any comment...

The murdered dolls needs to more obviously dolls. Maybe give them glasseyes!?

he he he :) good stuff, maybe too many heads.. and need more bodies.. try more colors for the tee

change the design...

I don't see this as a shirt that would be printed. I can't see myself of too many other people wanting to wear it either. The illustration is not exceptional and there is nothing to be discovered or realized about the design. It's just straight violent. I'd much rather see a well illustrated smiling teddy bear doll hiding a knife behind his back. something less obvious or more witty to draw people into the graphic.

yes it's not cute in here common way, but i am sure there would be some people, that have the humor. I would wear it;) it's "rough", its different !

made some change...

It took me a bit to actually notice that the teddy is hiding a knife behind his back, because there is alot going on, maybe put like a glimmer, or shine on the tip of the knife. I don't know just a thought. and those poles could be bedposts, if you wanted to add something more the picture but. I like it. its freaky cool.

i think its cool but the tongue sticking out doesnt go with the rest? stuffed animal dont have them... the bedposts would be sick though

hmmm,thanks for the ideas...

make some adjustments...

Great Job. On the Adjustments. I feel like its telling me more of a story then it was in the last version. I like it.



Lol I really like this, and would love to have my friends see me wearing it and Im sure they would be like what the heck, that is awesome! lol.

thanks...

any ideas on what color for the tee should i use...

you could try it on a grey,black,white,dark red,navy or dark blue, brown.



I had another idea to add a little bit of something to the picture as well, if you feel you like it and are up for making the changes. maybe if you had a front and back, this being either or. The opposite side could show a more peacful version of this, for instance the nice bed and nice stuffed animals all piled on top of each other as they would be if it was a childs room after there mother made their bed with all the stuffed animals. then on the other side, there is the truth and the horror of what really happens when we are not around. thats how are stuffed animals get destroyed not because of our pets. lol



Well good luck I still really like it.

It is definitely an improvement from the first one. Why are the sheets pink? Have you considered doing a white sheet version?

yea the bed is way better. i think it should have some more normal toys around it like a toy truck maybe a jackinthebox or something.



and i agree w/ the sheets statment by eladear



http://www.threadless.com/critique/19709/Silhouettes_from_Pallet_Town

It's awesome as is.

maybe a kid sleeping in the bed - but it might be too much

make changes to the bed...

This bed is better! Very creepy

cool! great concept! other dark colored tees would also work with this artwork ..... great job!

Ha! Nice one! I would consider making it a bit smaller on the shirt, though.



What about mine?

Also, maybe match the thicknesses of the outlines, because it kind of looks like you took the bed and bedstand from another project.

I would switch the two pierced on the bedposts..as it is the one on the right looks to be sitting on the night stand

some change...

This is not rally my style but I'm sure there will be people that will take to it !



Cant see what can be improved ..

For the stuffed toy on the bottom left side?

Any way to make the stuffing inside more fluffy and realistic?

I agree on the fluffy filling! There should be some spread around the room to suggest "blood".

Also, I think a heavier line weight would make this pop all that much more!

Chucky lives! I like the concept. Agree with stuffing\blood comment. There should be a ton more dead bodies around the room. I also think that all the dead toys should be of mean and tough creatures - monsters, dragons, robots, etc. make the teddy the cuttest toy and it will be much more creepy. I dont like the knife tip. looks like he has a bee sting. With enough mayham around the room you wont need to show a knife at all. creepier. Good luck! crit mine?

I like the concept. Maybe a bit of stuffing as they say. Or make it a little less explicit. For example: that it all looked normal and probably a dead body under the bed and the knife hidden behind the bear.

I like the illustrations, nice work!

the one bunney with the eye popped out, doesnt match the other animals. The others are all cutesy and it looks a bit dimented(sp?)!! I think you should have the stuffing like everyone says, be kewl to see some under the bed... sticking out of the one bears opening where the head should be and where the bunny's body is impaled by the bed post...



i love the murderous bear. you did a great job of making him cute but yet spooky....

another thought I had that might be funny, to have a stuffed animal hiding in fear. like maybe behind the bars on the bed frame, etc. just a thought :)

thanks for the ideas...

I like it, the only way better is to make the bear look even more innocent.

make some changes...

Still think there aught to be a lot more mayhem and dead dolls around the room. especially on the bed. it seems empty now.

check mine out?

Still think there aught to be a lot more mayhem and dead dolls around the room. especially on the bed. it seems empty now.

check mine out?

I think the thing that makes it look incomplete is the big empty white space on the bed. I think maybe if you put a stuffed animal there then it would look complete. Just a suggestion because my eye is drawn to the big white empty space in the center. Other than that - the design is great - really well illustrated.

Yeah, there's some blank spaces, and I think a little more stuffing strewn about would be good.



