HUNGRAAAY!

haha, cute! i think the nipple/eyes could be moves a LITTLE closer together..

interesting concept, i think diversifying the lineart would make it "pop" a bit more

Added love handles and black shirt.

I really like the concept but try highlights and nipples closer togather.

I like the grey the best for this image.

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Forgot to move nipples closer. Ok fixed version here.

What ya think?

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Hi Phinx, the nose line is not working for me, perhaps a Kontiki style tribal nose would work well, sorry but I'm finding the belly lines a bit un-necessary, I think you should dump them and perhaps add in the space the end of a devils tail, this could be wrapping from the back, you could then have a portion of the tail on the back, to give a clue to what's on the front. (only suggestions, I do like the overall look and feel). Thanks for your comments on my design.

Thank yo for your thorough crit, I do hope you crit my future designs. I like the devil tail idea, the belly lines are too show that the evil appetite makes you eeat things that get you fat. But the devil tail maybe could be a tongue? Should I keep the drip or not and the white outlines, I feel like taking them off, would that help?

also the line nose, well was supposed to be like a bely line to show the fatness.

Hi Phink, i think i missunderstood your concept a little 1st time round, I see where your coming from now. However to make the fat folds work, I think you are going to have to make it a bit more 3D, perhaps take the white halo of and put some shadow under the boobs and the belly, a devils tongue would look great.

Gave it a nose, tongue, and shadow shaded the gut and love handle lines.

you could make the eyes look more intense, and try to use more color

oh and the mouth needs to be wider and more open

no need for the chin me thinks

Well the chin is two things it's supposed to be like an over weighted person's gut thats the reason why the appetite is evil, makes you eat things that make you fat. But I'll see what I can do. Is that the only change I can make?

oh haha the eyes are moobs!! :)

i say try to intensify the colors, and make them more evil



v5 of elephant should be up tomorrow :)

I got the gag pretty fast, but I kinda feel like Id like it better if it took it further, maybe some hair making the teeth rather than the random mouth. I think that the realistic-ish nipples make the very simplified belly button and abstract teeth and tongue seem out of place.



Its not my type of tee anyway, so take my thoughts with a grain of salt.

It's hard to tell that this has anything to do with a big or unsatiable appetite, so I say skip the nipple eyes, and focus more on the stomach area. The line down the center isn't needed either. Good luck with the next version if you do one.

New version. Some longer lines on chest and gut. Took out happy trail and chin line. Lowered the belly button.

BUMP!

Haha, this shirt is awesome! ...Although it wouldnt really work on skinny people o.o

i didn't know which shirt you wanted critique so...i picked on that i really liked. this is really clever. I think this is ready to go.



thanks for the crit

oh wait...you do need to color the tongue goin' in back of the shirt.

This is very awesome and I hope it was intensional on your part that the eyes look like boobs. But then I see it is intentional so good job. But I will say that the tongue doesn’t really look like a tongue to me but that’s just me so ignore that. But the back of the shirt should probably have love handles or shoulder blades idk something more.



Maybe even making the tongue bigger.

cool shirt! really jumps out in any colour and could possibly help a skinny dude like me look bigger.

Yes the eyes are mon boobies

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yeah, love handles on the back would make this shirt a go-go-go