Knock Knock!

cute, I like how all the bananas have different poses, but everything is so small on the shirt it's hard to get the concept right away. maybe make it all bigger and closer together, and maybe draw out who's there in some different styles so that it's easier to tell that this is a knock knock joke.

This could be very nice... but I think you need to reduce the images, so make them bigger. Nice bananas !! :):))



Please take a look: http://www.threadless.com/critique/24905/Peace_Off#v2

i agree, too many items on the page. maybe make it a little bit more linear so that you can read the joke according to the images.



i really like the idea though, keep going with it.

also i like the blue shirt best i think

I kind of want it to read as a pattern from a distance and on an actual shirt it will of course all be bigger, so maybe I need to work on the threadless presentation part of it first and then get suggestions?

i want a shirt with the banana!

pretty nice concept, just as homer said too much stuff on the shirt



maybe a more schematic layout like

toc toc ? banana!

toc toc ? banana!

toc toc ? yo mama!



in my opinion that would do it pretty nice =D

(sorry for the bad joke)

Very nice idea~~ but too cluttered, draw lesser and bigger character to make it more attention grabbing~~ :)

I agree with Hellvys in that the shirt should be more grid-like.



What if it actually was an orange saying, "Orange"?



I don't think you should have the punchline written in. Let people figure it out for themselves.

I'm having trouble seeing the concept. I know that it suppose to be a knock knock joke, but I just how see how this shirt portraits that.

You broke the rule of three, and it suffers because of that. Same thing more than three times becomes unfunny or at least less funny. That, said, your design is too busy, the eye has nowhere to rest. I'd cut about half of your bannanas and increase the size of your drawings. It's a weird idea, but then again, this threadless. I like it, but it needs a lot of wrk before subbing occurs.



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I agree it does look a bit busy, understand you're going for a pattern effect, but not sure it works here.

It's a nice idea and a good design. It's not quite my sense of humor though. I can't think of anything that needs to be done in particular. I guess I never thought the joke was very funny and even though I like the banana guy that you made he doesn't do enough for me to make the t-shirt have much staying power.

I like that you're visualizing a classic joke, so the idea's good. I think a better presentation of it would be to have a line of bananas at a door, and one orange at the end, though.

Great concept, but maybe streamline it a little. I can picture a complete stranger standing quite awkwardly in front of you, his eyes jotting from left to right, and after a good minute letting out a guffaw before continuing on his way. Those may or may not be good times...



Love the bananas though.

I agree with cristoval. as a design: my first thought was that this could be simplified by a lot without losing the point, and hopefully avoiding some of the "copy/paste" criticism you'll eventually get in the voting area.



However, I gotta be honest, I'm just not digging the joke. If you simplified it down to just that very bottom line over the shirt seam with the door and the three bananas, then the one that says Orange... that would be a slightly different take on it, rather than just re-telling the old joke with icons and graphics.