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**VERSION 2**

In this version, I have redone the character designs, and changed the colours so that they are more visible. In addition, the movement between "panels" is now improved, and the number of colours in the palette has been reduced from 8 to 6.

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This is a cleanly drawn design that you will hopefully find to be cute and funny at the same time.

If you have any ideas on what can make this concept better, I welcome your opinion.

Let me know your thoughts on:
* The character design. What do you like about them? What could be made better?
* The colours. Are these suitable colours?
* The type. Does it suit the concept? Could it be made bigger?
* The composition. Should this be arranged any differently? Are the images in the right places? What about the type?
* The size of each element. Should they be bigger? Smaller? How?
* The action in the images. Is it clear what is happening? Could this be made clearer?

Thankyou very much for your help in this design process.

Dan.

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**VERSION 2**

In this version, I have redone the character designs, and changed the colours so that they are more visible. In addition, the movement between "panels" is now improved, and the number of colours in the palette has been reduced from 8 to 6.

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This is a cleanly drawn design that you will hopefully find to be cute and funny at the same time.

If you have any ideas on what can make this concept better, I welcome your opinion.

Let me know your thoughts on:
* The character design. What do you like about them? What could be made better?
* The colours. Are these suitable colours?
* The type. Does it suit the concept? Could it be made bigger?
* The composition. Should this be arranged any differently? Are the images in the right places? What about the type?
* The size of each element. Should they be bigger? Smaller? How?
* The action in the images. Is it clear what is happening? Could this be made clearer?

Thankyou very much for your help in this design process.

Dan.

I like it, I don't really like tees that need text though...so if you can get the idea over without the text I think it would be better.

should be more violent!

oh. and no text would make me like it.

I would think about getting rid of the text and making the characters a bit bigger. Apart from that this is a cool design. Nice job.
Pls comment on my design. Thanks
http://www.threadless.com/critique/25805/Polar_Fiction

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**VERSION 3**

Slight tweaks from last time. The art as been made larger, and the text has been removed.

Better? Or Worse?

...Better?

... Or worse?

I feel like an optometrist.

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Be sure to check out the other versions of this design!

This is a cleanly drawn design that you will hopefully find to be cute and funny at the same time.

If you have any ideas on what can make this concept better, I welcome your opinion.

Let me know your thoughts on:
* The character design. What do you like about them? What could be made better?
* The colours. Are these suitable colours?
* The type. Does it suit the concept? Could it be made bigger?
* The composition. Should this be arranged any differently? Are the images in the right places? What about the type?
* The size of each element. Should they be bigger? Smaller? How?
* The action in the images. Is it clear what is happening? Could this be made clearer?

Thankyou very much for your help in this design process.

Dan.

I like it a lot better without the text

I've just had to idea to reverse each image, so there is more room for the Gorilla to throw Pinky over the top of the middle image.

I'll upload this idea shortly.

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**VERSION 4**

Reversed each image "panel" to create more room for the graphics to be larger.

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Be sure to check out previous versions and tell me what you think.


Dan.

I like the facial expressions and illustration of the gorilla. Nice work.
Tell me what you think:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/25878/Road_Signs

SUBMIT SUBMIT SUBMIT!!! :)

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**VERSION 5**

Played around with the composition a little more. I think this is either the final version, or close to it.

What do you think?

Looks Great!!!

aaaah.
idk.
just some balancing issues i think.

What if I had Pinky in the third picture being thrown over the top of the second picture? If anyone has any ideas on how to fix the balance in this picture, drop me a line.

Hahaha this is great, think you should submit it! :)

http://www.threadless.com/critique/26044/Freedom_of_Speech

I would like some critique on this. How does it compare with earlier versions?

i would ditch the middle drawing or make the figures smaller... it seems just a little too close together

hope it helped
http://www.threadless.com/profile/706254/PeterD823/critiques

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**VERSION 8**

In this version, I have reduced the image sizes so they can be spaced further apart on the t-shirt.

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This is a cleanly drawn design that you will hopefully find to be cute and funny at the same time.

