Here's a rough draft. I feel that there needs to be something to tie it together. Suggestions?

nice idea, but I think it needs more detail. By that I mean, the mask and boots need shadow to go with the way the light from the door is coming, Also, it would be pretty sweet if the gold was actual shimmering gold.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/20690/King_of_the_hill

Yeah, I was planning on adding some shading. That would probably make a huge difference.

Here it is with a bit of shading

can you send me your email, or myspace, or something, I want to send you an idea I did with you design. If you like it you can keep full credit. My myspace is in my profile.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/344462/Home_Sweet_Gnome
this is my newest design

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Here is an updated version. I redid the stuff in the foreground to work out some kinks and improve the shadowing. I also added the little corner of the room lines to try to establish the room more.

I could seriously use some feedback here, people. Anything.

The man in the background could use some longer legs...he's a bit stumpy. Also, the perspective is off...you have the bar with hooks at the same angle as the line indicating the floor. The side of the bar with the mask needs to be brought up..this will make it look like it's actually hanging on the wall.

I think that looks awesome man!
I like the shadow, but NuNu is iight.
The perspective is off, also..
maybe a lil' more detail in the walls/floor?

I'll give it to you straight. The silhouetted man is way out of proportion. The feet, toes pointed outward, puts him in a frontal position (I don't think anyone can strike that pose unless they're into ballet). The bigger left arm and smaller right arm suggests he's angled towards the viewer, left side forward right side back. The left hand is way oversized in comparison to everything else, etc. etc. Meaning, get a good reference of a man standing, looking towards the viewer and draw from that rather than guessing.
here's one

You might want to find a reference with the feet spread apart so he has a solid stance, the gesture and demeanor of a warrior. Scroll down to the sepia colored gladiators on this site for an idea of what I mean.
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Sweet! Great concept. Nothing like a bit of masked wrestling. I think the mask and boots could sit on their own for a tee-shirt. They are great. Other than that the only thing that is perhaps wrong are the legs. Well played.

Redid the shadow and tilted the rack a little bit for perspective. Feedback?

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I'm pretty much ready to submit this. Anyone?

like the shadow alot more

How do people feel about the line thicknesses on the wrestling gear? I've messed with that stuff so much I can't even tell any more.

The lines on the brief look a bit thick. Mess around with thinning some of the fold lines, perhaps? They might be too thin if any thinner, I dunno.

I only noticed that when I saw the question though. I would have submitted.

cool but how would it fit on a shirt ?

placement pleeease :D

Here's a look at placement and presentation.

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hey we have the same surname!

the briefs look a lot better now, i really like this and i would def buy it.

if u would be able to critique mine i would really appreaciate it!
http://www.threadless.com/critique/22512/Trashy

The two elements of your design are way too far apart to look like they belong to each other and also i dont think the perspective quite matches (as in the pegs are too low to the ground). Everything else is fine i think, you just need to play around with the positioning, good luck!

I tried to fix the perspective a little by extending a corner line. Thoughts?

I like, but why not extend the Door light and the conquistador shadow diagnally until it almost meets up with the outfit. that'll bring the elements together and give a straight line for the eye to follow.

Thanks for the suggestion, Gamador. Here it is within the shadow and light bigger. Thoughts?

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I'm hitting that point where I just want to submit it already. Anyone going to stop me?

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I'd like to see it a bit bigger and higher on the shirt. great job

please critique mine: Penguins are Cute!