I don't know if this is the right title for this submission.. but i just put this for critique.. hope you can help me guys..

really nice drawing



very dynamic and detailed



not really shure about the colorscheme though





feel free to check out mine :)

Awesome detail love the tree!

I'd like the bird to have a bit more detail, like the tree does.



Title, how about:



A shot in the dark

Ready, Aim...

The Warriors last arrow

I think I'll take ur last suggestion... "The Warrior's Last Arrow"

Hmm .. how about a UV ink for your eagle-arrow-spirit?

And I would make the spirit slightly smaller with bigger wings.

Um... The warrior's bow is drawn. He hasn't yet shot an arrow.

So is he going to shoot at the fire bird?

^a continuous shot by a warrior going to shoot at the bird.. do you think "Ready, Aim" is a better title for this?

woah this is cool.

but i wouldnt mind seeing this in other color combos.

and also i love the treeee.



thanks for crit.ing mine:)

^ thanks, i will upload another version later..

I have a connection error that's why i have uploaded a lot of versions.. anyway here it goes..



I decided to use "The Warrior's Last Arrow" for the title of this design. I put this in 3 diff. colors of shirt. Add some details to the bird and edited the warrior's bow. Hope it helps.

i like it on red the best. gives a warmer, more fiery feel.

maybe give the bird a cool, sharp eye or something

color it red on the brown and blue shirts and then for the red one you could just have the eye be the negative space/the color of the shirt.

umm the wing in the background might look better if its in the same position as the foreground one, but then it may be difficult to decipher the two wings from each other

woah long comment!

looks good

I'd go with red or blue.

As for the yellow portion, maybe experiment with making the edges a little more fiery, not so straight and clean, possibly even bits breaking off of it (like embers) I also agree with the previous comment about adding an eye to see what that does for the design. It's definitely looking cool.

what about this guys?

I guess I just don't really get this design... I don't seem to get the purpose at least.

hey as long as something catches the eye and creates a reaction than it doesnt have to have a purpose. its a form of entertainment. i like what you did with the eye but id try to keep it simpler like the rest of the design, the eye is much more complex the the rest of the bird. so i would take some detail out of the eye

^thanks sir. Simpler eye?.. ok..

i uploaded one color for the mean time..

i made the eye simpler.. what do u think guys?

i think it works nicely. the composition is placed well, its not too busy

I think you should incorporate the flames into and around the tree. Make it look like the phoenix is bursting from it. I'd lose the archer. I realize you'd have to change the name then.

It seems like the realism of the tree branches don't match the line work of the flames.

Nice, I always like the silhouette design on T's. I like the placement of the bird. Maybe try and "throw" the wings back a little. Show a little more movement as its being shot out from the tree...? Looks great though.

Make the flames more detailed so as to match the tree, lots of little wips and turns right now it's much too simple, also beef up the wings, a pheniox deserves it eh? I'm not sure I'm liking the black tree, try a dark red see how that works.



Cool design though! I like the idea a lot.



Mine too 0.0

YES! thats exactly what i was thinking for the eye

i agree with TextureMe i tried saying something along those lines in V5 about the wings being in the same position like a bird in a dive

see if you like the changes i made to starmonster http://www.threadless.com/critique/36275/Starmonster

let's see.. i'll try to edit this... thanks for the comments guys..

really nice sense of motion

What about a slight drop shadow around the edges of the bird in a different color? Or a tiny white drop shadow on the archer and tree

Love the phoenix design. I'd lose the archer and try to incorporate the tree and phoenix into each other more.



Great beginning!



Crit me: http://www.threadless.com/critique/36558/Imperial_Walker

edited wing... what do u think guys

nice

and you can tell the wings apart from each other

definitely looks more like hes soaring instead of just lifting off the ground like before



i set up a final for starmonster

see what you think

i like this alot its pretty cool it reminds me of A Day To Remember's CD cover

i'm still undecided if i will submit this one.. what do u think guys?

i think you should go ahead and submit

i like it, good luck

^thanks..

Much better! It's cool, maybe incorporate other colors, I know this sounds weird, but complication looks professional, like just make it have lots of tiny details.



But it's looking pretty good.

^good point

hi guys,,, i uploaded a newer version.. added some color and effect.. what do u thikn guys?

i like this but i think that the tree might get stuck on the side of the person wearing it since it's close to the stitching. i'd really like to see it worn on a tshirt. otherwise, i think the design is really cool.

woah nice additions

but i have to agree with fezbeast i think itll make it a lot cooler

also..

Starmonster is up for VOTE!



http://www.threadless.com/submission/196416/Starmonster/showmore,designs#lastcomment

agree with fezbeast... i really like it!!

Nice. Agree with the texture for the bird, so it doesn't look too logo-ish. Great job!

It's good man!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/36920/Be_my_Valentine_black

Thanks guys.. will revise it later..

ready for submission?

I would say so.



Unless you added something like a quiver with yellow in it or small yellow birds in the trees.



Mutiny!

I agree, you don't need the orange flecks

COOOOL. Submit. Launch. etc. Nice work.



If you get the chance...

http://www.threadless.com/critique/36897/Renee#v2

with or without orange fire color in the tree ...

i think it looks better without the fire in the tree

need some suggestions before i submit this

Looks pretty good on red -- But the eagles face is a little to soild , also you could tak e the anmie route and ahve some fire even swerling around the tail.

Without!



If you have time, please critique my lovechild:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/37002

i think if you actually set the tree on fire it would look good

otherwise leave it out

very cool . i think the design is good to go. just clean up the presentation. dont use those template t shirts! i dont think they help your design. check mine out thats getting scored! and leave a nice comment. ;).



PLEASE SCORE AND COMMENT!

use the models threadless gave you or try this:





irocko photos

This has come quite the long way, but, I do think the eagles head should be a little more tribal--ey dont really know how to spell that but i think you catch my drift

At first Im thought he was shooting at that animal. I see now. Interesting. Good use of space/color/composition. I feel like a little extra on top is needed though.

ok i will submit this without the fire on the tree... need to edit the eagle's head before i submit it... thanks guys!

It looks awesome, but I don`t get it.

this is sweet. I like it better without the fire in the tree.

I like it without the fire but it seems empty that way.



Mutiny!

this has been put up in the running......

please comment guys here...



Warrior's Last Arrow

this has been put up in the running...

guys please comment here....



Warrior's Last Arrow

I prefer the non splattered tree background. Really fantastic work. Seems like a dungeon master anywhere would cream his jeans over this shirt.

I would appreciate your opinion

My design has been put in the running.. please comment



Warrior's Last Arrow

5 more days to go guys to comment on this submission: here the link:



Extinction

i've decided to make some adjustments on this design and submit again.. i really need your suggestions guys on how to improve this design... tnx!

Wow, this is an epic design! I love it. My vote would be no fire in the tree. I don't really think the fire in the tree adds to or improves the design at all.



Would love to hear some thoughts and suggestions on my design!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/59315/Death_From_Above#v9