There are a few changes I have in mind, I'd really like to hear what you all think first...

cute idea - but im not sure about the text..... if its essential to the design i'd consider moving it to the back of the shirt... and definitely changing the font... :)



i made some changes to mine... if u have a sec, i'd like to hear what u think



http://www.threadless.com/critique/30061/Mousing_Around

I think the sand looks odd. Everything else is outlined besides the sand.

yeah I agree.

It looks like I got the layers wrong, but I didn't.

It's just not done very well :P

Just a few tweaks :)

I'd like to see more detail and shading in the grass and the sand of the banks. Also you may want to think about other font styles, I found I needed a second look to get the joke.

It's very cute! I agree with Retroludo though. And I think it might benefit without black lines. Maybe coloured lines? I think the black lines look a bit too hard.

Shading and without the black lines and a slightly different font...



what you think?



and which do you prefer:



"We otter see other people..."

or

"We otter be friends..."

I like the new submission! I almost think it should be "I think we should see otter people"? That's what I kept thinking every time I read it.



Could you look at mine real quick?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/28859/Inspiration

crazy

wat about "we otter see otter people"

"Empty Box on Oct 22 '08



crazy"



Real constructive.



I tried "we otter see otter people" but it was a bit too much.

I tried "We ought to se otter people" but i think it was a bit hard to get the "other/otter" link.



I really like the "I think we should see otter people" though :)

I think we should see otter people is really good

I like "I think we should see otter people" as well.

better?



I'm not sure, I think it implies the prescence of "otter people"

as in, half man/half otters...

Definitely easier to read.

it'd be cool if the text were more like jack handey-esque text but i like the body language of the otters.

aww me likey

"I think we should see otter people" as the title of the piece. I think it would be funnier to avoid the pun on the shirt itself and go with something unexpected, like: "I've always hated you."

I think it's cute. I dislike most puns, but this one has just enough "adorable-ness" to be interesting.



Maybe if you made it seem like that is the way the otter talks...like, "I tink we should see otter people" maybe it would seem less like he is talking about otter-people? Also maybe just a thin line directing you from one of the otters to the text?

yeh i agree with rudyascott, alot of people will say "lose the text".

if ur going to put any text, go with the handwriten approach.

For me the bank and the grass still need refining. The bank should blend in better and the grass is thick and doesn't look natural. I think even though these are secondary kind of background elements, they're not helping the cleverness of the design.