ZzzZzz... it's... SUpper Time!

The mouse's tail on the left hand side and also to some degree on the right cuts across the bodies funny. I expect to see legs under the mice, but ut looks like the tails cut them off.

very cool, but i like to see the legs too, add them!

Also critique mine please!

like it but legs would be great

critique mine?
http://www.threadless.com/critique/23520/Shutter_Fly

your line quality is impeccable. is this done totally in side illustrator or drawn by hand? i didn't immediately make the connection that the rats were in the same room. they might need shadows/shading too in order to tie them in. nice work.

Help me figure out if my eyes have it.

yeah... some legs may look good. Cool cute big fat rats …erm... but i tink the style of illustration for the rats differ from the couch and man. It’ll be good if you can relate them. Now they look like cut and paste from 2 different photos… blend them in harmony!

Very nice design, agree with others about the legs.... to be completed 100%. Cooooooool!!!

Please score and comment:
http://www.threadless.com/submission/167404/Angel

this explains the bowlingball sized feces everywhere.. DAMMIT!.. kool design.. shadows on the rats would be good like that person said..

crit mine?

nice. great line-work as mentioned before. although i think you should not make too big differences in the lineweights. the ones of the mice for example are too heavy. (i think)

(feel like giving your opinion on my iron-man?)

BIGGER BLUE PANTIES!!

Hi thanks all for the feedback :) I will work on it: )

I wait the new version for new comment mate : )

I agree about the legs. Maybe a diffrent backgound color too


crit me when you have a chance

lol i like the tiny slice of pizza sticking out of that mouse's head.
but i agree with the others
legs and shadows.
about the color i like it on grey but maybe other colors would be nice too (for girls xD)
PS. Critique mine too (:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/23933/Antique_Love

Hi this is my version 2, with legs and hand added in now :) i throw away the other 2 rats, so as to make it more focus on the rat sneaking up on the man ... eyeing on the pizza :)hungry!

I liked the three rats and the cat being eaten. Each his or her own. Cool design either way!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/24132/Defy_expectations

Nice design. Is the cat really necessary? It sort of un-ballances the composition.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/24220/RGB

I like the cat but I don't think it works here, niether do the comic book motion streaks.

Rather than have the lines depicting the TV glow, why not have an illuminated room with shadows behind the couch. I can't think of way to word it but basicly just illuminate the room with the TV glow. I think it will add depth.

I liked your first version better.

I almost like this as two different shirts.
1. the three rats all alone
2. the man asleep on the couch in front of the tv.

I prefer the colours from the second version, but the drawing from the first one.
I like skeevs idea about the illuminated room very much.

I would also work on the legs from the guy, his calves are too short in respect to the rest of the body.

very funny idea and very good drawing otherwise

I like the second version better. Most of the time mice sneaks out for food but in this illustration its his time!! hehe. Very cool idea.

I really like the colors of this one better. The color of the couch and tv especially. I think the tail should be coming around the other side of the couch.

if you have time
http://www.threadless.com/critique/24205/Crab_Mentality

I think it's funny I get the message, but I just need to see placement on the shirt.

Crit mine Plz, my Tee Shirt flavor one, and maybe my unfair fight.

haha i like this version alot more.. put it on a shirt

I like it a lot. I agree about having more shadows or something though, like the TV is illuminating a dark roome.
Nice work though.

critique mine please
http://www.threadless.com/critique/24166/Beautiful_Lunatic

remove the cat.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/24109/Will_Work_For_Peace

ahh! so scary! i agree..no cat

the giant rat might look nicer with some texture, but you would have to try it out and see if it would work.

NYC rats ftw

i like v2 better, but no cat.. also, id like to see placement

crit mine please: Prince Charming

thanks all for the comments. !

The TV illuminating the room is a nice idea i will try to work it out thanks!

i like the three rats from the first. you also could add one in the background eating the cat, but i like the overall look of the second version.

Hi, olie, texture is a good idea too, i did try it out, but i cant seem to get it right... i will still try to figure that out!

some people like the first version, some like the second, haha so i guess i will merge the 2 ideas together, thanks jesseJames22. U trigger that idea.

Changes has been make! cat has been remove, shadow has been added! (illumination)

Anyway hope everyone will like it :)

great improvements, even if they are subtle.

i would suggest that you work a little on the bottles, they have to few details in respect to the rest and they look too flat for me. Did you think about some wine (beer?) spilled on the floor?

I liked that the first mice had bites in their ears, it made them look less cute.

oh, and another detail, i would not cut off the light next to the tail from the mouse, but expand it a little.

hope i can help a little with my suggestions

BETTTEEEEEEEEEER !!!!!!!!! Great improvement... If it's up to me... I would send it... but if you come up with another design... I would love to criticize it :):):):):)

The illumination looks much better, now you get the sense of a dark room in the middle of the night with the TV being the only thing on.

Fuckin sweet, light and shadows are very nice.

Any ides 4 me

maybe put an empty beer in the fallen hand or right under it though

Hi all, i will be submitting this version for voting!

Hope everyone likes it!

cheer!

good luck!

this is sexi as hell lol and ready to go!!! good luck!

hahahahaha funny as hell man

Oh yeah, that's much better. The addition of the back wall adds a lot.

I can't think of anything else, so good luck in the voting.

You are ready. Great

I think the jumping cat should go back into this design :)

Ops, i forget to put the placement for the previous version, but anyway! this is going up for voting!
Hope everyone will like it...!
Last pizza up for grab!

I like that you added the wallpaper but it doesn't look right.

While the wall is on an angle the pattern is not following that angle and it causes a conflict in the perspective.

I like the idea of the wallpaper but it needed some tweaking.

yes pls change a wall paper... plsssssssssssssssss

Haha i like this one alot
Very creative
Check out my design
http://www.threadless.com/critique/24923/Positive_Thinker

nice illu....
but shouldn't his tail be in the shadow?

one echidnas coming up

and try to get some perspective in the wallpaper pattern indeed

This would be great on dark purple.

this is neat! I agree about perspective in the wallpaper. I love the colors. Nice work. I think its close to ready to sub!