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Kojima on Apr 07 '07 Pretty awesome so far.
The clouds over the water deserve some more detail. The reflections should have ripples and distortions. |
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Kojima on Apr 07 '07 Add another fish to the bottom. And what is going on with the umbrella? Is it holding that white fluffy stuff, or is it a cloud in the background?
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the only thing that confused me was the white over the umbrella
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ooo wow that's nice.
i like how her hair goes over the umbrella handle. a title could be "Goldfish" or obviously something more complicated. i'll think of more later. |
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awesome, i like it
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melh696 on Apr 09 '07 so the consensus is that the water in the umbrella is not easily recognizable as water....
i'll get on it. anyone else?? |
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I really like this. I would deff buy it. You can fool around with other colors for backgrounds
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no, I'm pretty sure they don't do screens...
"Chance of Showers" |
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I would absolutely buy this!
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mezo on Apr 09 '07 Gorgeous....and even though I didn't know that was water above the umbrella doesn't matter...I thought ist was fog or steam, which would still work. I like the mix of clean vectors with the textures and patterns.
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ISABOA on Apr 09 '07 WOW -
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ISABOA on Apr 09 '07 how about freefall for a title
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melh696 on Apr 09 '07 i kind of liked the abiguity of the water above the umbrella...
the whole thing is kind of vague, is she falling from above or rising from below... ? ya know? OOO you guys are awesome with the titles! any others? |
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the only thing i don't really like is the clouds...but it is gorgeous. i love the colors
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adam antium on Apr 09 '07 looks awesome!
"rainscension" "dropping" "swinging in the rain" "h2obsession" "soft landing" |
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ISABOA on Apr 09 '07 gliding the seas of dreams
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"Bliss"
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Ellsswhere on Apr 09 '07 "A Dress Adrift"
short sweet and simple... can you dig it?! |
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"storm fear" "The dreams of fish" Whatever you call it, I like it.
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"Rainy Day Woman"
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melh696 on Apr 09 '07 thanks everyone!
ooo i really like the word "Adrift"... naming these types of things is always tough for me, you guys are so witty. I'll totally do some changes/options once i get home... right now i'm at work, also known as "Pretenting not to be on Threadless" time. |
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ISABOA on Apr 10 '07 you need to sub this sucka
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yeohgh on Apr 10 '07 beautiful, sub this and going to be rocking!!! :D
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melh696 on Apr 13 '07 so, i'm thinking i might just sub this already...
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ISABOA on Apr 13 '07 bout time - 31 submits 0 no submits
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Kojima on Apr 13 '07 are you gonna show us V2?
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melh696 on Apr 13 '07 heh, just needed some assurance.
expect to see it soon.. i'm going to try my hand at some exciting flash |
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melh696 on Apr 13 '07 i'm thinking V2 will be a surprise.
i'll keep you in suspense :) |
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dacat on Apr 13 '07 Stellar work!
One nit-pick, the water on top appears to be behind the umbrella, not in the umbrella, since you can see the outline of the back edge (as if it were empty). |
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melh696 on Apr 13 '07 THANK YOU!
That's the portion i am working on, i wanted you to be able to see the back half of the umbrella to show more depth... i think it's a matter of a color change.... V2, when i have time :( |
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Wouldn't change a thing, looks great. Let's see it laid out on a shirt though.
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wow. that is absolutely gorgeous.
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wooow! nice work!
What is the position for that? central? |
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Go for it!
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wotto on Jun 23 '07 SUB IT
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The umbrella's hook handle looks a bit off.
I'd move the clouds a bit farther away from the umbrella... That's it. Then you should sub! |
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This is beautiful!
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amazing!
where's volume 2?? |
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Why not call it "not sure of a title" ?
Hell, it is as good as any other and this design doesn't need a title... maybe "Title Not Required" |
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whats the placement?
other than that you should deff sub it. its amazing. |
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cool but not particularly interesting.. i bet you can do better!
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What the hell ramonestattoo!? Why are you topping all the old critiques of shirts that have already been subbed and have had decent scores?????
There are a lot of critiques in the blogs that are still works in progress and you are pushing them to the next page and out of view by topping the old ones that no longer need critiquing. |
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I like it! She's got class. She's like the Mary Poppins I would totally ask on a date.
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AMAZING! 5 please submit
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pretty sure that this is four colors: orange, grey, light grey, and white.
awesome. please submit! |
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eskimokiss on Aug 27 '07 lol
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hmm don't need many more "Sub this" for convincing do ya?
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Jebs on Aug 27 '07 wow! very nice...what are you waiting for? just submit :)
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How about -"Carried away" for a title
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What about "Mary Ploppins"
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nice illustration :)
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This is great!
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wow, this is beautiful. I dont really understand the technical aspect of threadless's color issues but I think what you have is great, I love the simplicity of the matching colors. I would keep it the different colors to a minimum, but what you have is gorgeous I would submit it
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Pakpandir on Jul 01 '09 This is very cool. I like your design and illustration. Wondering about your placement too. Will you be submitting v2 soon? i'll watch this to keep updated. Great job!
can you please crit mine when you have free time. Thanks Terra Micro |
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WOW! i really like this! and i think that you should keep the colors as is. please, if you have time, could you take a look at mine?
http://www.threadless.com/critique/52015/The_Boston_Three_Party |
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A good design for sure, except the clouds should have the same texture as the water, and a more distorted reflection.
My Design: Octalove |
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it has been two years
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Nice... why don't you submit it?
Care to shed some light on mine and rate me? http://www.threadless.com/critique/61205/PROSPERITY_amp_THE_ART_OF_CHINESE_FENG_SHUI#v2 http://www.threadless.com/critique/61265/KICK_IT_OUT_OF_YOUR_LIFE |
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Excellent artwork!
My only comment critique would be to define the body of water more. Maybe, you should throw some color contrast with they sky. Possibly a darker shade of blue? Definitely submit it. |
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I thought she had clouds in her umbrella. You need to give it some swirls to make it seems more wave-y. Plus maybe a hint of muted blue.
Being Scored : Submarine, Sandwiched! |
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Whoa, I didn't see the date, damn, People should delete old critiques...
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this is an awesome design.
maybe make some consistancy in the clouds? are the clouds going to be those grey ones or the wispy white ones on the top? everything else is fantastic. awesome work. critique mine if you have time WOULD BE AWESOME |
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I like the trees and their reflections as puffy as they are now, don't change a thing -submit
Please vote for my squirrel Thanks :) |
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The water in the umbrella is confusing. But this is beautiful!!!
If you could Vote Here please!! |
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Let me know what ya think, I'm open to anything.
Also, not sure if this should be listed as 5 or 3 colors...
there are 3 colors, White, Coral and a Blue/Gray.
there are 70% screens of the Blue/Gray and Coral colors which can be listed as 2 more colors ... Just not sure if screens are 100% acceptable.
Title ideas?