So what happened after the tortoise and the hare's ageless tale?



Enjoy and please comment! :)

I can tell that it's a turtle, but I would have never guessed that it was a hare, had you not said so in your description.

i think you should get rid of the blood or whatever it is that's flying out of the hare's mouth...and i agree i wouldn'tve know that it was a hare if you didn't say it. but love the tortoise

Agree about the animal-recognition issue, but you have a very cool illustration style here.

Work on the presentation a bit though, it's a bit messy and takes the focus off the design itself

The same here for the rabbit...i also found the shading technique used in the rabbit a bit different than that used for the tortoise...its true the rabbit is hairy and the shadow cast has to reflect such a texture but somehow im seeing it as of it s a different style than that used for d tortoise...

Firstly I think its a funny concept and the overall style is very cool. I do, however, agree with the above several comments about the hare. The positioning of facial elements doesn't quite ring true (while the eyes are located on the side of these species, they certainly aren't that low down, and there is a recognisable nose missing) and if the ears were larger and more prominent, this would aid recognition.



You might also consider adding a finishing line in the background, so viewers would more easily know the scene you are refering to.



If three's a crowd, imagine the damage we could do with four.

try some dif colors in the design.



CRIT MINE!

change the actuall designs colors not the shirt its on

haha its nice but the bunny needs changing, make the ears more out there perhaps, give it a tiny nose and whiskers for a start and maybe flip the sword i think it would look cool as a downward stabbing type thing, idk it might just be me.

The handle of the sword looks too neat in comparison with the rest of the illustration style. Also shouldn't the hares eyes be looking at the tortoise? nice overall style though

Nice catches guys I was actually getting a bit lazy with the handle and some of the stuff... Well I overhauled the design, tell me what you think? :)

still couldn't tell it was a hare sorry...why is the bunny after the tortoise? cause he beat him in a race? i like the tortoise though...he's sweet

Maybe have him swinging the sword like a bat or strait in-front of him so you have room for this ears.



Why the beef with raphael?





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i highly doubt that many people will buy if you dont make the requested changes, its somewhat funny that you noticed the sword hilt comment but not the animal recognition factor, this is a great shirt but the rabbit needs definite changes/

i have to agree with what the others have said...it looks like the bunny's arms are on his head rather than part of the body.



the turtle looks great...but i really can't tell if he's afraid or trying to fight back...don't know if it's just me, but making his expression more recognizable would improve the design more.

the expression on the bunny is hilarious but im afriad it doesnt work as a shirt...makes a great cartoon though.

I love this....but agree about the arms bit....

and I don't know if the sky blue shirt really fits the scene



I am in need of some help On mine!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/34667/Teary_Eyed

This is so completely awesome :D poor little turtle... I do agree with previous posters about the arms on the bunny. I knew the arms were there, it just took me awhile to figure it out ( or perhaps I'm slow :) ).



Could you critique mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/34104/Just_Thoughts

it reminds me of teenage mutant ninja turtles, I didnt actually realise it was a rabbit til I read your description, cool design though I like the introduction of the clouds

Nice style. Maybe you should fix the bunny like others said

cool characters love it. Maybe you need to clean it up.

i'm into the idea, and the turtle is frickin rad (king of like the 1st version better, maybe just use a slightly darker tone on version 2).

But i'm with everyone else on the bunny issues, didnt know it was a bunny, still cant find his arms. maybe you could have him holding the sword in just one hand (on the far side from the viewer) and his other arm king of back like he were running. that way it doesnt get all tangled up above his head.

Cool guys haven't had much time to re-figure out the bunny... Been working on other concepts stuck in my head before it splashes all over my keyboard :P Gonna do it sometime... Thanks guys for your comments :) keep 'em coming! :)

design is very cool and entertaining - I'm not sure that it being raphael actually adds anything to the shirt though - the entertainment is from the insanity of the rabbit. If you do keep it as raphael then it'd be nice if the sai was doing something - right now it looks a little glued onto the shell



Cheers!

i think its awesome bro!

steven mmmm, check out Crappy Cat toy by jamungo :)