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faiz1984 on Apr 29 '08
any comment...
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SnorreRubin on Apr 29 '08
The murdered dolls needs to more obviously dolls. Maybe give them glasseyes!?
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luzge on Apr 29 '08
he he he :) good stuff, maybe too many heads.. and need more bodies.. try more colors for the tee
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faiz1984 on Apr 30 '08
change the design...
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ends-wealth corp. on Apr 30 '08
I don't see this as a shirt that would be printed. I can't see myself of too many other people wanting to wear it either. The illustration is not exceptional and there is nothing to be discovered or realized about the design. It's just straight violent. I'd much rather see a well illustrated smiling teddy bear doll hiding a knife behind his back. something less obvious or more witty to draw people into the graphic.
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luzge on Apr 30 '08
yes it's not cute in here common way, but i am sure there would be some people, that have the humor. I would wear it;) it's "rough", its different !
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faiz1984 on Apr 30 '08
made some change...
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JordanReed on Apr 30 '08
It took me a bit to actually notice that the teddy is hiding a knife behind his back, because there is alot going on, maybe put like a glimmer, or shine on the tip of the knife. I don't know just a thought. and those poles could be bedposts, if you wanted to add something more the picture but. I like it. its freaky cool.
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mr_justin_boyer on Apr 30 '08
i think its cool but the tongue sticking out doesnt go with the rest? stuffed animal dont have them... the bedposts would be sick though
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faiz1984 on May 01 '08
hmmm,thanks for the ideas...
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faiz1984 on May 01 '08
make some adjustments...
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JordanReed on May 01 '08
Great Job. On the Adjustments. I feel like its telling me more of a story then it was in the last version. I like it.
Lol I really like this, and would love to have my friends see me wearing it and Im sure they would be like what the heck, that is awesome! lol. |
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faiz1984 on May 01 '08
thanks...
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JordanReed on May 01 '08
you could try it on a grey,black,white,dark red,navy or dark blue, brown.
I had another idea to add a little bit of something to the picture as well, if you feel you like it and are up for making the changes. maybe if you had a front and back, this being either or. The opposite side could show a more peacful version of this, for instance the nice bed and nice stuffed animals all piled on top of each other as they would be if it was a childs room after there mother made their bed with all the stuffed animals. then on the other side, there is the truth and the horror of what really happens when we are not around. thats how are stuffed animals get destroyed not because of our pets. lol Well good luck I still really like it. |
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eladear on May 01 '08
It is definitely an improvement from the first one. Why are the sheets pink? Have you considered doing a white sheet version?
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zombietag on May 01 '08
yea the bed is way better. i think it should have some more normal toys around it like a toy truck maybe a jackinthebox or something.
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JordanReed on May 01 '08
It's awesome as is.
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nomixedcoinsplease on May 02 '08
maybe a kid sleeping in the bed - but it might be too much
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faiz1984 on May 09 '08
make changes to the bed...
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chul on May 09 '08
This bed is better! Very creepy
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stan360 on May 09 '08
cool! great concept! other dark colored tees would also work with this artwork ..... great job!
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pelesl on May 09 '08
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pelesl on May 09 '08
Also, maybe match the thicknesses of the outlines, because it kind of looks like you took the bed and bedstand from another project.
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Thorton on May 09 '08
I would switch the two pierced on the bedposts..as it is the one on the right looks to be sitting on the night stand
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faiz1984 on May 11 '08
some change...
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fiftyone on May 11 '08
This is not rally my style but I'm sure there will be people that will take to it !
Cant see what can be improved .. For the stuffed toy on the bottom left side? Any way to make the stuffing inside more fluffy and realistic? |
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Dawndarkharp on May 11 '08
I agree on the fluffy filling! There should be some spread around the room to suggest "blood".
Also, I think a heavier line weight would make this pop all that much more! |
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Ehud L on May 11 '08
Chucky lives! I like the concept. Agree with stuffing\blood comment. There should be a ton more dead bodies around the room. I also think that all the dead toys should be of mean and tough creatures - monsters, dragons, robots, etc. make the teddy the cuttest toy and it will be much more creepy. I dont like the knife tip. looks like he has a bee sting. With enough mayham around the room you wont need to show a knife at all. creepier. Good luck! crit mine?
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GALAMBO on May 11 '08
I like the concept. Maybe a bit of stuffing as they say. Or make it a little less explicit. For example: that it all looked normal and probably a dead body under the bed and the knife hidden behind the bear.
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phoenixwildfire on May 11 '08
the one bunney with the eye popped out, doesnt match the other animals. The others are all cutesy and it looks a bit dimented(sp?)!! I think you should have the stuffing like everyone says, be kewl to see some under the bed... sticking out of the one bears opening where the head should be and where the bunny's body is impaled by the bed post...
i love the murderous bear. you did a great job of making him cute but yet spooky.... |
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phoenixwildfire on May 11 '08
another thought I had that might be funny, to have a stuffed animal hiding in fear. like maybe behind the bars on the bed frame, etc. just a thought :)
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faiz1984 on May 11 '08
thanks for the ideas...
