This is my initial sketch for a new tee design. I wanted to put this up early to see if there were any opinions about the general concept. Also, do you think it needs more stuff going on in the background to set up an environment? I was thinking the focus should be on the action and anything in the background would be a distraction, but I'd like feedback on that point. Thanks in advance!

Love it... Great angle as well. Possibly (you probably had this in mind) put more shrapnel in and a pieces landing in the water.
Other than that I can't wait to see the finished product.

Nice idea, but i need to see the finished design

Have a look on mine?
http://www.threadless.com/critique/31321/Android_dream

Great drawing, and the angle it great, it makes the design really dynamic.
Comment on mine?
http://www.threadless.com/critique/31571/second_thoughts

adeefree, I agree. I think the more dramatic the better, with lots of flying parts all over. Thanks.

I agree with adeefree- a few more pieces with water ripple would be cool, and maybe more definition on the dino, but the shot is nice and unexpected. Are you gonna flesh it out?

also, thanks for the comments on my piece!

Are there two dinosaurs? One stepping on the other's back?
That's what I'm seeing, but I think it confuses the design.


(Or else I'm confused, which is not out of the realm of possibility.)

Arrow08, yes, I plan to flesh it out. I'll post here as I do.

Francesa, there are two dinos. A mama and a baby. I was thinking of doing a few dinos in the water as a herd, but went with two. Not sure if having only one would feel too plain, but I agree it's a little confusing especially with the baby standing up on the other. I may change that.

Thanks for the comments.

Sorry Francesa... but I don't think hikay should change the baby standing on the mama... it adds to the story (mother protecting baby), once you push it toward the final it should be more clearer.

Refined sketch. The explosion and shrapnel aren't as dramatic here as I plan them to be in the final design.

So, originally I was planning for the drawing to being very dynamic, almost comic book like. But I'm pushing it to be more tongue-in-cheek, like a children's book gone wrong. So the ink is very simple using only one width. I included some inspiration of how I'm thinking of coloring it.

I also removed the second dinosaur and reworked the composition to make the whole design more vertical and to put more focus on the people in the helicopter.

nice perspective on the scene...but the dinosaur....i dont know...i cant understand it...what is tail waht is body...think he need more refined work

Im not sure if colour will fix this....but until I looked back at the other versions I couldnt work out what the body was, it looks more like part of the helicopter. Great idea though & V2 was easy to get.

hmm, yeah, i think that because there is so little detail in the ink drawing in addition to the weird perspective it's hard to tell what's going on. i'm anticipating that with color and some added details (like water ripples) it will become obvious.

Yea I personally like Version 2 better, do you plan on colouring it? Just curious

yeah, i'm going to color it for sure. the sample illustrations next to the ink drawing are there to show the look i will be going for. sort of a simple children's book type illustration that belies the grim situation the dudes in the helicopter are in.

kinda random, but aren't most long neck varieties of dinosaur plant eaters? other than that the design is coming along well, it would be interesting to see it in color

Just because they are plant eaters doesn't necessarily mean they aren't violent...

yeah, he's just pissed they're buzzing around his head. he's not necessarily trying to nom nom 'em.

So, I'm curious to know if people think the colored version fixes the confusion about what's going on in the illustration brought up previously. Comments appreciated.

any takers?

it took me a while to figure out the perspective, perhaps emphasize the water a bit more? but i LOVE the idea.
did u perhaps try with a bright green helicopter? it seems like an interesting idea to try...

Fun idea! The perspective is a little confusing, though...

Hey, if you get a chance, come check out my critiques, yeah?

thanks. yeah, i'll try to play up the water some more. i do like the idea of a green helicopter. i think i have one too many colors anyway, so if i swap the orange for the green in the guy's hat i will be kosher.

the color of the monster is not the best...

alright, final version. i moved the helicopter down and to the left a bit so that it's more obvious the dinosaur's neck is connected to its body. i also worked on the water splashes and took Alice's suggestion to make the helicopter green. hopefully the whole perspective thing is easier to grasp now. if not, oh well. kaput!

by the way... Why a herbivore dinosaur?
Otherwise I'm not sure whether it's cool enough in itself. The illustration is quite cool though.

Please check my crits out! :)
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Thanks!

looks very good on this shirt,and i like the dino,but i'm not really fond of the two characters on the helicopter...with a bit of work they could look better...nice illustration anyway.
please:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/33184/black_eyes

I'm not a fan of the green. Nice illustration, however what happened to the other dino? It would be neet to see a version with two dinos.
Help:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/32880/INDIVIDUAL