I have changed my critique called "Story about them" to this.

Comment please :)

Are they supposed to look like they are coming through the shirt? Maybe the shape they are crawling out of shouldn't be so circular...

yes they are coming out :)

anything else ?

I am thing of changing in to a bit less round shape and maybe a bit smaller.

I could make in to the heard shape and place it top left, would be like love is coming out(in a strange way :) ..

I would love to see a couple that have already fallen out (since it looks like everyone is squishing each other) down below. I like the two you isolated in the preview down on the right. Maybe trying to climb off of each other and straighten up. Of course you will have to be careful it doesn't look like they are doing something else. Just a thought. I think it is the colors that are distracting me the most. the green especially. But my daughter just walked into and likes it. She asks if the white ones are ghostes (she is six), she said it was scary. Not that you are designing it for her, but that was just a reaction. Another thought would be to take them all and put them in a ring around the bottom (not your pushing through I realize) but it might be interesting to see what they would look like all together ringing the entire shirt. I would say keep going. :-)

thanks for the comments, appreciate it! I’ll see what I can do.

hit me :)

I kind of liked the first version better.

This is cool, I like this version better than the first, the colours and placement are much better. My only feedback would be that a couple of the bears at the back don't look like they're climbing out of the t-shirt, they seem to be just standing on the black hole in the shirt. Other than that I think it looks cool! =)

thanks ;)

Brown is best. I like this a lot (but can't see first version b/c my

computer sucks that bad:(



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