i already put this up as a critique but here it is, again.



on the shirt, i'd like to make three words into a sentence.

help me?

ideas? criticisms?

is it ok that this is 5 colors?

everyone secretly wants to be a fish :)

come on.

it looks a little jagged to me. may be try to smooth it out.

yeah, i know. thanks i will.

if it's even possible on appleworks :[ lol

It def has potential

maybe without outlines and bit stronger colors?

thank you very much.

so.

the new title for this design is, obviously, One Happy Life.

i just decided to add the word "one"; couldn't think of anyting else.

suggestions?...

i don't know where to go with this...

Maybe go with a few smaller, non-word fishes, and use more colors to spice it up a bit. The "one" could be a little more legible, and, as mentioned before, most of the lines could use some cleaning up.

righto. i'll work on it. but later lol.

omg the tee shirt placement thing looks terrible up there lol

It's a great concept. I think if it was smaller, and there were other fishes around it, it would rawk!



p.s. another shirt colour than black would be better.. how 'bout blue like the ocean...? ;D

p.p.s. I really liked the orange and yellow fish in version 1!

ok thank you :)

I like where this is going! The colors so far are pretty nice, but it might look better with one more... maybe green or something? Also, "Happy" is readable as a word, but not necessarily as a fish. Maybe find a picture of a fish, and then draw out the word Happy over it to make sure you get the curves right.



And maybe think about adding some stuff to the background... like bubbles or other ambient things to get the whole underwater theme across.

thank you, i appreciate it :)

valorandvellum, your "It't been a pleasure" sub design is my desktop background :)

I think it should be pretty in-legible (is that a word) so that it's a little more subtle. So that people won't notice at first. I agree with the bubbles, those would help.

i know what you mean.

and i will add bubbles. blue?

I would like "The Happy Life" better than "One Happy Life."

Someone mentioned that they looked a little jagged... and as far as I can tell, that was not changed at all. All the lines really need to be smoother.

the jaggedness was not changed, no :S because i am too lazy to try, and am using a laptop with appleworks so it would be pretty much impossible lol

maybe i'll try a "the" fish.

anyone else?

"too lazy to try"? if you're too lazy to try you're too lazy to have a remote chance of winning...

hmph.

i have too much schoolwork, that's what i meant.

the fish should be much more rounded and soft, also try diffrent colors

thanks, treeo :)

...bad drawing program, otherwise they would be soft :(