Old man or baby? You chose. His upper lip and tongue are pushed on the tee shirt like if he was licking a glass window. Taste like Tee Shirt....no wonder, it's Tee Shirt Flavor!

Um can you tell me WHY I shoudn't submit rather then just checking it off plz.

It'd be fun if the flavor text dripped more naturalistically, instead of being so ridged and tight.

Hm .....ok I'll try that after I get some more crit.

Well the drool is supposed to be dragging because he is licking the shirt.

maybe if the drool was blue or something instead of the same color as the tongue

But the pink drool looks real nice on the black shirt right? I was thinking maybe I could make his tongue look as if it was turning into drool or somthing...I'll make some changes after more crit.

Does it look good now?

looks like bad breath

Um...how exactly does it look like bad breath?

The face is well illustrated... the text is hard to read.. if you make it more readable it could be nicer... that is my opinion on this one. Cheers.

I agree with the text thing. Just a little clearer. Another idea would be to make the blue shading see through instead so the shirt color acts as the shading. Not needed, just an idea. The drawing is good.

Yea that shading idea sounds good. I made the skin see through but obviously didn't work out that great. And I'll try to make the text clearer.

I made blue seethrough and the word clear. What ya think?? if you said don't submit or needs work plz tell me why.

I don't really know what to say about it, I guess it just isn't really 'my thing'... sorry. The shading's done pretty well tho.

I kinda like this one, I do wonder if you could maybe have the saliva coming of his tongue from all the way into his mouth. Make the back of the throat dark colored and concentrate on tense curves for the hairs.

Added some text to get the point across more clearly.

LOOLL freaky stuff.

i like it on green/white xD

placement is good too (:

thanks for the crit!

id say make the saliva green or light blue.. kool so far



crit mine?

I think the tongue melt looks good on the black though. Am I right? Or no...?

Also it's supposed to be like his tongue is melting sorta effect like that....maybe you guys see it differently..-_-

Ok the drool is now just drool not tongue melt. Also it is on top of his tongue now. Tell me what you think.

try putting the "tee shirt" as part of the drool

I don't like how it looks like a hole through his mouth. 'Tee Shirt' doesn't seem to match either, font wise I mean.

It's a funny idea....maybe if you had his eyes cast downward, it would bring more attention to the text...



could you critique mine? It's called The Family

Tee Shirt Pops

kool.. i liked it on black too..

maybe u could add a hand holding one of the pops

The shirt pops on black look real bad though....

ahh

u could change their colors on black maybe.. red might look like cherry and would go on black

Good idea but I'm up to 7 colors I don't wanna go over the limit and get rejected. But I'll see what I can do.

maybe it might be kool also if u used thicker thines?

Ok put the black one back and changed the shade of the shirts.

grey shirt look pretty kool.. i like the black shirt..

thanx for the ideerz

Very cool! I'm pretty sure this one is qualified!



When u get a chance pls critz mine

http://www.threadless.com/critique/24205/Crab_Mentality

for me it looks cool in black

its really big..i'm not sure if i'd be comfortable wearing it. as for colors, its cool on green.

Ok someone said they thought it was too big so I shrunk it a little on the shirt. I think it looks fit now.

Bump!

its cool artwork and alll, but i personally wouldnt wear it. Its kinda gross :o



critique mine please

http://www.threadless.com/critique/24166/Beautiful_Lunatic

I wouldn't call it gors..more like ....raw

Gross*

Maybe you cloud have it holding on to one of the "shirt pops" and lick it.

The idea is that he's licking the shirt that your wearing. His face is pressed against the shirt that's why is tongue and upper lip is flattened out....I guess it isn't that clear.

i agree, the idea is not clear, but the style is fantastic. I love the way the words are dripping off his tongue. Thats the best part. I would keep the baby and ditch the shirts. It is repetitive to put shirts on a shirt.



I would make a long trail of slobber coming out of his mouth to get the idea across that he is licking the shirt. Maybe it even goes around to the back of the shirt. Maybe the slobber could say something like, this shirt tastes good. Or this chest tastes good. Would suck my shirt be too nasty for threadless?

What if. I was to put A half eaten Tee shirt pop and the popsickle sticks with the words Flavored tee shirts.

Message is clear now, "Flavored Tee Shirts"

Tell me what you think....plz??

I would have it a bit smaller but It came a long way and is really cool. Blue shirt seems to work the best by far.

If you click don't submit PLZ tell me why.

i think the illustration itself still needs refinery... looking at your age, maybe your peers would buy it, but in this forum i think we all need to think for a more generalized market.



tQ for your crits... keep em coming!

Oh...(T^T *sniff* that hurts man....)lol Well I'm not sure what I could do more to the art. I can't see anything else I could add to the shirt.

Should I give him tonsils?

you mean a uvula? tonsils are on either side of your throat.



I agree with slothglut, though...you might want to pick something other tshirts as the flavor

I came a LONG way. Never thought I would make a version ten. What I did was simply add tonsils. The amount of colors I used are now shown(hoping this is FINAL version) Are the tonsils beneficial to the picture or no?? PLZ tell me why if you say now.*Breathes In...Breathes Out*

love this illustration.. it looks ready to submit i'd say...i can't actually think of anything else that needs improving..it's gone through enough already!

Should I put different flavored shirts on the back?

The tonsils are great, but I think you should 'seal' the throat off with a dark color. The illustration is really good, but the only one that really works is the one on the black shirt. Leave the color on the other shirts as it is. Good work, and thanks for the crit on mine :)

it's kinda hard to tell that the shirts on sticks are supposed to be popsicles

i really like this, it really gets the message across.

i agree with sakepok about "sealing" the throat off, but after that it'll be read for sub! :)



i updated elephant..come see?

I wanted the throat to e the same color as the shirt so thats why I did not seal it off.

Ok this is a slide show sorta so just wait to see the colors and stuff.



I added shirt flavors on the back.

haha flavors are funny :)

demented

Fixed a small mistake. The font on the white shirt was still whit so I changed that too the outline color.

Phinx--



V15 isn't showing up, so you might need to upload it again. I will say that 15 versions in four days means that you should be working out more of the design in sketches before posting them. Maybe just sit down with pencil and paper and really think about the composition or work on strengthening the drawing side of things (checked out your other critiques).



Good luck!

not showing up, repost, love the style though.

fixed

the shirts on the front of the t-shirt, dont match the patterns you use on the back. Like the pajamas has lines on it but on the front all the shirts look the same.