this is just a very very vague sketch of an idea i just had. i guess i'm wondering if it's good enough to keep pursuing. if you can't figure out what it is - it's a pinata getting a dental check-up. i'm thinking of having a speech bubble in it, but it's totally negotiable. red notes won't be in here.

what do you think? any suggestions and comments whatsoever will be appreciated!

i'm thinking the execution will be pretty realistic, and the colors will be all neutral and sterile, except for the pinata.

i say sub it as is!

The thing I love most about your idea is the color scheme you have planned. The rest of it is a little out there and hard to picture, but I'm sure you'll be able to pull it off since you're very good at doing surreal type art. :) I'd love to see this a little further developed.

As for the text bubble, I'm sure you know how that usually goes, unless it works really well with the design.

is the doctor a cyclops? just kidding!! i think it's a sweet idea. get it? sweet. ok, seriously though, it's a pretty good idea. pursue it for sure.

thanks! i know it's a little hard to picture right now. hopefully later tonight or tomorrow i can have more solid linework down so it's a little more clear.

if i do the text, it'd be handdrawn and hopefully look attractive within the design. but we'll see. i'm not totally sold on it right now.

hahaha jared! it's one of those light things. you know. wait, do dentists have those?? anyway, yay!

I totally thought the doctor was a cyclops. He needs to be.

I would like to see it developed more...

I think it might be a little too subtle... I didn't get it for a while, and that might be long enough for people to say "I don't get it" and pass on voting. but then again, maybe it just needs to be more flushed out. Maybe if the dentist was saying something else a little more obvious? I dunno.

yeah, i'm not sure if the idea is clear enough. i'll take any suggestions for how to make it clearer that the pinata might not do so hot at the dentist because it's filled with candy??

i might have some pieces of candy laying alongside the dentist chair thing. maybe that'd help get the point across.

something like "you need to cut down on the sweets" might be more obvious... but not necessarily better, idk. I like the idea you have for rendering it.

oooo. that's a much better idea for text. thanks!

Yeah, I agree with opifan64 about the wording, if you choose to do the word bubble. I got the concept right away and think it will be an awesome sub. DO IT!

how can a pinata floos when their arms don't move??? JK!!!! LOL! this can be great, fun, and fool of delicious treats!!!

floos...hahaha....i said floos!

FLOSS!

Hehehe. I like it. Maybe you could just have the dentist looking disaproving, and pointing to a sign 'No Sweets' sign that a dentist might well have in his surgery. Like a candy silhouette crossed out in a red circle like a road sign - if you wanted to make it more graphic. As you know, people tend to prefer no text.

If you're going to have a speech bubble - Opifan's suggestion is good on making it more clear.

Maybe make the pinata having surgery after being bashed open, maybe have doctors standing by with a chocolate i.v. or something. i dunno

ooh, i like that idea, aled! i just did another quick version of this that's slightly clearer. how do i post it? just click "submit a new version"? this one still has the text, but i'll try the graphic treatment later on.

ndstillie, i like that idea too, but i think i want to pursue the dental route first to see if it works out...

i guess it didn't post my comment. anyway, here's a new version that's hopefully a little more clear. it's still reaaaaaaally rough, since it's in the thumbnail stage. i'd still like to try aled's version of a "no sweets" sign in lieu of the text.

any comments are still appreciated!

Fatheed's idea is pretty solid. This works too, but the text might make it too much like a panel cartoon. *sheds tear for lost text*

The colours are going to look really cool on the subdued backdrop.

although you're great with text... maybe you could pull it off! (I'm trying to save my contribution :P)

I like the new text a lot better, though I do think that the sign will get the idea across a little better.

This is delightfully silly.

:))

i will definitely be trying both versions in a cleaner style.

great idea!! haha
cleaner would be good.. although there's something I like about the sketchy style you used.

alright, here's a clean linework version featuring aled's idea of the "no sweets" poster. i'll be doing more with depth once i get the coloring in...

any suggestions before i start coloring? is the idea still unclear?

the thingy next to the chair should be attached to the ground somehow, i think. kinda looks like it's floating.

also, i want candy. will this sub give out candy when we vote? i think it should do that.

pretty awesome, as usual - I love the different style you're using on this one. I'm assuming the pinata will be extremely colorful..

also, the shadow is a bit off for the time being and it kinda looks like the monitor is floating (that's being really picky).

This is gonna ROCK

It kinda looks like a stuffed animal. I'm sure that will change one you color it.

It kinda bothers me the way the dentist's legs/feet disappear behind the seat. Shouldn't his legs be sticking out somewhere if he's sitting?

the monitor IS floating. do they usually not float?

Great! Well done eliminating the words... great solution.

i think they float(are hinged to swivel around). This is looking great, love the way the final linework is turning out. $5.

but yeah, i'll probably rethink the shadows once i get into coloring this. i can also try and figure out where the doctor's legs should go.

this was the dentist chair i was referencing, btw!

thanks!

the arm rest doesn't look attached to the chair

i can't think of anything else

i can work on that! i'm not entirely sure how they attach, though. maybe just a bar will do.

alright guys, before i continue on, i want the real truth: would you WEAR this? or is the idea kind of meh? give it to me, i can take it! because i have no idea how to gauge this sort of thing.

