little rocket that could :P

rate and comment pleasee

Thanks =]

I feel liike it needs just a tiny bit of color - like if the rocket window was yellow or something. Not sure...

I like the style of it tho - and i like the dark line on the lighter colors.

I like it done with white lines on the red, but I think it would benefit from having the window yellow, a point of interest you know?



Also I'd like to see this off-centred so the rocket's not flying directly up the middle of the shirt. I think it would be a little more interesting that way.

awesome, ok I'll experiment with some different colors and angles for the rocket!

very cool...id wear it =) i like the red and black as is but on a more plain color i might agree with the above comments about adding one more color into the design.

thanks Tara, will do :P

I don't think the angle necessarily needs to be changed, I just think the whole design could be shifted over about 10-15 cm. Rule of thirds kind of idea.

Definitely should be shifted over to one side -- and I'm just throwing this idea out there, but maybe less smoke and instead, a little crowd of creatures/aliens/people on the ground watching the rocket soar away? Just a thought ...

hmmm good idea....I'm on vacation and college starts the 19th, so I really hope I can finish this before I go!!



If I have time I'll try the alien idea too!

thanks y'all :]

alright well I colored it, made it larger, which fixed the of center problem! anything else need fixing?



oh yeah, sorry but no aliens underneath the clouds..... I would have to draw it over again to fit them in the pic :P

This is a happy design. I'd like to see the drawing cleaned up - where it looks like some of the clouds were not completely selected and the white wasn't dropped out around the rocket. I know it's boring to say that. But it would look more finished with that stuff fixed.

yeah I can see what you mean.

I scanned it wrong and so when I went to clean it up it got all choppy like that....thanks though, I'll try to dig up the original and re-scan it :]

Yeah, lines could be cleaned up a bit. As for the colour options, I prefer the one on red with only the window coloured in (though I kinda wish the clouds were still white in that version). Glad you changed the placement. I'd say this is almost ready.

yeah before scanning again you should definitely bold up those lines more so that they come out stronger... and i would add more detail to the smoke because that could look sick if you put some time into that...



hope it helped

http://www.threadless.com/critique/27039/Bark

As said already, if the lines get cleaned up on this and get some nice smooth curves to them, I think this will be great. I really like the placement and the idea. Maybe make the rocket a tad bigger. I know it's a pain because you drew it all by hand so doing the lines again would almost be like starting over, but I think it would be well worth it. Other than that, maybe something in the white space, like a moon with the same hand drawn feel to it, but I like white space, so who knows. Good luck. :)

Thanks for all the ideas, I'll definitely fix it up!

I have to wait til I can get my original.....it's at home, and I'm at college :P



So be looking for the next version...might be a week or so though :(

I agree just check the line work and it should be fine.

maybe add a sun in the left corner area to give it something to look at in the sky??? See what people think...who knows...anyway keep up the good work!!!!



Take a glance at my critique if you would too...thanks!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/27225/At_A_Glance