Basically I want it to be this subtle line drawing that is a profile of a face looking to the side. Is it too simple? What color should the shirt be? I want the mood to be cartoonish but mysterious...ish. PLEASE PLEASE give me feedback thanks so much!



-MP

An excellant concept which needs working through. I can see where you're coming from, but where to go is more difficult. Perhaps the stark lines should be replaced with individual graphics, or coloured dots to imply shading and give depth to the portrait. Keep at it. It will come right in the end.

Try working with the positive and negative space. I saw the face straight away though. Maybe a special ink process could enhance the design or is the whole special ink process being overdone. I am new to threadless so I am unsure. Also try and tighten up the line work I do realize you are wanting that cartoon work.

I see the face. maybe the lines you use for the hair could be a little thinner, or more flowy . looks cool.

It needs better line quality. Thicks, thins, make it look like the strokes were labored over.

I agree with Mello--- try using the pen tool instead, to get lines of different width. It will add a lot more visual interest to the design. And maybe use more lines in order to better mask the fact that there's a face in there. It's a good idea, just keep working on it!

thanks guys for the input...I'm ready to make VERSION 2!!!

Ok so here's v2. I used pressure on my tablet to get it a little bit more dynamic. The person has now turned into a woman (added sexual tension) and more "scribbles" for hair and to hide a her a little better. v2.1 is just black and white. v2.2 I used a gradient to see the effects (I like). and v2.3 I used complimentary colors to punch the lines out (not sure...tell me what you think). Thanks again and give me more feedback!!!!

Thanks for the critique! I like your idea - though I'm having trouble seeing the woman in V2. Your idea reminds me of the painting that could be either an old crone or a young lady: (http://mathworld.wolfram.com/YoungGirl-OldWomanIllusion.html)



Perhaps you could put a spin this idea by having two or more possible interpretations of your lines. These could be differentiated by colors or stroke thickness. Of course take this or leave it - in any case I think you need to make sure the 2nd glance is an epiphany!

I'm sorry I don't see a lady in here at all

keep working on it though



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I couldn't find the woman without looking at v1 first, but perhaps you were trying to make it challenging.

yes I'm trying to make the woman hidden!!!!! I'm actually glad people have to stare at it for a while...give me more feed back!!! Thanks!!!

cool! but i think there are too many lines... just this!

and Thank you for your comment of my tee!

I like v.2.2 - the colors are beautiful and I really had to stare long to see the girl. Good work :)

i like v.2.2 the best, colors are nice and i actually found the girl but it took me long haha :)

I'm a sucker for any art and images that hide something(womans profile) I saw it right away

maybe just a bit more shape to the profile-- I can't say how though



If it's too challenging, something lost?

can't see it. sorrie

I preferred version 1. Simple and childlike. But EFFECTIVE.

I like the idea of having hidden images, but this one is just too difficult. People wouldn't understand that there's anything to find unless you tell them. And even then you would probably have to point out where it is. I liked the design of v.1 better, just work with it's colors more.

So here is v3. I got some ideas from comments (thank you!!). In v3.1 I changed the lips and added an eye brow to help people see the woman better. Tell me if this is working. Then I did some more line work for v3.2 and v3.3 changing the colors on v3.3. Tell me if this is making it more confusing or more dynamic. I think its helping but not sure. Thanks again for the comments this is becoming really really fun!!!

very interesting....the way i like it!

I like 3.1 the best out of those three. That's just because you see the face sooner, and it's the cleanest. 3.3 looks nice too though, the colors are great.



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*I changed the lips and added an eye brow to help people see the woman better.*

ermmm... woman?! its confusing cant find such face, u hav to work on it *i guess* make it lill more clear...wud be intresting!

I think the trouble spot is the hair on the top left over her forehead... it doesn't make sense with the other - excuse the unattractive word - clumps at right and down. Getting closer though!

hmm...ok I have some ideas for v4...thank you THANK YOU for speaking ur mind...I am quite pleased w/ the comments even when people can't find the woman...lol but I'll try to make it easier.

