something sort of simple.



is this worth continuing to work on? what do you think?

I love this, I would continue working on it. I'm sure you've seen some of the winning beard/mustache submissions. Maybe you could reference some of those and make it over the top.



I think that the glove on the blonde guy is too small.

Also the left leg of the blonde looks a little disjointed, I think the short's leg pulls in too much making the leg look like it's disjointed in under the fabric.



Of course, this is all IMHO.

haha... it's pretty cool.

pretty good concept i think. beards and mustaches are fun right now. umm something about the composition is a little awkward. hmmm not sure about the tiny dashes all around? is that sweat or something?

thanks! the dashes are just embellishment. I thought it looked a little empty.



yeah, beards and staches are a popular subject! so I was hesitant because there are so many good ones out there already

cool, but I don't need all those flying dot hatches behind the guys.

need something to make it go wow, doesn't have the wow thing for me yet. maybe zoom in on the faces. I can see it working, maybe it is all the additional dashes etc

please crit mine

ok so I added some texture to the hair and some other edits. left out the dashes as well. what do you think?

Haha, the armpit hair is tastefully done. One thing- it doesn't quite look like mr.beard is actually making contact with the other guy. The expressions and posture are great for the characters, but it looks like the fist is still a few inches away from the guy's chin. Maybe an almost starburst-type shape would work?

Love the style, though. Something Samuel Beam participates in, I'm sure.

Seems good to me. I think it you try to change the outline of the drawing from yellow-brownish to gray..?? It's just a thought. I like the concept anyway.



pls take a look: http://www.threadless.com/critique/24905/Peace_Off#v2

thanks!

haha, omfg, something pretentious, sam beam is my idol!! he does have some epic facial hair on him.



alright, I'll play around with it some more. I'm just not sure what else to do.

So great, I've never seen leg hair style be so crucial to a design before. It is a perfect touch.



The colour of the blue trunks may be the wrong blue? possibly the red too, might want to go with darker tones on each maybe into a maroonish for the red to make the trunks fit into the "time-period" that this boxing match seems to be happening in. You want to look for a navy blue with 50 years of dust on it... :P This will make a great Tee when it's done.



cheers.



crit mine please: orange

ok so I added a starburst shape and darkened the red and the blue. I'm not completely sure about these changes and I've been looking at it too long to tell, so any help would be appreciated!

This is really awesome!!! I only suggest experimenting with a couple more ways to show the impact of the punch. The starburst is alright, but it needs more umph! Maybe enlarge it, or make strokes that explode outwards? Anyways, you got my vote and keep up the nice work!! :)

Agreeing with empiricist on this one too. I do like the fact that the starburst is there, but it seems... basic? I'm seeing (now this is going to be hard to describe) one of those bursts that look like five or six brackets in a circle, facing inward (hope that made sense). I don't know if that would show up well, though, so...

Ha, I know what you mean about looking at something too long to tell. Good thing these critiques are here.

The darkened colours look better, though.

yeah, the starburst isn't working, partly because it's too small, partly because it's the same color as his shorts.



But I think you can get away without it, and make it even better. The issue is; from this angle it's hard to tell that the punch has landed. Try rotating mustache guys' head even more counterclockwise, and even more twisting back, so that his chin is pointing to the right, as if the punch has made his neck twist. Then make the beard-fist as if it just glanced off of the chin.



I bet if you worked at something like that, you wouldn't need the graphic clue of a starburst, it would just looked like he got punched really hard.

this is kind of silly but I put together some slides, the first with a rounder shaped starburst, the second with the same starburst as last time but with extra lines, and the third with no starburst but with a bigger beard fist.



I was having trouble deciding but now that I see them all together I think I like slide 2.



which do you think is best??

I like slide 3, but they are all good. I like this style.

thanks!

That is silly, I like # 1.

^well... they are boxing with their facial hair, so I guess that's why I put them in boxing outfits...



eh, I guess I'll just pick one and sub it then, I've done as much as I'm going to do at this point!



thanks for the help!

this is really great! i really enjoy any of them, but if i had to pick one.... i think id pick the first one.

Good call. For all my nitpicking, I think I like it without the burst the best. People can figure it out for themselves. Looking forward to seeing this in scoring! You've got $5 from me!

Wow, I really like the details that you added, and I see that you corrected the glove and the short leg.



I just noticed that you mirrored the visible fists of the men with the fists on the mens' beards. I can't believe I didn't notice that before.



But I noticed that they're both very hairy, but the blonde guy has no hair on his back. And for very hairy men, I think they normally have a gross amount of hair on their back. (And I think the brunette is missing a little hair on the back of his forearm.)



I like slide two the most.



Sorry for critiquing too much, I just really like this design.

hey, it's up for voting, check it out!