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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
What do you guys think?
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hijohnmark on Apr 22 '08
This is SO funny.
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
This obviously isn't finished, do people think I should make the peaches rounder? I guess they kind of look like hearts right now/
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NuNuveau on Apr 22 '08
Cute idea :) I would like to see a little more variation in line weight...and the greenery on the tree looks like the same shape copied several times over...maybe ad a little variation? Also, I agree with you about making the peaches a little less heart shaped
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
well you're right about the greenery... will work on that, also I'll make the stroke overall heavier.
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
On yellow, lost the crappy leaves
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I R SL8ER on Apr 22 '08
maybe have the tree in grass and the grass fade out
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
yup, forgot to add that before I subbed this
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Major Island on Apr 22 '08
funny. and actually i've really seen some pink asian "bread" that looks like an ass
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musicman1891 on Apr 22 '08
i agree with the grass. it looks like the tree in no where.
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NuNuveau on Apr 22 '08
I like these leaves better, but I'd like to see more of them....I miss the green....
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funny but it's like to see more detail in the art
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
ugh... detail... I've been doing all this with a laptop trackpad. Will work on it all.
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
Thanks for all the comments!
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joycewu on Apr 22 '08
Added some more detail to the kid, brought some more green in and added ground detail.
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Ehud L on Apr 23 '08
funny idea. I think you need to find a way to bring out the peaches and the kid's butt. maybe create some dark\light contrast between them and the shirt color. also, I'd try to make the green patch on the tree look different than the green patch of the grass.
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zombietag on Apr 23 '08
i think its good but i want his hair to be more hair like and not like a skull cap. thats jus my opinion tho. good idea
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slevine1022 on Apr 23 '08
i agree with the hair thing and maybe extend the red a little further down on the butt? this is so cute though.
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joycewu on Apr 23 '08
Added a fringe so the kids hair looks less like a skullcap,and added darker shaded leaves to make the peaches pop more.
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EricDiaz on Apr 23 '08
i like this, heh.. hmm, the leaf above the boy i would rotate and put it behind him so it looks more like the rest of them. Maybe even add another character, a laughing squirrel, or bird, ooo a butterfly with the same colors and shape of a peach sitting on the ground, like it fell out of the tree. Looking good!
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joycewu on Apr 23 '08
Thank you, I was thinking about adding a little brown rabbit looking up at him from the ground. I will see what putting the leaf there looks like.
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Ehud L on Apr 23 '08
looks better. I think you dont need the black contour around the tree green. the shape and darker color is enough. losing the contour will help bring out the peaches and butt. (I feel gay writing this) I think you should lighten the peaches\butt colors and add a little more saturation to them. this will further bring them out. they're the main subject of this design so they must be the first thing that pops into the eye. It's basically a game of ballancing the colors. brown rabbit sounds like a good addition.
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DreamAboutCake on Apr 23 '08
I completely agree with Eric, good job. Please take a look at Pay for nothing thanks.
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Ehud L on Apr 23 '08
oooh how bout some birds pecking at the peaches with one bird sitting on the branch near the kid, looking at his butt
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joycewu on Apr 24 '08
That sounds like a really good idea Ehud, I'll try that and a rabbit and see if it's too much.
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joycewu on Apr 24 '08
Got rid of the outline on the leaves. What do you think of the animals? Too much? Too little?
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Ehud L on Apr 24 '08
at least one or two more birds interacting with the real peaches is necessary in my opinion. better without the outline but the negative line is annoying, lose it. if you want to create some more detail on the trees leaves I'd use the grass green to create some highlights. the peaches are still not popping enough!
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joycewu on Apr 24 '08
lol, you'll get a credit anyway
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EricDiaz on Apr 24 '08
lol Ehud, you get credit by helping out a fellow artist!
Ok, i liked it better with the outline because now its the only thing without one. I feel like the rabbit should be on the left side of the tree looking up at the boy. That will help the composition too splitting up the characters in your design. Some highlights as Ehud said couldn't hurt either, good luck with this one! |
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Ehud L on Apr 24 '08
eric, check out your sun idea back at the fox hunt:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/19165/The_Fox_Hunt I like helping fellow artists. it gives meaning to my wretched existense. as for the outline - joycewu, if you use it, you'll have to strengthen the peaches colors to make them pop. |
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joycewu on Apr 24 '08
For those of you hitting don't submit, actually anyone who votes at all, I'd like to know why.
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joycewu on Apr 24 '08
Actually I am a little worried that people won't like this because they think it's too voyeur, is that the case?
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Wozzy on Apr 24 '08
is that a fish ?
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ecafhtroneht on Apr 24 '08
The peaches don't stand out very much. Maybe brighten up the colors.
