Maybe the text should be on his turtle-neck, also, I think he needs a color coming out of the top of the turtle-neck, more the fashion to fear. It does need more colors, and maybe show a bit more of his body, its like we would be wearing a shirt of a guy wearing a shirt....which now that I think about it wouldn't be too bad an idea is done right...
@Mr. Raab: I like the idea of putting the text on the shirt, but I'm not sure how much sense it would make... I mean, how many turtle-necks with printed text do you see?
instead of a turtleneck, I would add ruffles (like on a ladies blouse), and I like the txt... a little corny - maybe you could just say "What?" as the text.
I like the text and agree that a little more color would be good - specifically the skin tone in the larger image. I don't know if it would work to color his sweater or not though. I think it would depend on the color... pea green?
however, i wouldnt make his sweater and helment solid colors. i would add some ugly print or ruffles or something to his clothing and make those in color. If you make it solid color i think that it would be a little much.
haha love this idea! are you going to color the face? if you are maybe color the fingers too. You could put some white highlights in the horns to make them look shinny...hope this helps! Great Start!
Really good character. I think there should be some more pattern around the design. The text works ok with the image but combination text\image usually dont work well around here so I'd consider losing it. Mine?
I'd experiment with sizes as well, I would like to see the figure a tad smaller. I love the expression on his face and the tee placement is excellent. Text doesn't really seem to do well on most shirts so I don't recommend it.
Ok, so I think this is the one. The little speech bubble ties everything together, and the skull & crossbones gets the whole "fear me" aspect across. What do y'all think?
Also, does this work for the Lollapalooza contest?
I'd drop the speech bubble. I've always found that the key to a powerful design is to communicate an idea without necessarily having to say it. I think you've done that well, but the bubble is extraneous. I'd lose it.
Think about real life. It's always better to walk into a bar and just BE intimidating than to walk into a bar and shout, "Hey, everyone! Be scared of me!" What might show that? An argyle sweater on a pike? Fit that in and you will be saying a lot and using very little to do it - an extremely beautiful way to communicate, in my opinion.
i like it without the speech bubble, and whatever you do, keep a pattern you made yourself and don't use the one in the earlier versions that is straight out of illustrator. you don't want your great original art marred by the fact that the pattern isn't original. the character is really awesome.
Okay this is it. Time to submit I think. I added a little highlight at the top of his helmet, dropped the speech bubble as per general consensus, and made a better presentation. Should I submit this for Lollapalloza, or just as a regular submission?
I still think it would be great if you added something that shows his hatred for lesser fashions...something like the sweater-on-a-pike idea (to visually tell a story), but if you veto that one, I say it's a-go!
Just an after-thought, seems like right now (when you don't know the title) he's grumpy about having to wear that shirt, not that he is wearing that shirt of his own accord and it is so freakin' good, others may die.
I'm gonna click needs improvement because I think it's got more potential. But, like I said, if you feel like it's done, it probably is. :) Good luck!
I think this is awesome, but I do think it should say "fear my fashion sense" like you originally had. Otherwise you might not fully understand the shirt. And don't make the text, if you do put it on, stand out more than the picture and cause it to become the subject. It should be subtle.
Other than that, I think this is looking great, and I think you should be ready to submit.