ok i updated my old sketch into an almost finished inking....
thngs I know
-proportions are off (you can help me by describing where)
- no colors
- no seatbelts for people
- no people
- thrack can be seen thrugh the roller coaster

BUT! compared to what I had before.....
looks better
jsut need to clean it up/....
(Is there an eraser in illustrator???? i'm sorta new to it....)

=)
thank you
any suggestions FEEL FREE to tell them
I like the space idea
any others????

http://www.threadless.com/critique/2204/Cuz_shoulder_restraints_suck

theres my old one
(please go down to the bottom to see the last update on it)

also, i'm still trying to think of a name for this submission....
if anyone has any ideas, please tell me!

OH and on the shirt, it goes from the top corner to the bottom....I think t ahts all i gots to say

You need to pick one thread and stick with it. The link from your other one didn't seem to work, but i like the boldness of the lines in this one.
Do fix the showing of the tracks, just fill the shape with a color and make sure it is layered on top.
No erasing needed.

Y1. yea, i figured that....ut i wnted to change the thumbnail so other people would look at it
2. strange abut the linnk...oh well
3. and the eraser, there are little bits that over exstend (sp?) other lines and need an eraser to fix it,
4. filling the shapes, i have a porblem because i did some parts as seperte lines....is there any way to combine lines to make them as a shape? like, the opposite of the scissor tool?

Thanks for the help and suggestions

anyone???

select the two ends that you want to join then do a Ctrl+J

that should work...

wait so where does this go on the shirt, is this following a theme, random(random is good), What?

On the shirt, this will go from the top right shoulder to the bottom left of the shirt (mynext revisison ill try and include a placement visualization) and so far....its random,
BUT
i'm thinking about putting it ina place
a fewpeople said space, which owuld be nice, but would be a lot like space mountain at disneyland....so so far, its random
if u have a theme for it, that would be nice

haha
Thanks for the feedback

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okie
here is the next version with colors it should look ok on
i am not done yet
cuz, if you didnt notice, they are msising hands and heads.
So, i am going to make the rollercoaster and people the shirt color,
so tell me whic one i should use mmmkay?

nwo for the eternal question...
which rider is YOU?

haha
im the guy in the front with his hands in the air.... ANYWAYS
please leave comments??
thank you

oh yea, and i left the trck nvisible so you could see the people better

AHHH!

Where's their heads!

I'm not going on that coaster.

its not done yet!~!!!!
its a work in progress....im only 15
=/

row one and 3 have hands =)

well i am going tpo subm it, so how about you guys give me a suggestion??? i really want to make this look good.....

Well It's neat. I think you should include the track beneath them because otherwise you'll get the "Did they jump the track?" and the "Where's the track" comments.

okay, thanks ill reupload with track in a min

with track

so...any comments?

it's just a rollercoaster? you have some talent but it just needs to be applied to a better concept

well it could be, but in my original critique, some people were suggesting to put it on a background, like space or something. I think it would work too.... if you have any ideas as to the background feel free to share ;-)

I like it with no heads - or maybe you can make their heads various buckets of food like popcorn and chicken and popcorn chicken - then the motion of the coaster could be amplified with the food spilling out. - I would try blue yellows and other dull carnival colors for this then make your linework the shirt color.

I say no to space - that is the obvious background - if you want to do background do a large ugly baby or a pink gorilla or a 10 headed news personality

AGE IS NO EXCUSE! anyway, not bad but like bike ninja said I think you could come up with a better concept than this