program i'm using though. haha

hahaha

damn Alice

I wish you'd trow those shitsoftware in the bin

illustrator is endlessly much easier and quicker

yes yes

hehe for real

for example

adjusting the backgroundcolor would recuire two simple clicks =-)

stop making me depressed lol

the only thing is that now it looks like she has wings. she's not supposed to, that's the horse's back wing.

ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh looks real choppy honestly.

i know, i know...

choppy program, choppy design? hahah..

now go comment my critique :)

i'm gonna say the ink is GOLD and SILVER on this one.

wouldn't that be pretty?



i'm getting towards the deadline with this, and i'm not going to make that many more changes if i can help it.

ok any last thoughtses?

if no one comments by tonite i'm subbing it!

buuuuuuump