YES YES YES

I think it's great!

thanks! i'll try to color this later today. and also, i totally just noticed the shadow error david was talking about. whoops. it's totally not aligned at all.

Great idea!

now colored! it was difficult to get this under 8 colors, so some half-toning was used. any suggestions? i'm currently unsure whether i should have that computery thing on the right. it might be putting it off-balance too much.

This is coolmi.

you said it bromi.

Put a sombrero on the dentist for maximum laffs!

This is a weener!

Cool idea! How about a dentist bib? Also, the title kinda throws me off...since he's pointing at "no sweets" and usually a dentist wouldn't say "have you been flossing" while pointing at that sign. Either change the sign to a floss image, or change the title I think.

oh yeah, the title is going to change - that was just the first thing i thought of, in the first version! actually, if anyone has any good title suggestions, send them over! maybe just "No Sweets"?

Lookin SICK! Great work with this one! And to answer your question, the floating computer has always bugged me. But you really nailed the half-toning with this one! Can't wait to see the final!

awesome! a bit different from your usual subs, but it's perfect and ready to submit I think

i'll show you guys a version without the computer thing, and you can see what you think! i'll also try out the bib on the pinata...

thanks!!

looking fantastic sonmi :)

Don't forget the clippy things for the bib :-)

This is fatheedmi

This is rad. I really liked the side elevation/angle of the second version, and I think it would suit a tee better but this arrangement is still coooool. I would quite like to see the pinata with kind of dead eyes. As though he might not be 'alive' and the dentist has possibly gone mad. I know you have kind of got him acknowledging the poster, but I think it might be worth trying putting the dilated pupils in the centre of the eye. Just a suggestion. Looks rad.

good call!! i'll add the weird eyes in this version too

It might not work or make any difference :P

okay new version. changes made:

- no computer thing
- dentist bib
- blank pinata eyes

are any of these working any better?

This has changed so much from the original sketch, it's cool to see the change in it. You are an amazing artist, I think it is really good and everything black and white but the pinata makes it look awesome. I say submit it.

thank you ((((:

This is.....not traditional sonmi! Have you been palling around with that dirty Aled again? It's workin for ya! 5$

oh one more thing, move that shirt line, it looks like a piece of wood coming out of the pinata's nose.

haha! this technique just seemed to best fit the idea. thank you!!

good catch - i'll change that line. i also got a comment about how the light should actually be facing the pinata, so i'm playing around with that right now...

great progress julia. awesome to see the sketch develop into this. i know it is really late in the game but i almost feel like pointing at the poster on the wall isn't necessary. i'd like to see his other hand occupied cleaning or something. regardless, i love that you mixed up your typical "threadless style" with this one. great job.

I like it so cool! good job it´s ready for sub, please if get a chance critique mine Natural Instinct THANKS!

such a fun design, although he has very small hands

thanks guys!

jared - i see what you're saying. i think pointing or no pointing would kind of change the mood of the drawing - this version he's more scolding the pinata :p

okay so in this new version:

- light changed to face more towards pinata
- linework cleaned up around pinata
- made a very slight difference to dentists' hand, so it's slightly larger (i think the hand pointing should be smaller though, because of perspective)

anything else??

haha oh man this is so good. i just saw it on your flickr. hilarious concept. no suggestions here, i say sub it :)

print print print print!!!!

:D thanks guys!!!!!

and thanks so much everyone for your advice.

very different for you, sonmi.

its loookin goods

your shadows are perfection

I love it.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/37100/Imperial_walker

looks great. ready for submissions!

please critique my latest version

This is awesome!

I work in a dental lab, and I would wear this all the time! ^_^ Love it

critique my critique?

haha... this turned out sweet! (couldn't resist)

V6 is awesome!

Great! Sub!
Critique mine please.
http://www.threadless.com/critique/37302/Well_This_Is_Unexpected

brilliant $5

please take a wee look at my latest crit

http://www.threadless.com/critique/37469/Truck_Stop

(it's just a first draft)

incredible! This is the first I've seen it but I love every aspect of it. 5$ to the extreme

I would appreciate your opinion

Very Nice..Sell it to dentists everywhere. Especially where they do a lot of work with children.

I like it, the other way of your job, awesome, very thanks for critique mine, I aprecciate it.good luck!

this is a GREAT design! i love it! what color shirt would it be printed on?

That's a great progression. Looks like there aren't that many color options for this design because of the white tiles and halftone gray walls. But maybe brown might look good.

Let me know what you guys think of this one

I love this so much! Totally 5$. It's ready to be submitted.

I'd love it if you checked mine out :)

haha..this is awesome.

check out mine
thanx

I feel bad for it. What about adding some emotion to it's eyes, or adding tears? That would really increase the evil-ness of that dentist!

If you don't mind, would you also look at my Panda?

awesome, i like it!

check out mine

I really love it! Could you please look mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/47324/OPS_Crash
Again, well done!

hey, you should totally submit this! maybe it'll get printed!

neat, check out mine!

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Wow, this is so great, submit it! I give you my vote, 5$!!!


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Oh, sorry, it has already been printed :D The good news is that I will go and buy it right now!!

I love this.
Critique mine?

double uaeheauhae.