Awesome and creepy design...

add more dolls on the bed...

now it is really disturbing and creepy

Yeah, it's a good idea, but it's a bit OTT for a t-shirt for me. Perhaps make it a little more suggestive of fluffy violence rather than being so in-your-face. Nice execution though (see what I did there?!).

looks good!

I like it! Maybe add some thicker outlines to enhance the cartooniness?

Nice and twisted but Id put it on a light colored shirt something almost cute to make it more shocking, like a turquoise one

I really like it, creeepy... I 2nd DrObvious on tee color. Also, you

could consider making killer dolls eyes red or have him holding

a knife?

he is holding a knife its behind his back

thanks...

Wow! This sure came a long way!! Great job :)

I agree, bold the lines and I think this baby is ready to submit!!!

It's ready.



I agree about the shirt colour. Turquoise, even baby pink.



Crit Mine? Don't hold back. I can handle it.

Also - I like this bed frame better than the earlier one, but I preferred the bedding on the one with the single pillow.



The other bed seemed to suggest that a real person slept there, where as this one looks like one out of a bedding catalogue, which isn't as interesting.

I think you added a few to many bodies now. The body under the bed made me miss the knife. Only after watching the previous versions did I see. so loos that maybe. I also think the composition might improve if you take the gray rabbit, and the doll on the table out of the picture.......

thanks...

it seems like the carnage is a different style than the bed that they're impailed on. it they were all the same style it would work better for me :) good idea though

I agree the knife is hard to see, since it's such a small detail. I like the new thicker black lines on the bed though, much better. maybe add some dents and slashes to the bed?

I'd come right out with it and put the knife in his other hand. Much cooler.

Add more loose stuffing to make it more gruesome. Or add trails of it to make it look like bodies were dragged around the room.

More disembodied parts also, not just heads.

Weird...I like each version of this design successively less than the previous. Version 1 is the only one I'd wear. The doll looks cool in that, and it's obvious what's going on.

some change...

ok, I dont want to be mean, but this has just been done way too many times, but hey, it sells right?



anyways, I think you need a totally different colored shirt, something a bit darker and duller to meet the mood, like a grayish blue., also, I think you need more stuffing.



http://www.threadless.com/critique/344462/Home_Sweet_Gnome

better.

yeah mr. raab's got it down:

darker shirt and more stuffing.



is there anything "cuter" than a knife though?

Whoa. That looks really cute, and at the same time extremely demented. I like it. The teddy bear is holding the knife behind his back, yes? You don't have to do this, but its just an idea that came to mind: What if the teddy bear was sitting in front of the bed to make him seem more inanimate like a real teddy bear would, but he still had the knife in his hand. Whether or not you want to do that is up to you. I like this!

thanks...

I like it - verrrrry creepy!

I dig it man ....looks great!...Each version had something I liked but the V11 is the cleanest of them all.



Check mine out and let me know what you think:



http://www.threadless.com/critique/21330/Secret_Asian_Man

lol, this is wicked! Maybe put the knife in his other hand? Although I like it either way.



Critique mine please?

try with other tee color...

that's cool. maybe the knife needs to be slightly more obvious.

i agree with making the knife more visible, I think its pretty good otherwise

this will give me nightmares. i'm going to go hide all my stuffed animals :)

thanks...

any other suggestions?...

Use safety paper scissors instead of a knife. Might open your audience a little, plus it'd be kinda funny. The piece on the right looks like it's floating.

seeing a crit for the first time on the 12th version is always fun. You've come a long way and I think it's looking awesome!

first off I think the safety scissors idea would be funny and go along with the cuteness. But I do see the creepyness that the knife keeps with the piece. Looking at the first couple versions I think I'd keep the knife personally. I also think that the decision is yours alone depending on what you were wanting.

Second of all, what if the lamp was on and was casting some dramatic shadows?

This is awesome! It's really come a long way. :)



I agree that the knife should be more obvious. At first glance, I had no idea who murdered all the stuffed animals!



I think what would really finish this off would be to add more dimension overall. The drawing feels 2-dimensional, and adding some dark and light (highlights and shadows, etc.) would really make it pop. Good luck!!



This is mine if you get a chance:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/21385/Change_of_Heart

i submit this version to try my luck...

here the link to the design...



muRder Doll



i hope i can get a decent score...

It looks awesome. I think you have it down on the last couple of versions.

I like it on the grey or the black the best. I'd say the only thing that it could use is a little more stuffing strewn around the room.



Critique mine too please?

yea agree, i like grey!

bigger knife =)



dark grey



critique mine?

I think the dark grey tee is best.



knife maybe more pronounced, everyone is dead so no need to hide it.



And wouldn't.. after this whole massacre the bed be at least a little messed up??

and maybe some color on the bedding..

I really really like this as it is



Critique Just One!