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DJStingRay on May 14 '08
I like it, the only way better is to make the bear look even more innocent.
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faiz1984 on May 16 '08
make some changes...
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Ehud L on May 16 '08
Still think there aught to be a lot more mayhem and dead dolls around the room. especially on the bed. it seems empty now.
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Ehud L on May 16 '08
Still think there aught to be a lot more mayhem and dead dolls around the room. especially on the bed. it seems empty now.
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RachelBaum on May 16 '08
I think the thing that makes it look incomplete is the big empty white space on the bed. I think maybe if you put a stuffed animal there then it would look complete. Just a suggestion because my eye is drawn to the big white empty space in the center. Other than that - the design is great - really well illustrated.
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emeraldtome on May 16 '08
Yeah, there's some blank spaces, and I think a little more stuffing strewn about would be good.
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faiz1984 on May 17 '08
add more dolls on the bed...
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Donkeykin on May 17 '08
now it is really disturbing and creepy
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geoffbrady on May 17 '08
Yeah, it's a good idea, but it's a bit OTT for a t-shirt for me. Perhaps make it a little more suggestive of fluffy violence rather than being so in-your-face. Nice execution though (see what I did there?!).
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Call_Me_Handsome on May 18 '08
looks good!
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Curiositees on May 18 '08
I like it! Maybe add some thicker outlines to enhance the cartooniness?
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DrObvious03 on May 18 '08
Nice and twisted but Id put it on a light colored shirt something almost cute to make it more shocking, like a turquoise one
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NJz Kollectionz on May 18 '08
I really like it, creeepy... I 2nd DrObvious on tee color. Also, you
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DrObvious03 on May 18 '08
he is holding a knife its behind his back
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faiz1984 on May 18 '08
thanks...
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Dawndarkharp on May 19 '08
Wow! This sure came a long way!! Great job :)
I agree, bold the lines and I think this baby is ready to submit!!! |
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k8mcm on May 19 '08
It's ready.
I agree about the shirt colour. Turquoise, even baby pink. Crit Mine? Don't hold back. I can handle it. |
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k8mcm on May 19 '08
Also - I like this bed frame better than the earlier one, but I preferred the bedding on the one with the single pillow.
The other bed seemed to suggest that a real person slept there, where as this one looks like one out of a bedding catalogue, which isn't as interesting. |
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Lonkiponk on May 19 '08
I think you added a few to many bodies now. The body under the bed made me miss the knife. Only after watching the previous versions did I see. so loos that maybe. I also think the composition might improve if you take the gray rabbit, and the doll on the table out of the picture.......
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faiz1984 on May 19 '08
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_cakeface on May 19 '08
it seems like the carnage is a different style than the bed that they're impailed on. it they were all the same style it would work better for me :) good idea though
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NJz Kollectionz on May 19 '08
I agree the knife is hard to see, since it's such a small detail. I like the new thicker black lines on the bed though, much better. maybe add some dents and slashes to the bed?
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Orcsbane on May 19 '08
I'd come right out with it and put the knife in his other hand. Much cooler.
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Orcsbane on May 19 '08
Add more loose stuffing to make it more gruesome. Or add trails of it to make it look like bodies were dragged around the room.
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Orcsbane on May 19 '08
More disembodied parts also, not just heads.
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SuperPope on May 19 '08
Weird...I like each version of this design successively less than the previous. Version 1 is the only one I'd wear. The doll looks cool in that, and it's obvious what's going on.
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faiz1984 on May 19 '08
some change...
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Mr. Raab on May 20 '08
ok, I dont want to be mean, but this has just been done way too many times, but hey, it sells right?
anyways, I think you need a totally different colored shirt, something a bit darker and duller to meet the mood, like a grayish blue., also, I think you need more stuffing. http://www.threadless.com/critique/344462/Home_Sweet_Gnome |
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Lonkiponk on May 20 '08
better.
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orangehead on May 20 '08
yeah mr. raab's got it down:
darker shirt and more stuffing. is there anything "cuter" than a knife though? |
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green_walrus on May 21 '08
Whoa. That looks really cute, and at the same time extremely demented. I like it. The teddy bear is holding the knife behind his back, yes? You don't have to do this, but its just an idea that came to mind: What if the teddy bear was sitting in front of the bed to make him seem more inanimate like a real teddy bear would, but he still had the knife in his hand. Whether or not you want to do that is up to you. I like this!
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faiz1984 on May 21 '08
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Lokian on May 21 '08
I like it - verrrrry creepy!
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rona1dd on May 21 '08
I dig it man ....looks great!...Each version had something I liked but the V11 is the cleanest of them all.
Check mine out and let me know what you think: http://www.threadless.com/critique/21330/Secret_Asian_Man |
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khaag on May 21 '08
lol, this is wicked! Maybe put the knife in his other hand? Although I like it either way.
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