well, you do smell pretty...

haha thank you to the person who gave me "don't submit" xoxoxox

ok neat, just one don't submit and no comments... awesome critique guys, thanks

you could be crude and put it on the bottom of the shirt... The bottle doesn't really look like it's balancing on that birds head and his beak looks odd. I like the look of the bottle though. it looks see through.

thanks, your honesty and comments are much appreciated.

hahaha oh, and I thought the armpit was crude! at first i was going to aim it at the neck

nice design/concept! i do like it! ...future five from me! all the best to you! :D

thanks so much! greatly appreciated :)

i thought at first the top bird was spraying himself with the bottle, making "I" in the title refer to the bird.



then i thought the top bird was knocking the other bird out with the bottle and exclaiming "I SMELL PRETTY! SO THERE!"



then i realized what is apparently really going on, and now i'm just confused.

i do like the drawing style though.

thanks... do you have any suggestions as to make it clearer? I was going for a disney joke, you know how the princesses always have cute birds doing everything for them? so I thought, hey, what if you had two cute birds spritzing you with cologne or perfume 24/7?

but yeah, how do i convey that better?

thank you!

should there be two birds holding up the bottle?

now that makes more sense.



the first thing to do is probably fix that poor bottom bird who looks like he's getting hit with the bottle.

ok, so two birds more comfortably holding it would ease the little bird's pain? thanks!

I like the style, but I'm not sure about the composition. Something about it looks just a bit awkwardly placed.. I can't put my finger on it though.

its good birdy smells pretty hehehe

bump please critique my fake account xoxo

Oh, I really like the linework. Your marks here feel more confident and clean than on that other sub. The colors work nice here too. The problems I see have already been pointed out- int awkward manner the bird is holding the perfume on his head.



There should also be more of a hierarchy. At the moment, there's no focal point since the birds & bottle are all about the same size. Considering the concept is based on smell, perhaps make the perfume bottle the largest, with birds (more than 2 I think) surrounding it. You can have a few birds holding the bottle, and smaller birds flying about in the background in a more simple 1 color silhouette.



Also, think about the environment...if your birds are flying, toss in some clouds. Create a sky.

thanks mezo :) you're the best

oh and the only reason they don';t have an environment is because they are supposed to appear directly in front of you, like the environment is the shirt because they are your personal perfume spraying friends who love you :)