Ok here's v4. Again I wanted to make sub versions to help make this go faster.

V4.1 is very close to version 3.1 (taking out a couple lines and moving the lips and chin up a bit.)



V4.2 I used the exact lines and moved them over to appear to pop out with out the version 3.2 messyness.



v4.3 I did the same as version 3.3 but just using the same lines.



Which one do you like better?

Can you see the woman's face? If not ask a friend next to you, see if they can.

Do you want to see these on different colored t-shirts?



Thank you THANK YOU everyone for the critiques!

-MP

.1 & .2 good,,,, .3 best



i commented at V2--you have affected the needed change I was addressing

thnaks simple me!

i can see the face, but i just think its far too simple, also not really enjoying the white tee.

Thanks for checking out my design. I think version 1 works the best. It's more subtle.

Good idea, but it's too simple.

I quite like the versions 4.3 and 4.1, the black makes the lines seem a little 3d which feels out of place. I think that placement closer to the top of the tee might work better, and on a light blue or light green tee maybe?

I think the simple aesthetic is nice, but it's not going to grab people. Maybe try adding more detail to the hair and variations in line width but keeping the illusion effect.

I have to stop looking at this!!!Now I´m seeing two faces already, and I`m afraid, they are gettin moooooore :D

Thanks for the comment on my critique!



It took me a while to see the face...I like it, but maybe move the lines closer together or add more detail...the style is nice. 4.3 is my favorite

So here is v5. Thanks for all the critiques everyone!



v5.1 Erased some lines added some to give shape to the woman's neck a.k.a. make her a little bit more obvious.



v5.2 To make it "less simple" I thought about flipping her to make an abstract symetrical image (appealing ish...tell me what you think)



v5.3 Then to further this concept I kept the "happy colored" one and flipped it to "darker colors" .....good vs. evil....nice vs. not so nice...you get the picture.



Thanks again everyone!!!!

-MP

this is good...but i feel you should play more with colours including tee colour...also do away with the three lines at the bottom left which will make the face more identifiable...good design though!

also looks better without flipping

thanks for the comment...but I want to add one more note...



PLEASE READ BELOW EVERYONE!!!!!



My intentions are to make this somewhat of a mystery...can you see her? I want it to be interactive...some people say they can see it right away and some can't see it at all...this is very interesting to me. Mystery and simplicity...this is definately what I'm going for...thanks again and keep critiquing this thing!!!!

Think v5.2 is definitely more mysterious. It took me a second to make out figure of the female image. The first image that came through for me was the face of a goat at the center where the two mirrored images meet. Not that that is bad...I like it.

lol I saw that two...illusions....

I quite like this. It's fun to see what other things I can find in the image. I feel though that it seems a tad boxed in though.

id say fix the lines up more in front of her face!

i think this could be a really good design, but i think it needs a little more. i looked at the older versions and like 3.3 the best. i think there needs to be more variation in line weight to add interest and let viewers recognize the face faster... when they are all the same it kind of gets lost for too long and people may just think it's a shirt with elbow macaroni... i do like the idea of having to look harder for it though -- very good idea. good luck!



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http://www.threadless.com/critique/27465/Do_I_Exist

i like the single color version and agree with picamadew. maybe let it flow outside the box some. good concept

wow...that's trippy! I was like oh? ..OHHHHHHHH!!!

nice, I like the 5.1 the best, but I think its to big :(

I agree you should play with the colors a little.

pretty shweet though!

thanks guys I think I might stay with one side...I might expand on her hair so its not so boxed in...

I like 5.2 the best, nice work

WoW! awesome!



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THANK YOU!!!

I think this design lacks a flow. I read that you are going to expand the hair so it doesn't look so boxed in, which will help a lot. What if the hair flowed down, under, and back up in front of the woman to make that line-field in a sort of spiraling direction. That could be very effective.



Also, the mirrored images don't work, in my opinion. I think a right alignment will work really well with this as long as you don't try to fill up the entire shirt. If the design occupies the top-right third of the shirt, I think that would be very effective.