If you have any ideas on what can make this concept better, I welcome your opinion.

Let me know your thoughts on:
* The character design. What do you like about them? What could be made better?
* The colours. Are these suitable colours?
* The composition. Should this be arranged any differently? Are the images in the right places?
* The size of each element. Should they be bigger? Smaller? How?
* The action in the images. Is it clear what is happening? Could this be made clearer?

Thankyou very much for your help in this design process.

Dan.

I really like it - but I would like to see it on another shirt color maybe.

It bugs me that the pink guys open mouth is white in the first frame and dark in the third. I think the first should be dark also. Same for the gorilla as well. Great expressions.

I think without the title the idea is a bit lost, its just a monkey throwing a baby in the air for no obvious reason.
you've put a lot of effort in and i don't want it to be wasted.
but at the moment its not really working for me.
sorry a bit harsh.

I do like the monkey, he looks like a gorilla, if so he's very small, i'd like to see him a bit bigger though.

Hmm, I think I liked the type, but someone really hated the "obviousness" of it, so I got rid of it. I'll see what it looks like with the type again.

I'll see about another shirt colour perhaps... but that's not a priority.

The mouths are different colours because they are in different expressions. Some are baring teeth, others aren't. I'll see if I can include the teeth without keeping them clenched, or making it look stupid, but I'm not sure about the possibilities there.

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**VERSION 9**

Changes:

*The text has been put back in, as it is important for viewers to understand the joke being made, (for those not in the know, it is not wise to smile around Gorillas. They will mistake the bearing of your teeth as a sign of aggression).

*The images have been tweaked, keeping the mouths consistent from panel to panel.

*There are now a few different tee examples to show what the design would look like on different tee colours.

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I welcome feedback on:
* The character design. Do you like them? Can anything about them be made better?
* The colours. Are these suitable colours?
* The composition. Should this be arranged any differently? Are the different elements in the right places?
* The size of each element. Should they be bigger? Smaller? Why?
* The action in the images. Is it clear what is happening? Could this be made clearer?

Thankyou very much for your help in this design process.

Dan.

Oh, and the joke about the gorilla is meant to be two-fold:

1, It is not wise to smile around gorillas because they might mistake it as aggression.

2, It is not wise to smile around the wearer of this shirt, because he/she is grumpy and tempermental! ^___^

I hope that is clear to enough people.

I'm not sure, maybe the gorilla see smiles as aggression thing is too obscure, i didi n't know that. could change the text just to "gorillas see . . . . "
maybe try a few a few different fonts
character wise, i really like the gorilla, but the baby/human could do with some work.

I agree that the gorilla seeing smiles as aggression isn't very common knowledge, but translating that idea into what you did is very good.

Maybe you can put in "Fact: Gorilla's see smiles as a form of aggression...and don't you make the same mistake with me!" I don't know, what do you think? Ahehe...

I'd appreciate a look at my design too: Chick Magnet

How about "Like Gorillas, I see smiles as a form of aggression."?

i actually really like this, i think it's cute!
i have to admit though, i didn't really understand the actions until you described it...
I think KDV's idea is good, with the "Fact:..."
Or maybe you could also put "Don't smile at gorillas" or "Don't smile at the gorilla". Dunno, just a suggestion...

need critique on mine too, if you have time to spare.
http://www.threadless.com/critique/25832/gretel_likes_to_cut_and_paste

btw, the pink thing's (?) head is sort of "chopped" on the right side, in the first picture...dunno if it's supposed to be that way, but I thought i'd point that out.

Its feet are chopped also. Much better mouths.

I have no idea what is causing the chopping. It doesn't look like that in Illustrator (where I created the graphics) and it doesn't look like that when I put them into photoshop for the displaying picture. It only seems to happen when I upload them to this site.

I've checked the dimensions, and they are correct for uploading, so that's not the issue.

So the original graphics are FINE, but when I upload them to this site, the characters sometimes get chopped. If you look at some other versions of this shirt, you can see the top of the gorilla's head has sometimes been sliced off.