This is my first sub, be brutal, tell me WHY you don't like it, and the actual illustration is much crisper then the pics.

with out being told that it is a scone i don't think people would get it

That doesn't look like a scone.

^ agreed.



good idea though, love the pun.

maybe some fancy text would do the trick?

potential here.

it is a thinker, dumb people won't get it.

like the sketchy part? refined? more vectorized? TELL ME

It's not a thinker at all.



It's a British soldier, standing guard outside a palace or something. He's taking a sneaky break to have some tea and a scone ("A wee bit o' tea and a scone", as we say up North). The pun is on the fact that it looks like he's having a spliff.



But the scone/spliff looks like neither a scone or a spliff. It is the colour of a scone, and vaguely the right shape, but he's lighting it, so maybe it's a spliff.



Unless the confusion is the point?



I just don't think it works as a concept. Just because I don't like it doesn't mean I'm dumb.

thanks 13. that's the bitch slap i needed. you gave me an idea too. thank you for being tough. i must admit i'm kind of a fan of your designs. keep up the good advice.

my designs? I don't have any designs!



haha I just hang around here giving out abuse and advice in equal measure.



Unless I've been unconsciously producing designs... ?

i coulda swore.... huh i have seen your advice then. that must be it. your a clever one. do you do graphic design at all?

All these compliments! Sir, you flatter me.



No - not a designer, just a fan of. Like the difference between a film director and a film critic.



Gonna try and get some designs out at some point in the future, but I'm swamped with other work at the moment.

right on. well it's good to have a tough critic. so many people are a little too nice. do you think the design would be more understandable he had a spliff instead of lighter? and also maybe a closer composition for better detail?

i also think that your actual layout of this submission is very confusing and poorly done. its hard to tell what's going on and there isn't a portion where you can see the image in its entirety.

right on. good point

i tink i need to change the angle a little, make it more interesting and less ontilogical, anyone second that?

I thought a new point of view and a spliff would make the design more interesting and more understandable. tell if i should pursue this new point of view.

i think i like this idea better than your previous one.

it makes more sense.

although...i do like the profile view of him leaning on the chair.

version 2 is much better! i didn't even realise that he was tokin' away in the first one!



do you say sc-on or sc-own?



http://www.threadless.com/critique/3438/Flutterby

oh is he still eating a sc-own or is it some shortbread?

v2 have sence, and i like it, but there is a lack of something on the background...



http://www.threadless.com/critique/3292/Till_I_do_us_part

Non attractive design, sorry.

thte background will have probably a brick wall the same color as the coat, he'll be leaning his chair on it, i will also work on my scon shape.

Man, I have the serious munchies for scones with cream and jam after all this.



I don't like the mouth on this fella, I gotta say but I like the POV. And I think his hat should be taller to make it clearer that he is in fact an English guard.



Other than that, I think this is coming along well. Your style has a definite charm and you have captured the idea well (love the pinky up).

thanks for the feedback, i agree, the mouth has to be more expressive, and i need to complete the scene he's in a little more.

i like the first perspective better...

the PUN is the funny part.. it's much LESS funny if he's actually smoking. plus i wouldn't wear a joint on my shirt, a pun yes, joint, no.

it's supposed to be a spliff. can't tell if it has bud in it or not.

which version do like better, i need feedback people!!

number 1, the idea doesnt work if he has a joint and a scone lol



http://www.threadless.com/critique/3515/Becoming_a_Rockstar

You might turn off some people with an actual spliff on the shirt. Also, check threadless rules with regards to what they absolutely will not print before you put more work into your design.



I like v1, but the body proportions seemed off (torso needed to be a little longer).

keep it comin people, splif or no splif

I like your second sketch better, more focus ont he figure. Only, the feet look a bit awkward, as if not attacthed tot he legs. Love the idea, but if your first design is a good indication of where this is going, i'd like to see it a bit crisper and cleaner.

I'm not sure this would appeal to Americans, whom I think comprise the majority of the Threadless community. Neither of those pictures looked likes "scones" to me (which in America is a half-circle shaped sweet pastry, usually with fruit). According to Urban dictionary, it's simply bread in some other countries. Is there more to this scone business than I realize? Anyway, a theme about marijuana probably won't appeal to a lot of people, as I'm sure you already realize. Not sure if you're still working on this, but that's my 2 cents.

i like version 2...will comment more when the tidy version is up