Totally new version!

please, make a comment :)

nothing?

that bad? ;)

i like your style. i think the 100% black is a little strong in this one. it looks like the trim of the butterfly's wings is a bit lighter, but not by much. i like that shade better.

how about the drawing? do you think i should do more insects?

i dont like the two smaller creatures..... if u got rid of em all together, i'd like it a lot better..... also... LOVE the way u've done the mushroom with the more subtle clouds in the back..! :)

if u have a minute, i'd appreciate a comment and vote on mine :)



http://www.threadless.com/submission/183311/Mousing_Around

clean up your line work yo, either keep lines or lose them and keep the thickness consistent or taper them? I think the idea is also a little hard to read at first, perhaps some extra limbs? or dripping toxic avenger fun???

ok thanks! good tips :)

Im not sure why these creatures are running from this relatively docile-looking mushroom. They are dressed properly and have biohazard suits on. Id work on making it obvious that the mushroom is dangerous and maybe show those critters being more professional instead of running away in fear.

the mushroom is "like" an nuclear blast.. i know i need to improve that and also im working on new bugs :)

Changed quiet a bit 8),

please - leave your comments.

it's not immediatly obvious that it is a mushroom cloud

it's not :) its just an ordinary mushroom, they just think it is, but your right, i should clear that you little bit more. thx

Could you add a thought bubble on one of the insects showing that he thinks it is a mushroom cloud.



Any comments on this one

ok, i've tried to make it more dramatic, also add the speech.

comments?

any one?

I don't like that the mushroom is red. Everything else is great!

well, its nuclear so i want to keep it on the red-orange area, any other ideas?

You said it was just an ordinary mushroom.

It makes it look less like a mushroom. If it looked like a normal mushroom, it would be obvious that the bug think it's nuclear due to the word bubble with the nuclear symbol.

yeah.. your right. i've tried to make it more explosivy... come to think of that, the speech bubble explain it all.

ya think this shade is better?

I actually was a fan of the red

:|

Maybe its a shade thing... anyone else? red? orange?

any one?

ok, made little bit of changes in the drawing and also - tried a find color for the shroom.

do you think she needs to be cleaner or more detailed?

wow this is great! with the shroom looking like this you don't need the text bubble!

thanks, i'll work this out.

improved some more details.

anyone?

comments?

y dont submit?

yeah, the ladybug's eyes and body are all wobbly and uneven.

Haha, this reminds me of that game Worms by Team 17, very nice. As for suggestions, yeah I agree with My Spiers, you need to fix up the lady beetle and then all is right with the design.



Almost there :)

Might also suggest the concept of spores exploding out from the mushroom, but that could get too busy, you'd have to see.

Nice idea. I think the line weights need to be more consistent, For example the catapillar has a very fine line around his head compared with the rest of his body. (How do you spell catapillar?)

ok, I'll fix the lady-bug, and outlines.

what do you think about the floor and the grass need the shroom..? i changed it as well from v6.



about the tonsils, my girl friend will kill me if i'll remove it. she thinks its the best part :\

not tonsils, that's the Uvula.

check out mine? click here

yeah man.. UUUUvuuula....I like how it sounds.. ;)

fixed the ladybug, comments?



Oh! btw: on you free time: http://www.threadless.com/submission/183648/Nas_Tee

should i move on and work on the layout? should the tee name be "atomic mushroom"?

anyone?!

the ladybird is much better, looking through the versions. I think the mushroom needs to look more like an explosion, otherwise it kind of just looks like bugs running away from a red mushroom. Thats only my opinion. Maybe try adding more colour?

I really think the quality of illustration has come on a long way since v1 :)

the shroom is fine. Think the ladybug needs some thicker lines so It will have the same style as the shroom. same goes for the green thing. (don't know the english name LOL)

though the caterpillar pretty explains it no?

the atomic shroom i mean..

fixed the outlines and this is my vision on the layout.

Yeah, I can't find anything at fault with this. Submit :)

I love the scared ladybug.

thanks... should work on presentation. :)

why just voting "dont submit"? with out leaving a comment? weird!

hi EVERYBODY!

CHK OUT THE FINAL SUBMISSION AND VOTE AT:



http://www.threadless.com/submission/188728/Atomic_Mushroom



Thanks to all the critiques! and good lock :)