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travioli on May 14 '07
Bump
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travioli on May 14 '07
critique me up scotty!
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travioli on May 14 '07
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tabithakristen on May 14 '07
I definitely wear this. My only issue is the color of the shirt. I'd love to see it on blue or grey ^_^
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tabithakristen on May 14 '07
lol "I'd" definitely wear it.
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I like the idea, but there are a few changes you should definetly make to it. It looks like all the clouds and buildings are floating in space in front of the raindrop. I think changing the outline of the drop would start to fix this problem. Moving around the clouds so they give more of an impression of depth would also help.
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travioli on May 14 '07
thanks for the critique thus far..
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travioli on May 14 '07
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travioli on May 15 '07
I'll try and work on this when I get home.
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Verdana on May 15 '07
BlametheSuburbs is right about depth helping a little bit.
It's a cute idea, and I like the colors you chose. |
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travioli on May 16 '07
Brace yourselves.........
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travioli on May 16 '07
Hope you like this version better. I'd still like some more critique before I concider submitting this.
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travioli on May 16 '07
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travioli on May 16 '07
C'mon guys.
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Take a look at a shot of earth from space: the image is really distorted as you get near the edges.
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travioli on May 16 '07
Yeah, I'm still tryin to get the city to look right.
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travioli on May 16 '07
whacha think? for the love of god please say something!!!!!!
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Bowtie on May 16 '07
The big bright blue blob in the middle of the green T is what is throwing me... maybe make it a different shade of blue so it blends better?
I really like the rest. Prefer the volcano to have some lava. |
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Bowtie on May 16 '07
And I like the colour of the clouds better in V1, though later versions have better shape to the clouds. The ring cloud in V3 is a good addition.
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travioli, if the drop is of a somewhat spherical shape and the clouds are assumed to be equally dispersed across the whole drop, the around the edges the clouds would be much much denser than in the center. There would be more information in general the further toward the edge of the object you got.
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popculturearchives on May 16 '07
V2 is my favorite, except the white outline along the main water drop is irritating me.
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popculturearchives on May 16 '07
I dig the lava, though. Awesome concept, btw.
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daftspike on May 16 '07
Cute!
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schleb on May 16 '07
the perspective on the volcano is weird. It seems like it's past the turning edge of the drop, so it should be either directly facing the viewer or turned down.
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travioli on May 18 '07
suburbs, can you please clarify your previous statement? I'd really like to know what needs to be fixed.
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travioli on May 18 '07
Hope the perspectives work a little better, & the blue is not too blue.
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travioli on May 18 '07
Gah! I just looked at version one. That thing is gross.
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icebar on May 18 '07
lol yeah you've improved a lot since then.
do you have to have the white outline around the raindrop? this reminds me of one of my critiques. a lot. |
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travioli on May 18 '07
what would you prefer instead?
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travioli on May 18 '07
Damn it icebar! I tested it out.
Hold on............... |
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travioli on May 18 '07
Everybody, please vote on whether or not you like it without a border!!!!!
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icebar on May 18 '07
i like that better
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icebar on May 18 '07
maybe a different shirt color though...
idk, it blends in more now. |
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travioli on May 18 '07
What would work besides green?
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icebar on May 18 '07
light blue or light green or...
make the raindrop a little more blue than green and see what happens? |
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cantstopsmilin21 on May 18 '07
ok well here is what i have to say about this one, i think it would be better if you moved it to the side a little you know like the top left side of the chest or something, and as fot the green, it is ok, but one of that main things i don't like is that theere are too many mountains in my opintion and i think the outline is better oh and i dunno maybe you should use an olive sort of color shirt, well that shade of green more :) i dunno but keep it up :)
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icebar on May 18 '07
yes, too many mountains and the change from gray to green over there looks weird.
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travioli on May 18 '07
I just figured out that it looks pretty good on brown. And i'll see how it looks on olive.
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icebar on May 18 '07
help me with my recent critique?
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travioli on May 18 '07
m'k
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travioli on May 18 '07
Seriously, vote!!!!!!! 1 is for, 1 is against.
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travioli on May 18 '07
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travioli on May 18 '07
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timadd on May 20 '07
no outline.
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timadd on May 20 '07
oh so helpful. :)
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Alexandra Marie on May 20 '07
With, but thinner. Maybe a 2 or 3 pixel?
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Optigan on May 20 '07
It's awesome. Love the idea. I think with as it doesn't stand out as much without, especially on the green tee
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travioli on May 20 '07
thanx
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christiancfriend on May 20 '07
Without. And please, please stop bumping.
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travioli on May 20 '07
bump
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christiancfriend on May 20 '07
That's just spiteful.
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travioli on May 20 '07
sorry that I offended you.
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christiancfriend on May 20 '07
I never said it was offensive, just spiteful. People will see your crit, you don't have to comment "." every few hours to make sure.
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icebar on May 20 '07
actually people don't see things if you don't bump them.
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travioli on May 20 '07
I'm still working on gettting a good smaller outline but... Do you think it looks better on olive?
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icebar on May 20 '07
um yes, better on olive
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tabithakristen on May 20 '07
i think it looks great. v6 should be subbed :D
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travioli on May 20 '07
Ok, I think I'm going to submit this version. This one's got an extremely thin line so that it wil be more distinguishable on the greener shirt.
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icebar on May 20 '07
hmm it gives it a different feel.. but i guess so
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travioli on May 20 '07
The vast majority wanted an outline. so i decided to compromise.
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oh isuzu... on May 20 '07
i love this one ! =]
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icebar on May 20 '07
ok but you didn't take ppls advice such as reducing the number of mountains..
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Nice work. Maybe try adding some ships and whales and shit?
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christiancfriend on May 20 '07
less mountains, and more shading on the landmasses to show orientation. Some of them still look like they're floating.
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