This is an idea i've been playing with. The cute little old-timey windmill reads the fashion magazine, she wishes she could be like the windmills on the cover...



Let me know what you think, constructive criticism always appreciated!!

Thanks!

i think the idea is really cute. :)

i would make the old-time windmill bigger though, and maybe personify the "supermodel" a little more.



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the magazine isn't necessary. some more details to make the older model look worn down would help a lot too.

Thanks, I've been struggling to figure out how to personify the tall windmill more, they're very simplistic so finding ways to bring out traces of "humanity" in them is tricky, any ideas?



^chelly, the bottom windmill isn't old, it's a girl wishing she could be like the other windmill

awesome!

bump

anyone have any other ideas that might help me out?

You cold make the old windmill look like a fat, frumpy girl and the new one like a super-sexy vixen (in their face an body-wise too). I think there don't have to be so many colours - loose the black lining!

I'm sorry. I forgot to tell you: I kinda like the idea

Its a good idea, just watch out for the seamline at the bottom of the shirt... your design will be cut off (at least i think it will)

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Great Idea! I can't tell what the little book at the bottom is suppose to be. Your design might work without it.

I love it, but agree that you wouldnt need the book.

Ok, version 2. Larger "chubby" windmill, no magazine, tilted the "skinny" windmills blades.



What do you think? All suggestions are helpful, thanks!

Cool idea, but it's still lacking something. Can't really figure out what, but it may be that it's just a little too simple? I don't know. Just my op.

^i know what you mean, to me it's the "skinny" windmill, she's lacking something but i just can't figure out how to make her better...

Brilliant concept, but I'm not feeling the art... it's a little too MS paint-y for my liking. I'd either completely redo it, or seriously revamp it.

I also agree on the simple factor, as it doesn't really draw me in. I always look for an artist with a style, or something that really sets apart the design or idea. Right now it is so simple it doesn't set it self apart.

Same here. The idea made me smile instantly, I reacted to the style later.

You could draw it more organically, I suppose. Als, I'd get rid of either the pink and red and get something between them in stead of both, and use a darker grey so you can make these things pop more ( i mean by shading) and use empty space between the stones of the short one. You could also add a darker grey on the closer side of the sleek one. Just my suggestion. Thanks for your crit.

great!

the lines on the sides of her mouth kindof make her look like she's eating something instead of making her look chubby

yes i agree with little miss shortie. on Jul 16 '08

I agree with Moosetaco - the style is maybe a little too simple for me - needs a little more edge somehow

Hahaha, I love this idea. I'm with everyone else, though. If you can make this a lot less simple, it would be perfect. Try drawing some freehand stuff. I saw a brown-ish cross-hatched style here (That's what I think of when I see windmills).



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thanks for the comments, I agree with most here, the concept could be great but it's just not flowing with the artwork you've got so far.



I think putting time into really giving the new skinny one a personality will help, but the overall style of the art could use a bit more ... ummm... depth?



Good concept though, keep at it!

i would say too many colors, i dunno if anyone else has already said that. simplify.

i think it's a great concept. work on the art

small changes to the "chubby" windmill, zoomed in a bit on the "skinny" windmill. Any suggestions?

Better! I'd use that shadow gray to give it a little more roundiness, but that's really about it. This is gettin good! The chubby one looks really unhappy, good job there.



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Sweet idea!

i like this but i have liked them all so no biggy

Shouldn't the "stick" on the dream one be set further back, under the brown part? It looks a little awkward.

ok, some tiny details fixed, what do we think, ready to sub?

i think so go for it girl submit it!

bump

Nice idea.



My Suggestions:



1. See if you can make the design a bit more 3D. The skinny one is OK, but the chubby windmill seems flat in comparison, maybe if it was less front on, more at an angle, like the skinny one is.



2. For the skinny windmill, perhaps make the pole rounded instead of angular.



I like your idea and design, good luck.

ok, rounded the pole on the small windmill, added depth to the blades on the fat windmill, anythign else?



thanks for all the helpfulness so far!

looking better, one last suggestion: move the thought bubble more to the centre of the tee so that it is more symmetrical, as at the moment it looks all squashed up on the left.



Great work.

good job, lots of work on this and i think its ready

one last bump for comments, my plan is to post at the end of the day!

subbed!