You heard him. Comments and suggestions please :)

Text: yes or no?

maybe you should put more colors to it...

no text for me...

Yeah I agree about the colors and maybe even adding more to his interesting choices in fashion but I think I like the text.

the text makes me laugh... and i'm pretty sure that's the point :) is the spot in the e supposed to be white?

Maybe the text should be on his turtle-neck, also, I think he needs a color coming out of the top of the turtle-neck, more the fashion to fear. It does need more colors, and maybe show a bit more of his body, its like we would be wearing a shirt of a guy wearing a shirt....which now that I think about it wouldn't be too bad an idea is done right...

No, I just missed that spot in the e. Also, if you click "don't submit" could you please tell me why?

its a good art style though

Any suggestions as to colour?

@Mr. Raab: I like the idea of putting the text on the shirt, but I'm not sure how much sense it would make... I mean, how many turtle-necks with printed text do you see?

only thing missing is colour

I like the text ...without it the design wouldnt make much sense

I would just play with the colors but i like the concept of the design

instead of a turtleneck, I would add ruffles (like on a ladies blouse), and I like the txt... a little corny - maybe you could just say "What?" as the text.

how do you make a comment a link? I'm new at this... :-(

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gah! this isn't working! sorry, I can't show you.

thanks for trying... i'll ask my bro - he knows about this stuff.

good job, i like it!

although he kinda looks like hitler

Try a different composition

I like the text and agree that a little more color would be good - specifically the skin tone in the larger image. I don't know if it would work to color his sweater or not though. I think it would depend on the color... pea green?

i agree with Kresta, needs some more color. i like it otherwise.

Thanks for the positive critiques everyone!

using more color might make the image better

more color! great stuff :)

Ahahah!!! LOL! Very very funny! Just try to make the dude more badly-dressed, maybe colour it a lil bit ;)

Would you leave me any suggestions?

Haha, this is funny!

I love vikings! I agree with everyone else - more colours!
I'd love to see him in muted browns and everything and then a vibrantly ugly colour on his turtleneck.

Without the text i dont think I would understand what you were trying to say. So the text is ok, maybe more color like they said before.

It's great, and I'm being unoriginal, but I agree with pretty much everyone else.
Color would be good, maybe even a plaid pattern for the turtleneck.

very cool

is the skin colour staying on the shirt aswell

I'll get on that colouring ASAP. I'm really feeling this one :)

love the text, love the idea, love the man, needs more color, and the guy isnt really that badly dressed.

however, i wouldnt make his sweater and helment solid colors. i would add some ugly print or ruffles or something to his clothing and make those in color. If you make it solid color i think that it would be a little much.

haha love this idea! are you going to color the face? if you are maybe color the fingers too. You could put some white highlights in the horns to make them look shinny...hope this helps! Great Start!

Critique mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/21341/Glam

So here's a coloured version. What are your thoughts as to the colour choice?

So here's another version with a grey helmet. I'm leaning more towards this one.

very nice, actually looks like a friend of mine although i don't think he has a helmet!!!

looking good man like the pattern

Really good character. I think there should be some more pattern around the design. The text works ok with the image but combination text\image usually dont work well around here so I'd consider losing it. Mine?

this is excellent. I'd buy

Thanks for the excellent feedback! :) I'll upload another version without the text, just so everyone can see how it looks.

LOL! Really cool! :D


Critique mine?

Ok, so here's another version without the text. Which one do you guys like? Version 2, 3 or 4?

I like version 3. The text is funny! And it gets your point across much more clearly.

This is mine if you get a chance:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/21385/Change_of_Heart

I put a new pattern on the shirt, now only 6 colours on a natural tee. Not sure about the text still. Yes or no.

I like his new shirt pattern :D
sort of like the text...maybe it can be on the sleeve or something?

thanks :) i'll experiment some more with the text

I'd experiment with sizes as well, I would like to see the figure a tad smaller. I love the expression on his face and the tee placement is excellent. Text doesn't really seem to do well on most shirts so I don't recommend it.

Yeah, thats exactly why I'm hesitant to include the text. Maybe if it was slightly different font, like a magenta/yellow type combo.

dude it should like a cosby sweater! that would be to funny!!

Haha, that would be funny, but it would require too many colours :P

Do you guys think this would work as a submission for the Lollapalooza contest?

ha.. i think u shoulda kept the text but made it small..

Good progress here!
Anyway I'd like to see if you could try with your character having longer arm. I wanna see how it is if the patern is unbroken.

Oh def. no text. Such a spoil.

I definitely still like version 3 best. Good luck!

Ok, so I think this is the one. The little speech bubble ties everything together, and the skull & crossbones gets the whole "fear me" aspect across. What do y'all think?

Also, does this work for the Lollapalooza contest?

i prefer the text over the speech bubble :) love the shirt hahaha

The text gets your point across better. I'm still rooting for version 3, lol.

The only problem I have with the text is that generally, it results in a low score... I'm on the fence with this one guys o_O

Bump. I really need some feedback for this please :)

I'd drop the speech bubble. I've always found that the key to a powerful design is to communicate an idea without necessarily having to say it. I think you've done that well, but the bubble is extraneous. I'd lose it.

Think about real life. It's always better to walk into a bar and just BE intimidating than to walk into a bar and shout, "Hey, everyone! Be scared of me!" What might show that? An argyle sweater on a pike? Fit that in and you will be saying a lot and using very little to do it - an extremely beautiful way to communicate, in my opinion.

version 5 is my favourite. Much better without the speech bubble, same reason as Sarieli ^. It's a clean, bold design without it.

Please crit mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/21491/Waiting

Really nice especially with the pattern and the fresh colors. I'd make the colors on the collar a bit darker.

please check mine too

fantastic!

Version 3 is DEFINATLY the best
i love the character design and the colours work so well..

Oh geez, now I really don't know what to do haha. I like the speech bubble, but nobody else seems to...

at the very least, no speeech bubble. ftw....sowwy :)

i like it without the speech bubble, and whatever you do, keep a pattern you made yourself and don't use the one in the earlier versions that is straight out of illustrator. you don't want your great original art marred by the fact that the pattern isn't original. the character is really awesome.

@WhitneyBeth - yeah my sentiments exactly. Besides, the illustrator pattern is gross anyways :P

Okay this is it. Time to submit I think. I added a little highlight at the top of his helmet, dropped the speech bubble as per general consensus, and made a better presentation. Should I submit this for Lollapalloza, or just as a regular submission?

Impatiant bump :)

I still think it would be great if you added something that shows his hatred for lesser fashions...something like the sweater-on-a-pike idea (to visually tell a story), but if you veto that one, I say it's a-go!

Just an after-thought, seems like right now (when you don't know the title) he's grumpy about having to wear that shirt, not that he is wearing that shirt of his own accord and it is so freakin' good, others may die.

I'm gonna click needs improvement because I think it's got more potential. But, like I said, if you feel like it's done, it probably is. :) Good luck!

I think this is awesome, but I do think it should say "fear my fashion sense" like you originally had. Otherwise you might not fully understand the shirt. And don't make the text, if you do put it on, stand out more than the picture and cause it to become the subject. It should be subtle.

Other than that, I think this is looking great, and I think you should be ready to submit.

My question is: Should I submit it to the Lollapalloza Loves contest, or just as a regular submission?

Ooooh. Good question....I'm gonna go with a regular submission though.

I think it's good.
Definately ready for submission, I think it would be best as a regular submission.

V2 of Mine?

Hey, I like it very much... Best of luck with this design!

I like it, really cool idea

Sub'd! I'll let you all know when its up :D