UPDATED VERSION!



I've made the whole thing smaller and then I put some shadows in...



Here is the original version that was sub'd



http://www.threadless.com/submission/180593/So_Where_do_Baby_Storks_Come_From/showmore,designs



So tell me what you think of this latest Version........

i like the concept! maybe try a different color shirt though. good luck!

Ha ha, if I try a different coloured shirt then I'd go over the colour limit. I need the cream colour for the dudes skin!

So?

Very clever but the colors are off

Really?



What otther colours do you suugest that I should use instead of the ones I have now?

I'm not sure to be honest. I wish I could help you out, but colors have a tendency of coming naturally to me or not at all.

Like it

Hey I really like this design and I have been watching the different versions of it evolve for a while now and have liked it since the beginning. I hope you submit this one ;) and thanks for critique-ing mine, I really appreciated your honesty and don't worry you weren't mean at all :)

hey... i tihnk the shadow really adds depth! certainly an improvement from the original subbed version :)



if u have a sec i'd like to hear what u think of mine



http://www.threadless.com/critique/30061/Mousing_Around

bumpety bump

do submit!



pls let me hear from you, too http://www.threadless.com/critique/30274/Dance_Like_Him

lol. nice. maybe change the colors though?



Critique Mine?

Please, for those who are telling me to change the colours - well what colours do you suggest???

more realistic skin tones, instead of tan. but i can see how that would be hard, because you already have 8 colors.

Yay! New colours!...

What do you think?

i think the general design idea might be improved upon by having the guy walking up to the stork instead of flying. . .

the flying is part of the humor. and i do like these colors better.

Submittable now? Or does it still need some changes.

Anyone?

bump.

me likey... i think it's ready :-)

It's been pushed into the running... Wish me luck!

Don't submit??? Why not?

placement is an issue for me. id like to see the parent stork at the bottom of the tshirt rather than them all crammed into the center.

and how about a detail zoomed in preview of the guy?

ah i responded too late...

a bigger preview would definitely help... but since you already submitted it, i guess it's too late for that? anyway, good luck!

Another placement with details. Please note that the larger images are the detailed ones and will not be included in the finished design. That is.... if it ever gets finished.

Anyone?

That's sick! Maybe separate the delivery man from the birds. Make the birds smaller (and to the left) in the composition. Just a suggestion. :)

Oh, The BIG sotrk and the BIG human are just detail.



They proper composition iss all at the bottom of the shirt and the flying human is on the upper left.

IGNORE the big detail in the MIDDLE of the shirt.

Didn't you sub this already?



Were you thinking of re-subbing it?

Yes, I was going to re sub it if it didn't fair well after the design scoring. I'm just preparng myself to edit it in advance. :P

Sorry! I am new at this! I did not know it was submitted until I comment on it! :)

Oh no, normally you wouldn't know anyway, it's just that on a previous version I said that I had submitted it and Neon Samurai had read that.

Ok. Thanks! Please give me feed back on my designs. Should I submit or not. Please be honest.

Thanks!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/30596/Crossing_the_road

http://www.threadless.com/critique/30599/Extinct

touch up the drwing of the guy?

and to make it look more like he is flying over water, you should not mkae his shadow so clean cut

I agree, the art could be touched up a little.

and im not too fond of the yellow shirt.



Its a really cool idea though, nice work



Critique mine plz.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/30578/Optical_Illusions

In what way should I touch him up?

I love the colours!

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Why did you make it a guy wearing casual clothing delivering the baby stork? Maybe you should turn him into a human delivery room doctor or nurse.



Maybe have both mommy & daddy storks awaiting the arrival of the baby stork.



I know that you stated, "Please note that the larger images are the detailed ones and will not be included in the finished design," but those larger images might make the viewer confused if you submit your image that way. The viewer might wonder whether or not there are two storks on the final design.



Maybe have the title printed on the shirt for people who don't get it. Instead of the title being a question, make it the statement, "Where baby storks come from."



Also, either baby blue or pink are "baby" colors--not yellow.



This is my second comment on Threadless. Hopefully, I don't sound annoying.

Reply to 'Kitty Litter':

I think having the guy in casual clothing is perfectly fine. The pictures of storks delivering babies aren't dressed up. And it would probably make the shirt look strange.



I don't think the title should be on the shirt. It's very easy to understand as it is, compared to most of the shirts uploaded to this site.

I think more color options could really enhance the shirt. I dont think the shading tones that you are using enhance the shirt much, if at all. Maybe just play to make it a bit more vibrant. It especially looks dull on the color shirt you chose.

I would also seriously consider the style of the drawing. I know that sounds awful but the way it is now seems kind of simple, in a "rough sketch" sort of way. Perhaps more cartoon like? Even up the lines on your characters. they go from non-existent to very thick without any noticeable reason.

This is a first-class idea though!

Good luck! :)