Could you comment on mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/19053/Sleeping_Polar_Bear |
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NuNuveau on Apr 24 '08
I like that you added the greenery back in...much better than a bare tree (I wasn't sure how it could grow peaches if it couldn't grow leaves :) I agree with more birds. And maybe place a few more of the outlined leaves around in the tree, not just by the peaches.
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NuNuveau on Apr 24 '08
And I don't think it's voyeur, it's cute :) But maybe move to bird away just a bit so his beak isn't almost in the kids butt :)
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kendallsch on Apr 24 '08
This is cute. I do think the bird looks more like a fish, and I agree with NuNuveau that you should maybe move the bird. I like the bunny looking up. Good color choices too. This is really nitpicky, but could you remove the three little black lines that show through the green part of the tree? I know they are branches coming up, but you don't really need those teeny pieces showing through. Nice design!
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joycewu on Apr 25 '08
Ok.. Added highlights, gave the peaches a more saturated orange color, added a bird, changed bird color, moved the bird. Decided not to move the rabbit because I like that it looks like the boy and the rabbit are looking at each other, tried more leaves, but I think more makes it look too busy.
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turtle-lover on Apr 25 '08
The kid doesn't look like he's stuck on the branch, just kind of floating. I would take off the leaf that is there and have the branch sticking in his pants. Or you can give the rabbit a magic wand and make it look like he's doing levicorpus on the kid. That would be funny :)
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joycewu on Apr 25 '08
Hahah!! Levicorpus... Yeah I should fix my layers
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
Made a few minor adjustments to get the kid to look like he's hanging. Also it was mentioned to me that the birds distracted from the main focus (the peaches and the kid), what do you guys think? You can see the birds in v6.
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Kimicub on Apr 26 '08
Cute design. I'd change the shape of the leaves, a bit more round rather than squiggly, can't describe myself properly. Otherwise it's cute and I can see people wearing it! :)
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Kimicub on Apr 26 '08
And I'd keep the birds - I don't think they take away too much from the design.
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TheaterOfMemory on Apr 26 '08
I just don't get why a kid (with a red bottom) is stuck in a tree. I know it is supposed to be cute, but it makes me think of child abuse. sorry
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
What I was thinking was that he climbed a tree, tried to grab a peach and slipped. I brought the offensive point of view up a few versions ago, I guess not enough people expressed their opinion then.
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TheaterOfMemory on Apr 26 '08
Oh, sorry, didn't look back on other versions. just expressing my reaction. no offense.
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
None taken, I'm glad you voiced your opinion.
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
Even though I disagree :)
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TheaterOfMemory on Apr 26 '08
Have the child holding a peach and that would be more clear :-)
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
What about a peach on the ground where the rabbit is?
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TheaterOfMemory on Apr 26 '08
that is also a scenario that tells a story about what is going on. :-)
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
Alright, will do for the next version.
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joycewu on Apr 26 '08
Put a peach on the ground for more of a narrative and put the birds back in.
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JJtheJetPlane on Apr 26 '08
This is so cute!!
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TheaterOfMemory on Apr 26 '08
For balance, I might move the peach more under him with the same green shadow and perhaps change the dandelion's positions a bit (perhaps the dandelion near the boy's side detracts from the balance?).
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joycewu on Apr 27 '08
Moved the peach a little and placed it on a shirt. What do you guys think of the placement? And is there anything I should add to the design before I submit?
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joycewu on Apr 27 '08
Put it on Manos's flash template. Anything?
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joycewu on Apr 27 '08
I'm particularly interested in what people think of the placement.
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mfcassias on Apr 27 '08
I love ittttttttttttttttttttttttt. Good idea of making it front x back. But i dont like yellow tees. Its a personal mania hehehe. i´d love on sand. Thanks for your critics on my tee
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always like when designs are on the front ánd on the back.
but they're quite rare on threadless..... |
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joycewu on Apr 27 '08
thanks guys, do you think there's anything I need to do to finish this or is it sub ready?
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ecafhtroneht on Apr 27 '08
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joycewu on Apr 27 '08
added alternate color
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joycewu on Apr 27 '08
Alright, this is the final version unless someone can tell me something that's glaringly wrong.
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thatindiekid. on Apr 27 '08
this is cute. i like it. i think ready to submit.
critique mine? http://www.threadless.com/critique/17666/The_World_Is_At_Your_Fingertips |
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minkler on Apr 27 '08
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0r4ng3 on Apr 29 '08
i think add one more dandelion to the bottom, just to brighten it up a bit.
Great progress otherwise! |
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cyanidee on Apr 29 '08
millions of peaches, peaches for me, submit it!
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joycewu on May 05 '08
This is up for voting at http://www.threadless.com/submission/161084/Peach_Tree
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